过几天考试，求诸位大侠狠拍~

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Things in universities and companies are totally different. Many top students in schools cannot get used to environment in companies when they first start working. However, to my point of view, preparation courses are unnecessary.
To start with, things they learn during classes might be useless（没觉得少东西啊、） when they go to work. Everyone will face different problems when they start working depend on their majors, characteristics, etc. Students who are outgoing will never come into the issues such as making friends, being used to a new environment, and getting along with their co-workers which are common problems for introvert students. Then what should they be taught during classes? This is certainly a serious question for universities and teachers. No matter what they discuss during class, only a few students will think this is necessary and really useful when they go to work. What’s more, the solutions for problems they are going to meet might not be practical. Have you ever dealt with the situation that you just forgot everything when you got nervous? This is the instinct of human beings and is hard to overcome. Even they know they should keep smiling and use the sign languages while speaking to others, they cannot really do this if they really bump into this kind of situation. So, it is actually a waste of time for students to take preparation classes.
Moreover, besides time-consuming, it is also a waste of money. Extra tuition and salaries have to be paid by students and universities/colleges (应该可以) if schools provide preparation classes, which is in fact totally unnecessary. Instead, students will benefit more if they do part-time jobs. In this way, students can figure out their real problems,（但是觉得和上一段有衔接） and at the same time, they can get paid. I have a friend who kept doing a part time job that have something to do with her major since she became a junior. When she applied for jobs, her experiences were really eye-catching among other students who have just studied during the whole 4 years,even her grades were not as high as others. When she got into the company, she (defeated all her rivals for the job觉得和我本身写的是一个意思) got promoted fasterthan all the students who came to work in the company at the same time with her. Thanks to(再一次出现此类问题、、无地自容啊) her part-time job experience, underneath less pressure than others, she could receive higher salary. So, doing part-time jobs is actually win-win for students – they don’t need to pay extra fees to attend preparing classes, and they get the valuable experiences.
Although taking these classes may benefitsome students who really will have many problems after they go to work, I still stick to the opinion that preparation classes are unnecessary for students.
谢谢kris的批改~~

safeandsound

Imagine a world where no one is educated, or where people refuse to absorb knowledge. The civilization like this will be impossible to make further development unless people realize the importance of education. And reflection of realization is easier ways provided for everyone to become educated. This is exactly what we have nowadays.



To start with, people can get literary resources easier. My parents told me that when they were students, the only material they had were textbooks. They were not able to study what they liked, and their curiosity was never satisfied. So, every day, after coming back from schools without any homework, they just went to swim in the lake and chased their friends on the field until time to sleep. I was sort of envy when I first knew their school life. However, growing up little by little, I found how good the study environment is now – if I do not understand some points teacher illustrated, I can simply search for it through internet. Plus, with the help of electronic products such as kindle, iTouch, iPad and also computer, people can read books whenever and wherever they want. According to a survey, more than half of the people consume their time by reading e-pubs on their mobile phones while taking subways in China.



Moreover, besides books, people can also get knowledge from other methods. One of the direct learning ways is to communicate with others. In the beginning of 20^th century in China, only a few people can read and write. However, after the founding of China in 1949, the literacy rate increased rapidly: more than eighty percent of Chinese have received education and almost half of the citizens have studied in colleges and universities. This means you can simply gain knowledge if you go out and talk with a stranger about his/her job or major. Living no more than a mile away from Tsinghua University, the best university in China, I usually went on campus and talked to students and professors over there. I found it a great way to study, as it is free and available everywhere. Another important source of knowledge is media. We can watch science programs on TV, surfing in the knowledge ocean – the Discovery program and Scientific America Sixty-Second Science are fantastic resources for us to get to know the world of nature and science.



Supplied with so many study resources, people can gain knowledge simply if they are willing to do so. Hence, I think people are easier to be educated than before.

尽管没人改，还是发上来吧、、

safeandsound

The speaker refutes the opinion states in the passage that buzzing, a tactic comonly used in advertising is not good for consumers and should be banned.

