Teresa 作文贴～ 6，9 考，还有9日倒数！求爆RP

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The professor actually contradicts with the statement made in the reading passage. She is of the view（is of the view 感觉起来不够简洁啊，可以直接Her view is） that the reading passage overestimates the disadvantages of the private fossils business. In fact, the professor argues the benefits of the fossils market outweigh the(用个its会不会表达更清楚些呢，指代前面的private fossils market) negative consequences.


First of all, even though the reading passage suggests that the public will have fewer chances to explore the fossils since it(这个it指代的是什么？没有看懂，如果是fossil的话用复数) sold to the private collectors, the professor disagrees with this opinion. The speaker reminds us the public schools or libraries can also afford the fossils, which mean the citizens actually have more opportunities to view the fossils. （这里可能是我的G的SC的毛病又犯了，总觉的这里用非限不太好。你可以再起一个句子来进行进一步的陈述。which的话有种指代不明的感觉。）


Further, despite the reading passage advocates that scientists will lose the opportunities to verify the critical evidence of the fossils, the instructor thinks this idea is unrealistic. The professor then proves her statement by citing the fact that scientists have to examine the fossils in order to set initial price in the market. In other words, all the fossils have to pass the scientists' identification before launch to the market, which means clearly, the professor disproves the readingmaterial. （还是这里的which从句的，用which来指代前面的整个句子还是略显不妥啊。）


Finally, the professor challenges the final downside of the statement that buyers would destroy the evidence of fossilsmentioned in the reading passage. The speaker reminds us that despite the private collectors may caused damage of the fossils in their excavation, they are made to increase the number of fossils (有个that会更好些呢~)have（加个be动词吧） available to the public. Inother words, the benefits of more fossils far outweighs the valuable fossils remain unearth.（最后一句话不是特别清楚，可以revise 一下么？）


亲，由于我没看过文章，所以内容上也不是很确定。文章方面思路听清楚的。就是结尾的时候可以更加简洁点就好了。另外的话我发现你特别喜欢用非限来进一步解释啊~~~我不知道在T里面可不可以这样用，总之如果改成其他的表达方式的话可能更加让读者可以明白其中的逻辑关系~~~~anyway, good job~