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kris灿

9月16日 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should choose the same career as their parents. Use specific examples to support your answer.
提纲：不同意

1、对于父母职业有兴趣的人，虽然可能是好事，但会带来压力和限制
2、对于无兴趣的人，是一种折磨或者做出成绩的可能性小
3、选行业时比起父母的工作，更有参考价值的是一个行业的发展现状及前景

正文：


When it comes to the long-existing issue of job choosing, some people hold that children should choose the same career as their parents, while others believe that this kind of decision will not benefit children's future development. As far as I am concerned, parents' jobs shouldn't be a definite reference while choosing careers, since it is interest and career development prospect that people should consider carefully on doing decisions of （后面应该加句子吧）choosing jobs.


True, it is quite likely that children has（have） the same interest in certain areas as their parents do because they may accept subtle influence from their parents during their process of growing. For example, both Madam Curie and her daughter Irene won Nobel Prize for their great contribution to chemistry. Under this condition,（According to this condition） having the same career as one's parents is actually beneficial to him or her. However, there also remains a possibility that(去掉that加，) children who work in the same field as their parents may feel great（more） pressure（s）from their parents' achievements though they do have interest in this（the same） field. If this happened, children's development would be affected and restricted under the shadow of their reputed parents.


Above(,) we just talk about the circumstance that children have the same interest with their parents. What if they actually are not very fond of their parents' careers? What if they select their occupations just due to their parents'(parents by) force（force如果用名词的话貌似更多用于武装强制，by force是强制就更好地表达）? Then children may well feel bored（不懂啊，亲不理解 你想怎么用well） about the related knowledge and do badly in their courses. For instance, some people in my university do not like their majors but (去掉but)because of their parents' orders they cannot change to（去掉to） majors（and choose what）they like. Eventually absenteeism and poor grades often come along with them, which then results in the emergence of a vicious circle.


Besides interest, considered should be career development prospects(亲，我倒装不是很好，但是觉得呢这么用貌似不是很合适) and its status quo of technical level prior to parents' careers. As rapid development has taken place in varied aspects of society, shouldn't it be necessary to take into account the panorama and its future of a vocation? If children enter a field which has little space for further enhancement, even with their parents' aid as practitioners in the same field, children won't go too far in this sphere.


In conclusion, I personally just do not quite agree with the statement that children should choose the same career as their parents for the reasons above. Electing professions is great turning point in children's development; rather than consider parents' careers,（这句话放前还是放后是不同的意思，如果放中间会有歧义，并且逻辑不太对啊） children should follow their interest and make decisions regarding their own foundations as well as the tendency of different crafts（亲，你是不是要表达技能的意思呢，crafts是工艺的意思也是工艺技能的意思太片面了，注意掌握单词的用法）.(427字)
亲 你逻辑不是很清楚啊，再就是话有点螺旋式重复的感觉，加油，纯属个人意见，有不对的望见谅。

safeandsound

In the reading material the author holds that the "let it burn" policy should be replaced due to the consequence of the 1988 Yellowstone fire. Meanwhile the professor argues against the author from three aspects, plantation diversity, population recovery and tourism revival.

【第一段写的很好~学习一下、、本人永远都一句话带过、、】

To begin with, though the article mentions that Yellowstone fires resulted in large damage to vegetation, the professor asserts that the diversity of vegetation has already increased（不知道介个时态用的对不对、、） after the fire. This is because the scorches were soon supplanted by new smaller plants and opportunities were given to some small plants which originally cannot （要变成could not 吧、）survive in this area.



Besides, the passage states that the park's wildlife suffered much from the fire. The lecture, however, insists that the fire virtually brought new population to the park, since the new plants there provided an ideal habitat for some small animals such as rabbits and hares, which leaded to the increase in predators that depended on them for food, thereby a stronger food chain eventuallyformed.