According to the passage, consumers will get an unreal idea of buzzed product from a paid buzzer. On the contrary, the speaker makes his point that what buzzers say is always the truth, even though they get money from companies. Buzzers are hired because they do have a content experience using the product. The speaker, also works as a part-time buzzer, says that he just feels his phone service is great, and that he just told people his true feeling about this service in the advertisement.

Another standpoint made by the lecturer is that consumers will remain critical before accept the advertisement, which also contradicts to writer’s view. Purchasers will ask the buzzers about price and quality of a product, and even how long they used that product in order to test its reliability.

Finally, the speaker indicates that company will only recruit buzzers for good products. In this way, people can get a more sincere idea and thus be more trustful instead of more skeptical. So the statement in the passage cannot stand for itself.

These are the reasons why the speaker disagrees with writer’s idea.
第一篇发上来的综合写作、、【好吧，仍旧没人看、、当纪念了、、

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Imagine many great professors who are expected to teach students just stay in laboratories or out of campus to do researches all day long, leaving their students in the classrooms and dormitories. This might be kind of exaggerating, yet, it is professors’ jobs to educate, and professors should pay most of their attention to students.

To begin with, students can have their pursuit for knowledge satisfied and their talent recognized. Young adults at the age of about twenty do have the ability to study with help of their own. Yet, they choose to go to universities to learn something that they cannot find through Internet or books. Eagerly willing to know more, they believe that universities are the right place for them. Otherwise, none of them will waste plenty of time and money on education. Thus, professors should help them on their way to success. What’s more, some of these students are really talented in some certain subjects. It is professors’ duty to recognize, nurture and utilize students’ talent, since they are the only silver lining for the bright future of academia.

Moreover, educating students will ultimately make a progress in technology improvement. Since professors are all expert of a certain aspect, they have the most specialized knowledge. Offered opportunity to attend all seminars, professors are the first ones who get the latest discovery reports. If they can share all of these information with their students, students will have a shorter way to go in the future, which means they are able to spend most of their time trying their new ideas instead of studying already proved theories. Plus, students have more time to do further study as they are always younger than their professors. Longer the time is, a greater likelihood that they can make significant contribution to nowadays society there will be. As for those who want to become professors, they could also educate more students like what their professors did. In this way, a society is able to have constant development.

Admittedly, doing researches do have its advantages – many people can be cured as a new kind of medicine is discovered, famine can be basically eliminated if a new kind of crops is invented. However, it is just a short term benefit – without heritor of knowledge, solutions for significant problems, like global warming and decline of biodiversity that have perplexed us for decades, will never come out.

In a nutshell, professors should spend more time educating students since it benefit not only students, but the whole society as well. As long as there are still newcomers, more development will be made.

safeandsound

The speaker refutes the disadvantages of “let it down” policy state in the passage.

According to the passage, the trees and vegetations are badly damaged due to this policy. However, the speaker argues that fire will actually benefit that certain area by creating spaces and opportunities for newly colonized plants to grow, which contributes to species diversity. For example, plants that required open unshaded places appeared right after the fire in Yellowstone National Park. And this also worked in the same way for seeds that would not germinate unless enough heat was provided.

Another point makes by the speaker is that the fire can also make the food chains stronger, which also differs from writer’s view. For instance, the growth of small plants offered better living environment for small animals like hares and rabbits, which ultimately leaded to an increasing population. And predators of these animals had plenty of food to eat and also thrived in Yellowstone. Thus, the diminution can be recovered and new opportunities are created.

Finally, the speaker indicates that the destructive fire happened in Yellowstone didn’t actually affect tourism. Since the reason for that fire was a combination of many factors like few rainfalls and strong wind, such damaging fire never appeared again since then, and tourists still kept visiting Yellowstone Nation Park later. Thus, the statement in the passage cannot stand for itself.

