Saturn的作文贴，磨练自己的意志，求各位大神重炮轰击。。。

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先开一贴，初来乍到Chasedream，看了很多前辈都把自己备战toefl作文的经历挂在了网上，看到了，晨依，鸟儿，霏霏等各位大神小神，大牛小牛，等等把你们的进步都留在了论坛上，觉得对我是很大的触动。
我也想要加油，以前辈为榜样奋斗奋斗。。。。。。。
于是有了这个帖子，励志要把toefl作文练到25分以上。
马上跟上作文贴。。。各位大神不用客气的拍砖吧。。。

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11.15独立作文：Agree or disagree: your job has greater happiness than your social life.

  Opinions on this topic is diveged in two directions. Some think that we can get greater happiness in our social life due to the pleasant atmosphere where you can meet your friends and have chat with them. Yet I think social life is just a break during the work, so the most time you will devote into, the sense of achievement you will get, the potential abilities you will discover is during your job. Thus your job will recieve more happiness than your social life.
 Your Jobs will give you a sense of achievement that social life can not give. Take entertainment business as a example, one of most famous singer Taylor Swift. She is gifted person can put into words her feelings in a way that instantly become ralatable to everyone. The success of her career has been approved by so many her fans. She is the one create the happiness, the one enjoy creating happiness.
  It's happy to live in a place where everyone want to make contribution to. At infomation age, the pace of producing become faster and faster, which requires us to challenge ourselves to work harder. Otherwise, you may lose the oppotunities to get promoted or make money. It's really good for everyone, and it's fair for eveyone. The competition simply striped away the lower productive system, and make the way for the highly productive system. In this case, capable people can make our city a better place to live thus their work will earn more approval from the citizens.
 Challenge will dig out our potential talent. Human resources is like natural resources, it is often buried very deep. You have to look for it, not just hanging around on the surface. Challenge simply give us a chance to achieve a goal within a certain time, however it also followed the discovery of your ability and compliment from others. For example, one of my work is to design a tea house base on the requirement, it takes me 3 days to look for all the material in library about Architecture, and another 3 days to draw a first draft base on the right construction. After the office hour, it takes me another 3 days to revise the proposal. During the presentation, the applause after present a delicate house to teacher, All the work pay off and I also realize how much I enjoy the creating process.
 In conclusion, our job is an essential way we can feed back to our society. We can't live without society ,so that everyone need to show their spirits on their own position. Thus, to get your job done better is a thing you should be proud of, is a thing you should put you heart in, is the happiest thing you can do to your society.

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自己修改了一下啊，貌似还是觉得有些句子太长，求大神纠正哈  
11.15独立作文：Agree or disagree: your job has greater happiness than your social life.

   Opinions on this topic is divided into two directions. Some think that we can get greater happiness in our social life due to the pleasant atmosphere where you can meet your friends and have a please chat, some think social life is just a break during the work, so your job ultimately contribute to estimation of your performance in the society whether good or not, which means if you work hard, you will receive more fun than you ever had. I agree with the latter one based on the reasons follow behind. The most of time you will devote into, the sense of achievement you will get, the potential abilities you will discover is during your job. Thus your job will receive more happiness than your social life.
 Your Jobs will give you a sense of achievement that social life can not give. Take entertainment business as an example, one of most famous singer Taylor Swift. She is a gifted person can put into words her feelings in a way that instantly become relatable to everyone. Her music is very detail-oriented, that is to say writing normal life in her unique angle, tell stories about everyone The success of her career has been approved by so many her fans. She is the one create the happiness, the one enjoy creating happiness.
  It's happy to live in a place where everyone want to make contribution to. At information age, the pace of producing become faster and faster, which requires us to challenge ourselves to work harder. Otherwise, you may lose oppotunities to get promoted or make money. It's really good for everyone, and it's fair for eveyone. The competition simply striped away the lower productive system, and make the way for the highly productive system. In this case, capable people can make our city a better place to live thus citizens willingly to accept the better service they offer.
 Challenge will dig out our potential talent. Human resources is like natural resources, it is often buried very deep. You have to look for it, not just hanging around on the surface. Challenge simply give us a chance to achieve a goal within a certain time, however it also followed the discovery of your ability and compliment from others. For example, one of my work is to design a tea house base on the requirement, it contains 9 books of reading material to analyze, 3 days to come up with a first draft on 3D model including measurable details, and also to revise several times according to teachers advice. The whole process lasts for a week. It's nothing better than watching your idea come into reality. After revise I can see the details on the windows and the wave curve on the roof, it's a beautiful traditional house and also I realize how much I enjoy the creating process.
 In conclusion, our job is an essential way we can feed back to our society. Consider the alternative, the society also need everyone of us We can't live without society ,so that everyone need to show their spirits on their own positions. Thus, to do a great job is the thing you should be proud of, is the thing you should put you heart in, is the happiest thing you can do to your society.