Last(可以用last单独开头吗？表示没见过这样的用法、、), the author of the material thinks that the fires undermined the tourism value of the park because fewer visitors came to the park, which is challenged by the professor. She points out that since this kind of fire does not happen every year, visitors came back next year and Yellowstone has never seen such fire（such fire has never been seen in Yellowstone）.(我也不太清楚要详细到什么程度，但是觉得应该说一下这是由于各种偶成因素引起的，什么Strong wind一类的)

【好吧，表示我最后一段听错了、、（已订正）受了之前看过的一篇文章的影响、、



整理体来说不错、、而且时态用的很准确，听力也挺好的、、继续努力哦！

SophieS123

谢谢kris灿和safeandsound的批改~

SophieS123

9月17日 综合 TPO20

A statement made in the material is that genetically modified trees can benefit both farmers and other wild trees. However, the professor points out that there are three demerits of these trees so that the opinion in the reading remains to be examined.

To begin with, while in the reading the author mentions that genetically modified trees are much hardier than nature trees, the professor holds that characteristics of these trees don't guarantee the survival of them because they are genetically uniformed. Once climate changes or certain pests that they cannot resist appear, they may all die of the change.

Besides, the professor insists that with its expensive price of seeds, perhaps genetically modified trees cannot bring to farmers great economic benefits, which is in contrary to the passage’s view that those trees will bring large margins for farmers. Also the professor figures out that every time farmers grow these trees, they have to pay a certain amount of money to the company for trees' seeds, which demonstrates that high profit is less likely to be obtained.

Furthermore, the passage informs us that growing genetically modified trees can prevent overexploitation of wild trees, thereby protecting them. Nevertheless, a different standpoint is presented by the professor that those genetically modified trees actually can damage wild trees in that they may behave aggressively while competing for sunlight and water resources. (228字)

loveluyuanbai

见附件

SophieS123

9月18日 综合 TPO22

The professor believes that ethanol is a great alternative to gasoline and its negative effect mentioned in the article is not convincing. To demonstrate this standpoint, he made three statements as followed.

Although the reading mentions that the use of ethanol fuel will accelerate global warming, the professor contradicts that instead of adding to global warming, some procedures while producing ethanol fuel actually counteract this flaw. He points out that since ethanol fuel is made from corns which can absorb carbon dioxide, this process can remove carbon dioxide from the air.

Besides, the lecture insists that producing ethanol will not cause decrease in food for animals, which is in contrary to the author's view. There is a kind of material called cellule which can be used to produce ethanol and is usually not suitable for animals to eat. It is cellule that we can use to avoid despoiling food from animals.

Finally, the passage says that ethanol fuel cannot compete with gasoline on price in the future. Nevertheless, the professor holds that ethanol fuel can still sell well and gain profits even without those subsidies offered by the government. This is because once people buy ethanol fuel more, producers will increase the product and prices may drop. It is estimated that the cost of ethanol fuel will drop by 40 percent in the future. (224字)

听的时候cellule不会拼写，写完了看原文查的……弱爆了……

safeandsound

A statement made in the material is that genetically modified trees can benefit both farmers and other wild trees. However, the professor points out that there are three demerits of these trees so that（总觉得这个逻辑有点别扭、、直接and就可以了、、应该没有太明显的因果关系） the opinion in the reading remains to be examined.



To begin with, while in the reading the author mentions that genetically modified trees are much hardier than nature trees, the professor holds （the idea；hold为vt.）that characteristics of these trees don't guarantee the survival of them because they are genetically uniformed. Once climate changes or certain pests that they cannot resist appear, they may all die of the change.(不知道要不要加上native trees相比之下的好处、、自我感觉还是能多些就多写吧、、没坏处的、、)



Besides, the professor insists that with its expensive price of seeds, perhaps genetically modified trees cannot bring to farmers great economic benefits, which is in contrary to the passage’s view that those trees will bring large margins for farmers. Also the professor figures out（觉得好像figure out 不太合适、、） that every time farmers grow these trees, they have to pay a certain amount of money to the company for trees' seeds, which demonstrates that high profit is less likely to be obtained.