E月羽

9月15容独立

Imagine(that) many great professors who are expected to teach students just stay in laboratories or out of campus to do researches all day long, leaving their students in the classrooms and dormitories. (咋没有观点句，就exaggerate 了呢？没太懂你的意思)This might be a kind of exaggerating, yet, it is professors’ jobs to educate, and professors should pay most of their attention to students.

To begin with, students can(去掉) have their pursuit for knowledge satisfied and their talent recognized.（没看懂？？？） Young adults at the age of about twenty do have the ability to study （by themselves）with help of their own. Yet, they choose to go to universities to learn something that they cannot find through Internet or books. Eagerly willing to know more,(???) they believe that universities are the right place for them. Otherwise, none of them will waste plenty of time and money on education. Thus, professors should help them on their way(????) to success. What’s more, some of these students are really talented in some certain subjects. It is professors’ duty to recognize, nurture and utilize students’ talent, since they are the only silver lining for the bright future of academia(academic).
你的表达我看不太懂诶~~~~
Moreover, educating students will ultimately make a progress in technology improvement. Since professors are all expert of a certain aspect, they have the most specialized knowledge. Offered opportunity to attend all seminars, professors are the first ones who get the latest discovery reports. If they can share all of these information with their students, students will have a shorter way to go in the future,（？？？） which means they are able to spend most of their time trying their new ideas instead of studying already proved theories. Plus, students have more time to do further study as they are always younger than their professors. Longer the time is（缺少连词）, a greater likelihood that they can make significant contribution to nowadays society there will be. As for those who want to become professors, they could also educate more students like what their professors did. In this way, a society is able to have constant development.

Admittedly, doing researches do have its advantages – many people can be cured as a new kind of medicine is discovered, famine can be basically eliminated if a new kind of crops is invented. However, it is just a short term benefit – without heritor of knowledge, solutions for significant problems, like global warming and decline of biodiversity that have perplexed us for decades, will never come out.

In a nutshell, professors should spend more time educating students since it benefit not only students, but （also）the whole society as well（去掉）.As long as there are still newcomers, more development will be made.（逻辑有点问题）

safeandsound

谢谢E月羽~~改后如下
Imagine many great professors who are expected to teach students just stay in laboratories or out of campus to do researches all day long, leaving their students in the classrooms and dormitories. This might be kind of exaggerating, yet, it is professors’ jobs to educate, and professors should pay most of their attention to students.

To begin with, students can have their pursuit for knowledge satisfied and their talent recognized with the help of professors. Young adults at the age of about twenty do have the ability to study by themselves. Yet, they choose to go to universities to learn something that they cannot find through Internet or books. Willing to know more, they believe that universities are the right place for them. Otherwise, none of them will waste plenty of time and money on education. Thus, professors should help them on their way to success. What’s more, some of these students are really talented in some certain subjects. It is professors’ duty to recognize, nurture and utilize students’ talent, since they are the only silver lining for the bright future of academia.

Moreover, educating students will ultimately make a progress in technology improvement. Since professors are all expert of a certain aspect, they have the most specialized knowledge. Offered opportunity to attend all seminars, professors are the first ones who get the latest discovery reports. If they can share all of these information with their students, students will have a shorter way to go in the future, which means they are able to spend most of their time trying their new ideas instead of studying already proved theories. Plus, students have more time to do further study as they are always younger than their professors. The longer their time is, the greater likelihood to make significant contribution to nowadays society there will be. As for those who want to become professors, they could also educate more students like what their professors did. In this way, a society is able to have constant development.

Admittedly, doing researches do have its advantages – many people can be cured as a new kind of medicine is discovered, famine can be basically eliminated if a new kind of crops is invented. However, it is just a short term benefit – without heritor of knowledge, solutions for significant problems, like global warming and decline of biodiversity that have perplexed us for decades, will never come out.

In a nutshell, professors should spend more time educating students since it benefit not only students, but the whole society as well.

safeandsound

People all need to work after they graduate from schools. And what career to choose always troubles them. Some just work as what their parents do or ask them to be without any individual consideration. However, to my point of view, it is quite irresponsible to do so as this job will probably shadow a person all his/her life.