晨依Jacqueline

提了一点建议~~在附件里面。
以后直接在小分队互改就好了哦~
期待你的进步~~~

Saturn光环

哇，想不到这片拙文晨依姐还给了这么细致修改和评语啊，要是全世界的英语老师都有这细心的态度何愁英语学不好啊。
I will take your advice seriously. Thank you very much .You are awesome.

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来一篇综合写作TPO18
   The reading material and the speaker both concern about the issue that Torreya Taxifoha started to die out. Eventhough the reading material have some solutions to the problem, the professor in the lecture didn' t agree. Here are three points that professors challenge the solutions comed up in the reading material.
   First, one of solutions in the material suggest to solve the problem by choosing the proper place in Florida that can reestablish the Torreya. While the speaker challenge that by offering the fact that Florida may suffer from drier and drier mrcroclimate due to global warm, which makes Florida a unsustainable place for reestablishing the Torreya.
  Second, passage come up with idea to relocating the Torreya to the North, a warmer place might suit  for Torreya. The  professor reject this idea by concerning the relocation might cause unpredictable trouble like black tree relocation, spreading quickly that almost make the local species extincted.
  Third, last method to the issue is to preserve the Torreya in the research center. Also the professor strongly contradict it because there are not enough capacity in research center to preserve all species in the long period of time.
   In conclusion, the lecturer find none of the solutions in the material is plausible due to its fundamental flaw in each of them.

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昨天1118一战作文写的速度好慢啊。半天才打出来300字，勉强及格，遥望1208。
好好努力。。。跟上今天作文贴。。。

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1119 It is more important to choose friends that have fun with than to choose friends that will help you when you need them


 Friends is strong bond that connect people. Human are social animal, we need friends to share feelings, communicate the information to live a better life. We can't live without friendships. But some people say it is more important to choose friends that have fun with than to choose friends that will help you when you need them. Yet I hold the opposite opinions. This essay will talk about reason the friends will help you when you need them is more important.
 Our life isn't always so easy, troubles can come to us at any time, it's crucial to have friends will help when you need them. For example, in business field, it's easy to meet friends only care about your state and your wealth, these friends can have good time together, if you take these people as your friends and build solid relationship with them you will make mistakes. Cause fair-weather friends may not help you when you in troubles, these will cause a disaster on your career, and you have no one to blame.
 Friends having fun together may not tell truth In order to catering your temper. Sometimes bliss feeling will blind you from the simple and obvious word from real friends. For example, a leader should hear information all around not just good things in order to preparing for the dangers income. It's dangerous to have a group of people who always cater to you. As time goes by, one can be spoiled by the wine and meat that can't take anything doesn't sound good. However, the truth seldom sound good. A retrievable disaster may happen because a leader may not realize what is truth.
 Making Friends just have fun with is not good for maintaining a long time friendship. But friends always need time to get know each other, There is a quitessential example in video games. If you have friends just enjoy winning together, he may start to blame each other when you loss, which will constitute a situation that no one would like to play with him.
 As I adequately put, have a friends when you need them is more essential. Fire tries gold is what adversity tries friends. So one can't recognize real friends until in trouble.

Saturn光环

恩，1118考的就是这篇作文了，回忆了一下大概就是这么写的了吧。。。貌似还需要努力啊。。求狠批。。
Agree or disagree:university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students

  University is representation of high education, family want their kids go to college to change their life. While university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students is on debate. Some think research can create great benefits for school and also bring a great reputation for the school, so teachers should spend more time in the lab. Others point out that passing along knowledge is the basic duty of a school. I agree with the latter based on the reasons give bellow.
  First, Communication it's important in university because that's where the innovational idea comes out. Teaching in the classroom simply create an environment that teachers and students can learn from each other. I remember in my Architecture class, our teacher hold an exhibition of the projects we've done and ask each of our project managers to present their idea about the original idea about the whole task in front of all students. While our teacher just sitting there and listening every person on the stage, The boundry between students and teachers seem disappear, every 'future manager' was excited speaking. The atmosphere are running high, and it's good experience to have everyone immerse in the classroom.
  Second, Teaching also gives students and teachers an oppotunity to get know each other. On one hand, we students need to learn more outside the classroom, If we can have more teachers at classroom, we can have wider perspective to choose the field which we willing to study further. It will ultimately contribute to getting more chance to work for the teacher or getting internship. On the other hand, teachers also can know more about their students and maybe select someone he thinks was capable to be his apprentice help in the lab or in regular work. Both of them need a chance to meet each other, classroom is an idea place.

 
 As I adequately put, teaching in the classroom has significant impact on both teachers and students, so it is necessary for teacher to spend more time in the classroom.

晨依Jacqueline

还是尽量在大本营占座互改哈~加油！