Argument 48 【argu处女作。。。求狠拍！！】

2010202461

题目：
The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.

"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview’s mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
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Write a response in which you discuss that specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

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The article presents a suggestion for retirees to move to Clearview. This suggestion sounds good -- Clearview seems like a paradise for retired people for its beautiful scenery and social environment. However, one cannot make the decision to moving to Clearview only by this article. Some specifics presented in this article make the argument illogical.

In the first place, the article asserts that housing cost fell significantly last year, which can be a good reason for people to move. But the falling prices make no sense of an inexpensive house. For instance, although the expense of houses in Clearview has fallen, there might be another city named Wonderfulview whose housing cost is always much lower than Clearview's. Other evidences may weaken the process of deduction, for example, people living there prefer renting a house rather than buying one when they retire. If the above evidence presented may be true, the author's seemingly logical suggesting is definitely unconvincing. To convince retired people to choose Clearview, the author has to provide much more evidence such as a statistical survey report about people's preference of buying or renting a house, and prove the fact that after housing costs' declining, there is a great advantage in housing in Clearview.

The argument also claim that the mayor of Clearview promises that some infrastructures will be built and some benefits will be given to the people there. But we have noticed that it's just a promise from the current mayor. In other words, the assertion is just a word, which is not restrained by a law or a signed protocol, and there is a probability that it will not be realized in a near future or even never be achieved. If either of these happens, a retired person who chooses Clearview will not enjoy the newly-built equipment in the city, which also makes the argument tenuous.

In addition, the number of physicians in the area is above the national average level. From my perspective, the number of physicians cannot embody an excellent health care service of a city and there will be no embrace from retirees. To weaken the argument, the author provides no evidence indicating whether the physicians are skillful or not. If the physicians are all inexperienced interns just graduated from medical schools, no one will believe that retirees in Clearview can expect excellent health care. As a consequence, only if the author can guarantee that most of the doctors in Clearview are prestigious big shots in medical field can we believe in this argument's assertion.

To sum up, the author of the argument provides some evident reasons for us to persuade retirees to move to Clearview, but it isn't reasonable enough. To strengthen the article, other solid evidences have to be presented. In this way, the argument can be persuasive and logical, which will contribute to a moving-boom to Clearview.

2010202461

路过的大侠们，拍一下啊！！！小弟先谢过了