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发表于 2012-8-19 09:28:54 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-8-19 22:12:44 | 只看该作者

8月19日

Do you agree or disagree the way a person dressed is a good indication of his/her personality or character


Because of abundance of our material life, people have more opportunities to chase untraditional ways to well show their characters than they used to be, back ground of education, social activities, even include cars and watches are become one of methods to reveal man’s personalities. And I think the way a person dressed is a good way to show our character.


When we talk about personal dress styles, one significant point is we really have enough choices to define our personalities. For example, when we go to office to start daily work, wear a suit with a nice tie is the best choice, and when we chose to spend time with our family, dressed in a T-shirt in a bright colour and a funny hat will create relaxed atmosphere. All this proved that the way a person dressed can indirect or direct indicated our personality.


Today, many young people are more and more care about their appearance, like hair styles, cloth brands, and so on. They want to make themselves look different from other people, dress ways play a important role to effect appearance, so they pay much attention on it. Like my little brother jack, he like play basketball and Steven Nash is one of his idols, he chose the same hair style, same with shoes and sport clothes with Nash even, he believe that dress in this way can help him to indicate his special personality.


And this experiences not only happened in my brother jack, but also very common  in our daily life. Many times people know ones from their appearance before reveal their real characters. It is important to us that we must pay attention to our dressed ways especially in some certain occasion. If you wear a very official suit and a nice tie, you will leave a very professional impression on your future boss, however if you in a very easy way to see your boss, like wear slipper and sleepcoat, it will leave a bad impression on him.


All in all, people cannot simply ignore the personal dress way to appreciate one man’s characters in today’s society, In my opinion, we should carefully deal with the question “what I should wear”.and I believe that good answer will give us an unexpected resuls.
板凳
发表于 2012-8-20 21:28:54 | 只看该作者
Because of abundance of our material life, people have more opportunities to chase untraditional ways to well show their characters than they used to be, back ground of education, social activities, even include cars and watches(貌似抽象名词和实体名词不能并列) are become one of methods methods to(前面列举了多项) to reveal man’s personalities. And I think the way a person dressed is a good way to show our character.


When we talk about personal dress styles, one significant point is we really have enough choices to define our personalities. For example, when we go to office to start daily work, wearing a suit with a nice tie is the best choice, and when we chose to spend time with our family, dressed in a T-shirt in a bright colour and a funny hat will create relaxed atmosphere. All this proved that the way a person dressed can indirect or direct indicated our personality. 个人感觉例子不贴切,我觉得这例子讲的是穿着场合问题,不是personality的问题)


Today, many young people are more and more care
care more about their appearance, like hair styles, cloth brands, and so on. They want to make themselves look different from other people, they intended to differentiate from others, dressing ways play an important role to effect affect appearance, so they pay much attention on it. Like my little brother jack, he likes play basketball and Steven Nash is one of his idols, he chose the same hair style, same with shoes and sport clothes with Nash even, he believes that dressing in this way can help him to indicate his special personality.


And this experiences not only happened in my brother jack, but also be very common in our daily life. Many times people know ones from their appearance before reveal their real characters. It is important to us that we must pay attention to our dressed ways especially in some certain occasion. If you wear a very official suit and a nice tie, you will leave a very professional impression on your future boss, however if you are in a very easy way to see your boss, like wear slipper and sleepcoat, it will leave a bad impression on him.


All in all, people cannot simply ignore the personal dress way to appreciate one man’s characters in today’s society, In my opinion, we should carefully deal with the question “what I should wear”.and I believe that good answer will give us an unexpected resuls.