To start with, popularity of some jobs is changing. Jobs that are newly needed and require expertise become hotter and hotter, whereas some others like farmers are falling. It is human instinct to follow the trend. Especially when it comes to young adults who just graduated, this becomes a more overt behavior. Some of them go as far as to resist the “out of date” jobs. Actually, to some extent, this is a right action, as it can provide people a better opportunity to success. Bright futures are opened to those young adults if they do follow the trend – software engineers can develop fresh applications that fit people’s needs, since these applications are really urgently required. Investment managers can point out a way for people to make money, as everyone would like to find their first bucket of gold in the market with little effort. However, if they really work as, for instance, architects, which are really popular years ago, they will really have a hard time, especially in developed cities. These places are already overcrowded, and less space for new buildings are presented. Plus, no more improvements are needed in those cities that are with most advanced equipments. Hence, children should pick a job that fit in nowadays society, but not just copy their parents’ jobs, in order to success.

Moreover, a greater likelihood that children are not willing to do the same jobs as their parents is presented. Watching how their parents worked for years, children have already got a totally clear idea about these jobs, including all the advantages and, mostly, disadvantages. They are already tired of those familiar and dull things. What’s more, jobs of their parents are usually not what they like and passionate in. Passion is an attitude that drives people when they are frustrated and feel hopeless. And it is only passion can lead people down the path to success.

Admittedly, parents can provide their children many useful dos and don’ts about their jobs, which can prevent children to go to the wrong way. Yet, the negative side of these information, suggestions and social network has always been ignored – those children who do the same jobs as their parents are unlikely to fail and study from their failures. What’s more, only focusing on things provided, they can form an unrealistic picture that they will success easily without much hard work, which keep them away from making progress and creating new products or methods. These two drawbacks are already fatal for these children.

In a nutshell, it is not the wisest choice for children to follow their parents’ career. Job choosing will ultimately influence one’s future. Thus, people should consider all the circumstances before making the final decision, but not simply follow others.

SophieS123

9月16日 综合写作 修改
The speaker refutes the disadvantages of “let it down” policy state in the passage.
According to the passage, the trees and vegetations are badly damaged due to this policy. However, the speaker argues that fire will actually benefit that certain area by creating spaces and opportunities for newly colonized plants to grow, which contributes to species diversity. For example, plants that required open unshaded places（这地方听得好到位啊） appeared right after the fire in Yellowstone National Park. And this also worked in the same way for seeds that would not germinate unless enough heat was provided.
Another point makes by the speaker is that the fire can also make the food chains stronger, which also differs from writer’s view. （这个表达记下了，学习学习）For instance, the growth of small plants offered better living environment for small animals like hares and rabbits, which ultimately leaded to an increasing population. And predators of these animals had plenty of food to eat and also thrived in Yellowstone. （两个and稍有点重复，此处为吹毛求疵……）Thus, the diminution（呃……不应该是diminution被恢复吧，好像意思反了） can be recovered and new opportunities are created.
Finally, the speaker indicates that the destructive fire happened in Yellowstone didn’t actually affect tourism. Since the reason for that fire was a combination of many factors like few rainfalls and strong wind, such damaging fire never appeared again since then, and tourists still kept visiting Yellowstone Nation Park later. Thus, the statement in the passage cannot stand for itself.

总结：感觉第一段略显单薄，在主体段落中，听力部分复述的非常之全面，也没有语法错误。但是个人感觉好像reading的内容基本上没怎么说，不过范文中也有这样写的，所以我也不知道阅读的内容少到这个程度到底好不好……以上为个人意见，我只写过三篇综合……随时欢迎赐教~

safeandsound

谢谢修改~~
看了一下OG，发现passage部分都一笔带过、、而且有老师/考生们说听力是重点+重点+重点、、然后就成就了这样的模板【但无论如何，无法实验嘛