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In order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should review the past.
好句子需要添加的有错误的 People became quite wise when they compared in past.(这句话语法方面有点问题直接people are wiser than before不行么?)It is no doubt that today’s people meet more serious problem than yesterday. Because of so many complex question need to be answered in modern society, it is nature(natural) that everyone are searching for efficient method to help them, help them to(help sb do sth) settle everything. Recently, there a fashionable viewpoint(这句话不通, there is a ? 这样的话后面的told就不能用了~直接there is a fashionable viewpoint that)told that we should review the past to solve the problems of the present and the future, but I disagree with it. To begin with, coping past experiences without any considerations probably tend to be failure(failure没记错的话是名词?). Because with a rapid develop speed of our world, there are many things have changed today, like scientific theory, education ideas, viewpoint of new discovery. Such things as there once were were failed to ues to solve newly developing problems. For example, smallpox, a serious disease that troubled human beings for thousand years, are eliminated by modern advanced medical treatment. It is a good evidence which proved past experiences are not cure-alls. Subsequently, if we only rely on past experiences from failure, we will be limited by ourselves. Like science research, the key words of our time, are determined by logical thinking and innovative spirit, not dominated by the past. Thomas Edison, a famous inventor, when he faced unexpected trouble, another trying or logical thinking is usually become his first choices, instead of review his failure experiences. (这句话的主语是TE啊,所以再写的时候一定注意后面的安排,TE,famous inventor, chose to use his logical thinking instead of reviewing his past experience) What’s more, maybe someone want to mention the usefulness of experiences, I do not deny the help which we get from past experiences. however, does past experiences really give us the perfect solutions? The answer is not sure. So, we should realize that only new findings of science have the ability to help us to solve unexpected problems. In sum, considering all the above mentioned reasons, we can obtain the conclusion that reviewing past should not become the first choice when people meet problem. If we understood that innovative spirit is the key to solve problem, I bet we can benefit a lot from it.
不要被吓着啊~我习惯性把整句话都标红这样比较明确~~~ 首先文章思路没什么问题,三个论点支持结论 但是论据的陈述方面有些问题,一定注意结构,写完了自己多读一读就能发现了~ 有些小拼写和少词我基本加上了,不排除少加了~~~呵呵~ 多练多写是王道~加油哈~ |
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