我感觉你前半段写的还挺认真的,后边是不是就乱来了啊哥们儿~
很多太低级的语法错误比如第三人称神马的以后一定要注意哦。
然后我觉得论证不够有力,好像没和personality扯上啥关系。
但是我自己也写不出来 T T
改得不好见谅啊!
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2012-8-22 22:36:02 | 只看该作者

parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their

parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently

Education is one of key words of our modern society. Recently, people tend to focus on the argument that weather parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently, as lack of perfect conclusions to convinced everyone, it becomes a hot topic. When it come to me, parents should help children to do their work is my answer.
Children will build their confidence when parents give some little tips in necessary, and confidence is an important factor to one’s success. Today, many primary school wanted the students to acquire the knowledge of math, probability theory, calculus and some abstruse subjects, it will certainly become an impossible mission if parents just say “do it yourself”. However, if children gain some help to solve this hard tasks, especially from their parents, it will change into a piece cake. This are good example to children when they meet the same problem.
Another point we cannot omit is that with the advices from their parents, children have chance to save a lot of time. So much is certain: that the experienced advices will give an effective method to solve problem. According to a recent survey conducted by a education institution, compared with the contemporaries, the teenage who rarely get help from their parents are tend to speed more time on average to finish the tasks which are set intentionally. And the survey also told us that young adults who get help from their parents are more independent than those who receive seldom advices from their parents. Form this survey, it is apparently shows that parents should help their children to do their work in some degree.
Perhaps someone want to mention that too much help will spoil children. I admit it, and it really had happened in some family, some negative news revealed that today’s children become lazy, unsocial, and violence. In my opinion, such reasons as there were were generally ascribe to parents, not the children. Parents need not to do everything to children, after all, sometimes, children need to solve problem alone.
In short, the help from parents has many merits and it also weigh heavily on the children’s whole life. Parents should give some little tips to their children in necessary.
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发表于 2012-8-23 13:47:41 | 只看该作者
parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently

Education is one of key words of our modern society. Recently, people tend to focus on the argument that weather parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently, as lack of perfect conclusions to convinced everyone, it becomes a hot topic.(你这句的as用法是错误的,as无法作为一个连词连接好几个句子,并且it前面也无and作为连词,一个句子怎么能有这么多的谓语呢?independently的后面应该是句号在后由beause在过度。) When it come(comes)to me, parents should help children to do their work is my answer.(这一段最后一点写的有点太简略了多看看别人引出自己观点的句子,而且最后一句也是错误的~典型的中式英语最好能避开,你可以说when it comes to me, the answer is ……



Children will build their confidence when parents give some little tips in necessary, and confidence is an important factor to one’s success. Today, many primary schoolschools wanted(want, today是一般现在时的标志啊。怎么出来过去时态了) the students to acquire the knowledge of math, probability theory, calculus and some abstruse subjects, (又是一出典型的错误,一个句子只有一个谓语,要是俩句子得用“,and”进行连接,务必记住)it will certainly become an impossible mission if parents just say “do it yourself”. However, if children gain some help to solve this hard tasksthis hard task, especially from their parents, it(你前面说的some help,后面应该对应复数) will change into a pieceof cake. This are(单复数错误,亲~ good example to children when they meet the same problem.



Another point we cannot omit is that with the advices from their parents, children have chance to save a lot of time. So much is certain: that the experienced advices will give an effective method to solve problem. According to a recent survey conducted by a education institution, compared with the contemporaries, the teenage who rarely get help from their parents are tend to speedspend more time on average to finishfinishing the tasks which are setsettled intentionally. And the survey also told us that young adults who get help from their parents are more independent than those who receive seldom advices from their parents. Form this survey, it is apparently shows that parents should help their children to do their work in some degree.



Perhaps someone want to mention that too much help will spoil children. I admit it, and it really had happened in some family, andsome negative news revealed that today’s children become lazy, unsocial, and violence. In my opinion, such reasons as therewere were generally ascribeascribed to parents, not the children. Parents need not to do everything to children, after all, sometimes, children need to solve problem alone.



In short, the help from parents has many merits and it also weigh heavily on the children’s whole life. Parents should give some little tips to their children in necessary.