Furthermore, the passage informs us that growing genetically modified trees can prevent overexploitation of wild trees, thereby protecting them. Nevertheless, a different standpoint is presented by the professor that those genetically modified trees actually can damage wild trees in that they may behave aggressively while competing for sunlight and water resources.

不错不错、、表达的都很好、、基本上应该没什么问题

SophieS123

谢谢safesound的修改，觉得你那个第二段的意见非常好~

xiumu2280

9.18 综合
The professor believes that ethanol is a great alternative to gasoline and its negative effect mentioned in the article is not convincing. To demonstrate this standpoint, he made three statements as followed.

Although the reading mentions that the use of ethanol fuel will accelerate global warming(这里我感觉应该强调下这两者之间没有明显分别）, the professor contradicts that instead of adding to global warming, some procedures while producing ethanol fuel actually counteract this flaw（听的很仔细啊，和原文的结构差不多）. He points out that since/he proves his claim with the fact that(我感觉这样写可以顺下来教授的观点，更紧凑） ethanol fuel is made from corns which can absorb carbon dioxide, this process can remove carbon dioxide from the air.

Besides, the lecture insists that producing ethanol will not cause decrease in food supply for animals, which is in contrary to the author's view(这里是不是应该提一下passage里的具体内容）. There is a kind of material called cellule/cellulose（我找到的原文里是这个词···还是想办法替换下吧） which can be used to produce ethanol and is usually not suitable for animals to eat. It is cellule that we can use to avoid despoiling food from animals.

Finally, the passage says that ethanol fuel cannot compete with gasoline on price in the future. Nevertheless, the professor holds that ethanol fuel can still sell well and gain profits even without those subsidies offered by the government. This is because once people buy ethanol fuel more,（木有逗号） producers will increase the product and prices may drop. It is estimated that the cost of ethanol fuel will drop by 40 percent in the future（这个细节~应该会加分）.

听的很仔细啊，基本听力里的每个内容都对应到了
内部的因果之间联系应该加强一点
总体来说很不错，尤其是对于听力部分的转述

SophieS123

11月9日 独立
spending money on travelling＆vacation vs. saving for furture

In contemporary society, with the development of science and technology people's living standard has increased greatly. Accordingly, this fact gives rise to the heated debate over the issue whether it is better to spend money on travelling than saving money for future use. In my point of view, despite the necessity of saving money for the future, I tend to spend money on travelling.

Apparently, spending money on travelling offers us an opportunity to broaden our horizons and explore a new world. During the journey, not only can you adapt the knowledge you have learnt to the new surroundings, but also you can get to know something mysterious or interesting. For instance, when you visit Hawaii, you are likely to indulge in the warm hospitality there and be interested in the residents' custom. Isn't it a prefect experience to attend a traditional Hawaii wedding and feel the impressive atmosphere they sing folk songs? I am convinced that by spending money on travelling, you can definitely have a special understanding about a certain area and its culture, which you can hardly acquire through just saving money for further use.

Besides, travelling is a valid method for you to relax and relief your pressure. People always tend to forget their own little problems when they are facing the grand and fantastic nature. Take myself as an example. As an engineering student, I always have piles of homework to do and feel great pressure from my peers. Sometimes to finish a project in a certain course, I have to stay up late for several nights, let alone plowing through those abstruse professional books. So when I have an opportunity to travel, I always do not hesitate to take it and make good use of it. During the trip, I am temporarily away from the difficulties and concentrate on the scenery that meets my eyes. By doing so, I am able to recharge myself so that I can be back to my study with stronger fight will.

Admittedly, it is necessary to save some money for future use. If you are planning to study aboard, it is just crazy to spend much money on travelling. Also there exist some circumstances where you may encounter some accidents, so it is really important to save some money in case that sort of things happens. However, I believe that as long as you can manage your finance properly, there is no problem to spend some money on travelling. For us young adults, it is actually more meaningful to spend money on travelling, which represents those potential possibilities and self-charging.

In conclusion, important as saving money for the future may be, it is not a wiser way than spending money on travelling. Travelling can bring us many more benefits than saving money due to its influence on both our physical and mental health, as well as our store of knowledge.