No. 134 第一篇作文，大家看看能几分，谢谢！

johngg

134  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so.

There is an argument that children should do some household task as soon as they are able to do so, but some held the contrary opinions. From my point of view, i agree the former that children should help with household tasks.

The first and the most important reason of my opinion is that children can learn to respect their parents through doing household task. They can feel how hard to do some household tasks by themselves. They can realize that the parent will take care them no matter how tired they are.  From this experience they can accept how their parents love them.

Secondly, it can help the children learn some skills to take care themselves so that it can help children to be independent. Every one has a common that the best way of learn some skills is practice. So doing some household task can let them to make practice how to be independent.

Another reason I support this view is that it can teach them how to face problem. When children firstly do some tasks, perhaps they will bump some problem. Sometime they break the cup, sometime they do not know how to wash dishes. So when they experienced this, they can learn more.

On other side, do some household tasks maybe have some drawbacks such as wasting times, hurting themselves sometimes and so on. But contrary to the benefit, it takes lighter weight.

All in all, in my opinion, I argue that Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. I am an example that I earn some benefits from to do so.

guandream

以下是引用johngg在2004-10-11 1:25:00的发言：

134  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so.

There is an argument that children should do some household task as soon as they are able to do so, but some held the contrary opinions. From my point of view, i (I) agree the former that children should help with household tasks.

the introduction is not impressive, and you practice this part(important).

The first and the most important reason of my opinion is that children can learn to respect their parents through doing household task. They can feel how hard to do some household tasks by themselves.They can understand the hard work, which their parents usually experience. They can realize that the parent their parents will take care them no matter how tired they are.  From this experience they can accept how their parents love them.

the point seems not strong enough.

Secondly, it can help the children learn some skills to take care themselves so that it can help children to be independent. Every one has a common that the best way of learn some skills is practice.(;) So doing some household task can let them to make practice how to be independent.

good point, but lack of examples(what kinds of skills).

Another reason I support this view is that it can teach them how to face problem. When children firstly do some tasks, perhaps they will bump some problem. Sometime they break the cup, and sometime they do not know how to wash dishes. So when they experienced this, they can learn more.

good point, need further development( what they can learn from these problem they face).

On the other side, doing some household tasks maybe have perhaps has some drawbacks such as wasting times, hurting themselves sometimes and so on. But however, contrary to the benefit, it takes lighter weight.

All in all, in my opinion, I argue that Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. I am an example that I earn some benefits from to do so(need detail: what did you benefit from the housework).

first try, it is not bad. but need more practice. and remember to rewrite and read some other people's essayes.

johngg

thank Guandream,你帮改的那几个地方我读起来确实感觉好很多，多谢！

valarie

See mine and please give comments. Thanks.

134  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so.

Should children be required to help with household tasks once they are able to do? Actually there is no absolutely right or wrong answer. Some parents think it is for the children’s benefit to help with some household tasks once they are able to do so but others think children should focus on their study and therefore should be free of household tasks. In my point of view, it depends on the different situation of each family and still there is no universal answer. Thus, I think it’s better to guide the kids to do some housework but do not rely on their work. Another word, as parents, the purpose of letting children help with household tasks is to let them be familiar with the housework and become more independent individual. My opinion is based on the following several points.

First, general speaking, children do not like to be involved too much in the housework and if we force them to do more housework than they can bear, they will become resistant for some other words parents say and may be more important, such as being an honest person. Therefore, how much housework the kids should be involved in should be basically based on their own preference.

Second, however, as children do not necessarily understand what is really beneficial for them and what is not, parents may want to give them some purposeful guidance in terms of what and how to do the housework. For example, at a certain age, parents can teach their children how to make some simple dishes. This skill will help them in their future life.

Third, during the whole process, parents must be very careful not to force their children to do something they do not want and do not set up monetory awards. It is better to let them do the work volunteeringly, respect them, and foster a harmony environment. By doing so, the housework will become a part of learning process for the kids and in turn enhance the emotional connection between the children and the parents.

In conclusion, there is no universal answer for the question whether the children should be required to do the housework as soon as they are able to do so because families have different situation. However, overall speaking, it is beneficial for the children to learn the housework if parents address it in an appropriate way.  

valarie

以下是引用guandream在2004-10-11 3:28:00的发言：

first try, it is not bad. but need more practice. and remember to rewrite and read some other people's essayes.