都是刚开始写大家的错误都不少,多认真修改,多看NN的写作就会有提高的
多注意一下句式的和单复数的错误,这个你错的真不少啊,改了就会有很大进步的
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发表于 2012-8-24 09:18:10 | 只看该作者
你说的第三点,你看看你的句子后面有个it will become。。。你前面有个主谓宾了,这又出来了个所以错了。
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-8-25 23:51:51 | 只看该作者

In order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should revi


people became quite wise when they compared in past. It is no doubt that today’s people meet more serious problem than yesterday. Because of so many complex question need to be answer in modern society, it is nature that everyone are searching efficient method to help them, help them to settle everything. Recently, there a fashionable viewpoint told that we should review the past to solve the problems of the present and the future, but I disagree with it.
To begin with, coping past experiences without any considerations probably tend to be failure. Because with a rapid develop speed of our world, there are many things have changed today, like scientific theory, education ideas, viewpoint of new discovery. Such things as there once were were failed to ues to solve newly developing problems. For example, smallpox, a serious disease that troubled human beings for thousand years, are eliminated by modern advanced medical treatment. It is good evidence which proved past experiences are not cure-alls.
Subsequently, if we only rely on past experiences from failure, we will be limited by ourselves. Like science research, the key words of our time, are determined by logical thinking and innovative spirit, not dominated by past. Thomas Edison, a famous inventor, when he faced unexpected trouble, another trying or logical thinking is usually become his first choices, instead of review his failure experiences.
What’s more, maybe someone want to mention the usefulness of experiences, I do not deny the help which we get from past experiences, however, does past experiences really give us the perfect solutions? The answer is not sure. So, we should realize that only new findings of science have the ability to help us to solve unexpected problems.
In sum, considering all the above mentioned reasons, we can obtain conclusion that review past should not become the first choice when people meet problem. If we understood that innovative spirit is the key to solve problem, I bet we can benefit a lot from it.
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发表于 2012-8-26 17:22:11 | 只看该作者
In order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should review the past.

好句子需要添加的有错误的
People became quite wise when they compared in past.这句话语法方面有点问题直接people are wiser than before不行么?)It is no doubt that today’s people meet more serious problem than yesterday. Because of so many complex question need to be answered in modern society, it is nature(natural) that everyone are searching for efficient method to help them, help them tohelp sb do sth settle everything. Recently, there a fashionable viewpoint(这句话不通, there is a ? 这样的话后面的told就不能用了~直接there is a fashionable viewpoint thattold that we should review the past to solve the problems of the present and the future, but I disagree with it.
To begin with, coping past experiences without any considerations probably tend to be failure(failure没记错的话是名词?). Because with a rapid develop speed of our world, there are many things have changed today, like scientific theory, education ideas, viewpoint of new discovery. Such things as there once were were failed to ues to solve newly developing problems. For example, smallpox, a serious disease that troubled human beings for thousand years, are eliminated by modern advanced medical treatment. It is a good evidence which proved past experiences are not cure-alls.
Subsequently, if we only rely on past experiences from failure, we will be limited by ourselves. Like science research, the key words of our time, are determined by logical thinking and innovative spirit, not dominated by the past. Thomas Edison, a famous inventor, when he faced unexpected trouble, another trying or logical thinking is usually become his first choices, instead of review his failure experiences. (这句话的主语是TE啊,所以再写的时候一定注意后面的安排,TEfamous inventor, chose to use his logical thinking instead of reviewing his past experience)
What’s more, maybe someone want to mention the usefulness of experiences, I do not deny the help which we get from past experiences. however, does past experiences really give us the perfect solutions? The answer is not sure. So, we should realize that only new findings of science have the ability to help us to solve unexpected problems.
In sum, considering all the above mentioned reasons, we can obtain the conclusion that reviewing past should not become the first choice when people meet problem. If we understood that innovative spirit is the key to solve problem, I bet we can benefit a lot from it.

