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题目：Why attend collage or university?

Recently, a tide that people, even the official, who have already worked for many years, attend college or university is prevailing. The amount of application to some particular majors is rising  quickly and the competition is increasing intense.
There are three reasons: increasing knowledge, the background of finance crisis and the career preparation.

The primary reason is increasing knowledge. The increasing global and integral trends exaggerate the importance of the education. The speed of creation of technology is rising quickly, which turns to the eruption of the information and emphasizes the significance of innovation of our knowledge. Thereof, if slowing the step to absorb knowledge, we will be left out in developing tide and lose the game.
Increasing knowledge is the reason in sensee.however, the direct reason is the finance crisis.

The finance crisis, which happened in 2008, make many company loss much and hundreds of thousands of workers lose their jobs. It is hard to find a job in the special time, so it becomes the best choice to go to university or college, which can not only add a new experience, but also pass the crisis time effectively.

The last but not the least, studying in the college or university contributes to career preparation. You can have more time and dimension to think about your life and career, raising yourself to another staircase of life, which will helps to keep clear thinking when you come across the choice in your life.

In order to increase knowledge, the people, especially who lose job in the finance crisis, chose to attend university and college. It can also help to prepare one’s career.

-- by 会员 rocer (2012/5/13 21:41:56)

Why attend collage or university?



Recently, a tide that people, even the official, who have already worked for many years, attend college or university is prevailing. The amount of application to some particular majors is rising quickly and the competition is increasing intense.

There are three reasons:（感觉这里过的得很生硬） increasing knowledge, the background of finance crisis and the career preparation.



The primary reason is increasing knowledge. The increasing global and integral trends exaggerate the importance of the education. The speed of creation of technology is rising quickly, which turns to the eruption of the information and emphasizes the significance of innovation of our knowledge. Thereof, if slowing the step to absorb knowledge, we will be left out in developing tide and lose the game.



Increasing knowledge is the reason in sensee,however, the direct reason is the finance crisis.



The finance crisis, which happened in 2008, make many company loss much and hundreds of thousands of workers lose their jobs. It is hard to find a job in the special time, so it becomes the best choice to go to university or college, which can not only add a new experience, but also pass the crisis time effectively.



The last but not the least, studying in the college or university contributes to career preparation. You can have more time and dimension to think about your life and career, raising yourself to another staircase of life, which will helps to keep clear thinking when you come across the choice in your life.

(这一段的理由太生硬了，导致supporting idea也很生硬，最好能举一个例子)

In order to increase knowledge, the people, especially who lose job in the finance crisis, chose to attend university and college. It can also help to prepare one’s career.

结尾段的练习要加强，多学习别人的方法。

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完了 我觉得我严重偏题了。我把题目理解成了  if you should be honest to your closest friends???  等我写到当中才明白这个问题。感觉写作文好生疏啊   打字好慢啊  我G的作文怎么混过来的啊!!!!!

5月14日11.12.17 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is impossible to be completely honest with your friends.

Do you feel inspired when your closest friends encourage you? Have you got relaxed when you express your sadness to them? Do you attain the success with the help of your closest friends?
If you do not have the mentioned experience, you should be completely honest with your friends and give your heart to them.
Firstly, your closest friends can inspire you when you are lost in your career. Your friends may be the ones who mostly understand you. So they can provide the proper suggestions especially for you. Marx and Angels, who are best friends, encourage each other when the other confused by the difficult and stress, and that is why they can reach such high level of achievement.
Secondly, you can share your emotion, negative or positive, with your friends. It is the origin of power for living when you realize your closest friends to be pround, or sorry for you, when you win or loss. And after your complete honesty to them, they will also share everything they want to you. This is  a win-win process.
The last but not the least, nobody can get achievement without any help from their friends. It is with the contribution of Cook that Jobs can establish such a great company that Apple grows to be today. You can not get the true friends who can do their best to push you when you are in difficulty unless you share your complete honesty with your friends.
Admittedly, it is possible that you may be cheated after your complete honest, and then the conclusion that honesty is useless in the society is reached. However, will you give up all the hope only because you loss once? The fraud actually exists, but it can not be the reason to not be honest.
Because sharing honest with your closest friends can bring you inspiration, make your emotion expressed and contribute your success, you should share your complete sincerity with your friends.

-- by 会员 rocer (2012/5/14 21:34:40)

Do you feel inspired when your closest friends encourage you? Have you got relaxed when you express your sadness to them? Do you attain the success with the help of your closest friends?
If you do not have the mentioned experience, you should be completely honest with your friends and give your heart to them.

（开头段照搬了张红岩老师的模板，有点生硬）

Firstly, your closest friends can inspire you when you are lost in your career. Your friends may be the ones who mostly understand you. So they can provide the proper suggestions especially for you.（需要一些过渡，for Instant…） Marx and Angels, who are best friends, encourage each other when the other confused by the difficult and stress, and that is why they can reach such high level of achievement.
(第二个理由很生硬。感觉跟第一个理由差不多，而且理由不充分)
Secondly, you can share your emotion, negative or positive, with your friends. It is the origin of power for living when you realize your closest friends to be proud, or sorry for you, when you win or loss. And after your complete honesty to them, they will also share everything they want to you，too. This is a win-win process.
The last but not the least, nobody can get achievement without any help from their friends. （需要一些过渡，for Instant…）It is with the contribution of Cook that Jobs can establish such a great company that Apple grows to be today. You can not get the true friends who can do their best to push you when you are in difficulty unless you share your complete honesty with your friends.
Admittedly, it is possible that you may be cheated after your complete honest, and then the conclusion that honesty is useless in the society is reached. However, will you give up all the hope only because you loss once? The fraud actually exists, but it can not be the reason to not be honest.
Because sharing honest with your closest friends can bring you inspiration, make your emotion expressed and contribute your success, you should share your complete sincerity with your friends.（结尾段永远那么蹩脚）