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littleneng

这是我的第一篇practice，大家不吝赐教，千万不要给面子。

Topic: Living in big cities has more advantages than living in small towns and countryside. Do you agree or disagree this statement? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Nowadays, more and more countrymen rush into cities for employment and eventually settle down in cities.  Whereas, an increasingly amount of citizens prefer to live in the countryside so as to enjoy the quiet and peace of nature.  As far as I am concerned, living in big cities has more advantages than living in small towns and countryside.

First of all, living in big cities is better for people's education.  As we know, most of the big cities are culture centers, in which many universities and colleges are located.  For instance, the famous Stanford University and University of California, Berkeley in San Francisco, the prominent University of Columbia in New York.  Besides those distinguished universities, big cities also have prefect education system ranging from kindergarten to high school education.  All above mentioned provide people with better chance of education than in small towns and countryside.

Secondly, living in big cities also provides variety of job opportunities.  Compared with small towns and countryside, big cities are more economically developed.  Companies and factories of various industries and businesses are established in big cities, which create a great deal of job vacancies.  As such, it is much easier for people to find suitable jobs and develop their careers in big cities than in small towns and countryside, where only limited job opportunities available.

Last but not the least that I want to mention is the convenience of living in big cities.  Generally speaking, the facilities in big cities are more complete and perfect than in small towns and countryside.  Large shopping malls, hospitals, hotels and restaurants can be found every where in big cities.  eople's life becomes more convenient.  For example, a lady in big city may go to the gym for body exercise in the morning, having delicate lunch with her husband in a romantic restaurant at noon and going shopping with her friends in the afternoon.  However, a lady in small towns and countryside may spend a whole day heading for big city just to listen to see a film.

Although I agree there may be a couple of disadvantages to living in big cities comparing with living in small towns and countryside, such as bad traffic and environmental pollution, I feel that the advantages are more obvious.  Living in big cities, people can better develop their education and career while also release themselves from heavy burden of life and enjoy the great convenience of big cities.

guandream

以下是引用littleneng在2004-10-2 17:02:00的发言：

这是我的第一篇practice，大家不吝赐教，千万不要给面子。

Topic: Living in big cities has more advantages than living in small towns and countryside. Do you agree or disagree this statement? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Nowadays, more and more countrymen rush into cities for employment and eventually settle down in cities.  (,)Wwhereas, an increasingly amount number of citizens prefer to live in the countryside so as to enjoy the quiet and peaceful of nature.  As far as I am concerned, however, living in big cities has more advantages than living in small towns and countryside.

good introduction

First of all, living in big cities is better for people's education.  As we know, most of the big cities are culture education centers, in which many universities and colleges are located.  For instance, the famous Stanford University and University of California, Berkeley in San Francisco, the prominent University of Columbia in New York.  Besides those distinguished universities, big cities also have prefect education system ranging from kindergarten to high school education.  All above mentioned provide people with better chance of education than in small towns and countryside.

Secondly, living in big cities also provides variety of job opportunities.  Compared with small towns and countryside, big cities are more economically developed.  Companies and factories of various industries and businesses are established in big cities, which creating a great deal of job vacancies.  As result such, it is much easier for people to find suitable jobs and develop their careers in big cities than in small towns and countryside, where only limited job opportunities are available.

Last but not the least(please check again, it sound wrong) that I want to mention is the convenience of living in big cities.  Generally speaking, cities have more the facilities in big cities are more complete and perfect than in small towns and countryside.  Large shopping malls, hospitals, hotels and restaurants can be found every where in big cities.  eople's life becomes more convenient.  For example, a lady in big city may go to the gym for body exercise in the morning, having delicate lunch with her husband in a romantic restaurant at noon and going shopping with her friends in the afternoon.  However, a lady in small towns and countryside may spend a whole day heading for big city just to listen to see a film.

Although I agree there may be a couple of disadvantages to living in big cities comparing with living in small towns and countryside, such as bad traffic and environmental pollution, I feel that the advantages far more outweigh are more obvious.  Living in big cities, people can better develop their education and career while also release themselves from heavy burden of life and enjoy the great convenience of big cities.

good start. well-organized, and it is original writing.

I wrote this topic before, and you can read and get some feedback.

http://forum.chasedream.com/dispbbs.asp?boardID=68&ID=70395&page=2

marinezheng

以下是引用littleneng在2004-10-2 17:02:00的发言：

这是我的第一篇practice，大家不吝赐教，千万不要给面子。

Topic: Living in big cities has more advantages than living in small towns and countryside. Do you agree or disagree this statement? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Nowadays, more and more countrymen rush into cities for employment and eventually settle down in cities.  Whereas, an increasingly amount of citizens prefer to live in the countryside so as to enjoy the quiet and peace of nature.  As far as I am concerned, living in big cities has more advantages than living in small towns and countryside.

First of all, living in big cities is better for people's education.  As we know, most of the big cities are culture centers, in which many universities and colleges are located.  For instance, the famous Stanford University and University of California, Berkeley in San Francisco, the prominent University of Columbia in New York.  Besides those distinguished universities, big cities also have prefect education system ranging from kindergarten to high school education.  All above mentioned provide people with better chance of education than in small towns and countryside.

Secondly, living in big cities also provides variety of job opportunities.  Compared with small towns and countryside, big cities are more economically developed.  Companies and factories of various industries and businesses are established in big cities, which create a great deal of job vacancies.  As such, it is much easier for people to find suitable jobs and develop their careers in big cities than in small towns and countryside, where only limited job opportunities available.

Last but not the least that I want to mention is the convenience of living in big cities.  Generally speaking, the facilities in big cities are more complete and perfect (perfect 是顶级词汇，应无比较级， 就象superior)than in small towns and countryside.  Large shopping malls, hospitals, hotels and restaurants can be found every where in big cities.  eople's life becomes more convenient.  For example, a lady in big city may go to the gym for body exercise in the morning, having delicate lunch with her husband in a romantic restaurant at noon and going shopping with her friends in the afternoon.  However, a lady in small towns and countryside may spend a whole day heading for big city just to listen to see a film( 是用listen to see a film).

Although I agree there may be a couple of disadvantages to living in big cities comparing with living in small towns and countryside, such as bad traffic and environmental pollution, I feel that the advantages are more obvious.  Living in big cities, people can better develop their education and career while also release themselves from heavy burden of life and enjoy the great convenience of big cities.