How did you do the editting work?

johngg

valarie:

your essay is better than mine, however, from my point of view, perhaps your point is not so clear.

maybe, i am not sure

guandream

以下是引用valarie在2004-10-11 4:01:00的发言：

See mine and please give comments. Thanks.

134  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so.

Should children be required to help with household tasks once they are able to do? Actually there is no absolutely right or wrong answer. Some parents think that it is for the children’s benefit to help with some household tasks will benefit children once they are able to do so, but others think that children should focus on their study (and therefore they should be free of household tasks.) In my point of view, it depends on the different situation of each family and still there is no universal answer. Thus, I think it’s better to guide the kids to do some housework but do not rely on their work. Another word in other words, as parents, the purpose of letting children help with household tasks is to let them be familiar with the housework and become more independent individual. My opinion is based on the following several points.

a little wordy and repeated, too long. but the first sentence is functioning well.

First, general speaking, children do not like to be involved too much in the housework(.) and if we parents force them to do more housework than they can bear, they will become resistant for(to?) some other words parents say and parents' instructions that may be more important to the jobs, such as being an honest person.(too far away your purpose of the paragraph) Therefore, how much housework the kids should be involved in should be basically based on their own preference.

Second, however, as children do not necessarily understand what is really beneficial for them and what is not, parents may want to give them some purposeful guidance in terms of what and how to do the housework. For example, at a certain age, parents can teach their children how to make some simple dishes. This skill will help them in their future life.

good point

Third, during the whole process, parents must be very careful not to force their children to do something they do not want and do not set up monetory awards. It is better to let them do the work volunteeringly, respect them, and foster a harmony environment. By doing so, the housework will become a part of learning process for the kids and in turn enhance the emotional connection between the children and the parents.

this point seems not to respond to the topic

In conclusion, there is no universal answer for the question whether the children should be required to do the housework as soon as they are able to do so because families have different situation.(it looks like the same as the beginning of the sentence) However, overall speaking, it is beneficial for the children to learn the housework if parents address it in an appropriate way.  

the whole essay is well organized, but the third point does not respond to the topic. you use some striking vocaburly, but some sentences are awkward and wordy. be careful the punctuation.

the same words to you:

practice makes perfect( I learn from one essay, haha...)

johngg

第二版会不会好一点？

自我评价：第一个理由还是觉得不是很好展开，而且的确不充分，再者我的用词略显单薄。

不知道这个版本的话，机考能几分？

134 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so.

Advocating an argument that children should do some household task as soon as they are able to do so or denying it greatly depends on how people consider and weigh the advantages and disadvantages. From my point of view, I agree that children should help with household tasks.

The first and the most important reason of my opinion is that children can learn to respect their parents through doing household task. They can understand the hard work, which their parents usually experience. They can realize that their parents will take care them no matter how tired they are.  From this experience they can accept how their parents love them.

Secondly, it can help the children learn some skills to take care themselves so that it can help children to be independent. The best way of learn some skills is practice; So doing some household task can let them to make practice how to be independent. If they learn some skills such as cooking and cleaning, they can take care themselves well when the parents are not at home. All of these household actions can improve their independent abilities.

Another reason I support this view is that it can teach them how to face problem. When children firstly do some tasks, perhaps they will bump some problem. Sometime they break the cup, and sometime they do not know how to wash dishes. When they experienced this, they can learn more. Some children without experience in household tasks perhaps do not know how to face the situation of blackout.

On the other side, doing some household tasks perhaps has some drawbacks such as wasting times, hurting themselves sometimes however, contrary to the benefit, it takes lighter weight.

All in all, in my opinion, I argue that children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. I am an example that I earn some benefits from to do so. The independent personality and troubleshooting ability perhaps benefit from my experience in the household tasks.

lighting2003

3。8/6----4。4/6可能分左右。文章太短，虽然要求你不用写很长，但是文章够长了会提高考官的第一印象。

johngg

谢谢，其实已经认识到差距了，只是有侥幸心理，我还得加油！再次感谢！