写了作文没有人修改吗？请戳我！！

晨依Jacqueline

谢谢Nenluky的修改！！！

Crystaljoy

诚邀认真的小晨依加入斑竹队伍！

浅吟天

顶一个lS那句话

Saturn光环

晨依姐，马上要考试了，求修改作文哈。谢谢啦。。
http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-784271-1-1.html

晨依Jacqueline

晨依姐，马上要考试了，求修改作文哈。谢谢啦。。
http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-784271-1-1.html

-- by 会员 Saturn光环 (2012/11/16 14:31:04)

回复到你的帖子里面啦~
最近有点忙，如果有问题再给我留言吧~

Saturn光环

晨依姐，考试完了吗。。还等着你给我指点作文呢。。。还是老地方哈，嘿嘿。。
http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-784271-1-1.html

超级无敌小鹤鹤

终于把晨依这个帖子挖出来了。。。没写小分队题目但是想要互改的看过来！！！

wakesleep2011

大牛们，恳请大牛们详细指出问题在哪里，我的作文应该是至少25分以上，但3次了，最好22分，很懊恼。
我想知道是不是单词拼写的问题。因为以前的托福老师说过，现在这篇文章的拼写错误，都用括号标出来了。
也请大牛告诉我该怎么克服拼写问题。

wakesleep2011

这是tpo26的综合写作

wakesleep2011

The lecture rejects the ideas presented in the reading passage that the zebra mussel's invasion cannot be stopped and will threat to other fish populations .In the professor's idea, the zebra mussel's inviasion (invasion) is able to control, and it is still not clear that if sebra (Zebra) mussel is a serious threat to other fish sepiecies. (species)

In the first place, the lecture does not agree with the first point made in the reading that mussel arrived and colonize around North America by surviving in the fresh water used to balance cargos. The professor contends that with knowledges (knowledge) required for now, people can empty those fresh water and fullfill (fulfill) ocean (ocean)water, and the salt of occean (ocean) can kill mussels. Therefore, human transportation would not take mussels to North America, as what it did to Europe.

In the second place, the lecture goes on to refute the claim in the reading that mussel will dominate a new hababit (habitat) after arriving. Actually, the professor argues, what happened in Europe was, mussels reproduce rapidly in the begining (beginning), but those natrual sepieces (species) quickly found mussel as good food and changed their habitats to predate mussels. Those mussels ate a lot of mussels, and stop likely trend of mussels' domination.

In the third place, the lecture challenges that mussels leads to a decline in overall fish population. On the contrary, the lecture reminds us the overall fish population is likely to increase in entirely possibilities. For example, mussels produce new generations in bottom of the river, and many fish species living there feed on those new generations of mussels, thus increase the population of those species. Although, the population of plankton eaters will decerase.(decrease)

All the information above point zebra mussles (mussels) as an unlike threat to other species.