不要被吓着啊~我习惯性把整句话都标红这样比较明确~~~
首先文章思路没什么问题,三个论点支持结论
但是论据的陈述方面有些问题,一定注意结构,写完了自己多读一读就能发现了~
有些小拼写和少词我基本加上了,不排除少加了~~~呵呵~
多练多写是王道~加油哈~
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-8-29 18:38:22 | 只看该作者

agree or disagree? If child want to do well in school, parents should limit the

Science and technology have come to pervade every aspect of our lives and, as a result, watching television programs and movies are become a common form interest to today’s children. However, this lead to a hot topic about whether limiting the hours of children spend on watching TV or movies, and many parents agree it for they want their children do well in school. When it comes to me, I think I can understand the parents.

First of all, it is no doubt that unlimited watching TV programs and movies will cost too much precious time of children. If the children spend their time on review lessons instead of watching senseless anime, it will become a easy aim to gain a good performance in school. My friend jack is one of anime funs, although watching anime and movies are his favourite activities, there are others more important, studying is one of these, and he distribute his time so well between work and relax.

Moreover, some TV programs and movies may have bad influence on children, as there are so much violence in movies and sex on TVs. It is hardly to image how can children do well through watching bad TV programs. On that condition, limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies is one of the solutions.

Finally, the man, who disagree the opinion, maybe want to mention the point that the TV programs and movies still have some advantages when they used to educate students. But, in today, there have many science methods to replace the movies and TV programs, such as Internet, computer, electronic models. For example, if we want to find visual information, useing internet is the best way to find it.

In sum, considering all the mentioned reasons, we can obtain the conclusion that watching TV programs and movies just a relax way and it cannot contribute to a good performance in school, if parents limit the hours of children spend on TV or movies, I bet the children will benefit a lot form it.
10#
发表于 2012-8-29 20:33:29 | 只看该作者
Science and technology have come to pervade every aspect of our lives and, as a result, watching television programs and movies are become (becoming) a common form (of) interest to today’s children. However, this lead to a hot topic about whether limiting the hours of children spend on watching TV or movies, and many parents agree it for they want their children do well in school. When it comes to me, I think I can understand the parents.

First of all, it is no doubt that unlimited watching TV programs and movies will(would) cost too much precious time of children. If the children spend their time on review lessons instead of watching senseless(词感觉用的不太恰当) anime, it will become a (an) easy aim(an easy aim 读起来怪怪的) to gain a good performance in school. My friend jack is one of anime funs, although watching anime and movies are his favouritefavoriteactivities, there are others more important, studying is one of these, and he distribute his time so well between work and relax.(这整个句子虽然用了长难句,但是觉得连贯的不够流畅,还有这个例子之后,希望能有一个总结性的对于第一段的结论就更好了)

Moreover, some TV programs and movies may have bad influence on children, as there are so much violence in movies and sex on TVs. It is hardly to image how can children(这里需要倒装吗?我印象里否定意义的词用在句首时才倒装,而且即使在句首也是从句不会倒装) do well through watching bad TV programs.(在这里能再拓展就好了,为什么就不能do well On that condition, limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies is one of the solutions.

Finally, the man, who disagree the opinion, maybe want to mention the point that the TV programs and movies still have some advantages when they used to educate students. But, in today, there have many science methods to replace the movies and TV programs, such as Internet, computer, electronic models. For example, if we want to find visual information, using internet is the best way to find it.

In sum, considering all the mentioned reasons, we can obtain the conclusion that watching TV programs and movies just a relax way and it cannot contribute to a good performance in school, if parents limit the hours of children spend on TV or movies, I bet(口语化) the children will benefit a lot from it. (这个也使用了长句子,有时候长句和短句的配合使用,显得更加的流畅。但是长句的写法颇有借鉴性的)

写的还是可以的,但是在例子上更加具体化一点就更好了。

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