求拍 Argument39 seafood restaurant

mikezidane

39)A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City
restaurants hasincreased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currentlyoperating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majorityof families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study hasshown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than theydid a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthfuleating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes inseafood should be quite popular and profitable.Writea response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluatethe argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen theargument.
提纲
1全国性的调查是否适用
2健康食物是否就是seafood
3餐馆开了真的会有profits吗

The argument is well presented yetfar-fetched. It lays a claim that the new opining seafood restaurant will beprofitable. Nevertheless, the argument is de facto unreasonable due to severalflaws such as the value of a "national wide" survey to the Bay City,the preference of seafood in the city and the real profit of the newrestaurant  These logical fallacies canbe diagnosed after a close scrutiny, albeit they may appear plausible at acursory glance.

To begin with, a threshold problem in theargument that the author provides no evidence about the national wide surveycan be borrowed to indicate the situation Bay
City. It seems thatthe survey represent the information about the two-income families are morewilling to dine out side, but the Bay Citycan be an exception reasonable. It is totally possible that young couples inthe city prefer to cook and enjoy a romantic dinner at home. Without providingnecessary evidence, the argument is dubious at best.
In spite of unsure survey, the statementmaintains ill-conceived. The author uses the expression of "healthyfood" to hint that people will prefer the seafood. It is unacceptable forthe reason that a lot of food apart from sea food are proved to have a evenhigher nutrition value, the vegetable for instance, are showed to have apositive influence to those who always eat meats for its abundance in fiber.Failure to explain away other likely scenarios in some degree compromises thecredence of argument.


Even assuming that the seafood is thecertain healthy food local residents need, a significant flaw in the statementis that the author arbitrarily concludes the new opening restaurant will earn aprofit with a lot of customers. However, the profit, economically, is afunction of both revenue and expense. Only indicating the revenue brought bymany customers can by no means leads to the high profit without concerning thecost. Perhaps in order to attract more local people to eat, the restaurant mustexpend more dollars for material and hiring better cookers. So adopting theauthor's suggestions will certain undermines, rather than benefit, the outcomeof the argument.

In retrospect, it seems precipitous for theauthor to jump into a conclusion based on a series of problematic premises. Todismiss the specter of implausible in the proposal, the author ought to providecogent evidence that the national wide survey is valuable in the Bay  City, the citizens regard the seafood as oneand only healthy food and the expense of restaurant are not as high as theincome so the restaurant can still make a profit. After all, feckless attemptswith a fallible method can be nothing but a fool's errand. Thus only bygrasping the gist of argument can the author deduce the convincible conclusion.

多谢指导！！！

普渡哥

It lays a claim that the new opining seafood restaurant will be profitable.

这句话opening 写错。后面可以用will profit 更好。

普渡哥

To begin with, a threshold problem in theargument that the author provides no evidence about the national wide surveycan be borrowed to indicate the situation Bay City.

Bay City 前面少了of.

普渡哥

To dismiss the specter of implausible in the proposal, the author ought to providecogent evidence that the national wide survey is valuable in the Bay  City, the citizens regard the seafood as oneand only healthy food and the expense of restaurant are not as high as theincome so the restaurant can still make a profit.

觉得这句话有问题，中文思维。

竹林中人

a threshold problem in theargument that the author provides no evidence about the national wide surveycan be borrowed to indicate the situation Bay
City.这句话问题很大， in the argument 后面需要is，在about后面需要whether，再就是borrow这个词不要这么用，虽然我知道你要表达什么意思，你可以说apply 或者说effective的
have apositive influence to  介词用on
scenarios 这个词最好换成cases
另外还可以说的有，当地没有专卖seafood的餐厅，或许正说明不需要，人们更需要提供多种食物的餐厅
再就是，你一定要写对每一个句子，单词的意思把握准，不要影响越读者的理解

mikezidane

感谢普渡哥指导！  尤其是中文思维那个毛病 我自己有的时候看不出来 或者时间不够的时候很容易为了追求速度而去写这样一些句子  好好吸取教训！

mikezidane

多谢竹林哥！ 我觉得自己在词语搭配方面一直存在一些问题 平时写英语文章时可以用修改弥补 但机考就会让这个问题很明显的暴露出来，21号就考了 我这几天再多练练  争取考试的时候少出错 这两天老是把文章放上来让你们帮着改 辛苦了！