ISSUE 88..拍拍

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issue 88

Claim: Nations should suspend governmentfunding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry orunemployed.
Reason: It is inappropriate—and, perhaps,even cruel—to use public resources to fund the arts when people's basic needsare not being met.

Write a response in which you discuss theextent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on whichthat claim is based.

Should governments stop funding for thearts in special time, namely significant numbers of their people are sufferingfrom starvation or unemployment ? The answer to such a question cannot be put straightforwardbecause an complicated issue like this involves many factors that the impact ofeach sides should be taken into consider. As far as I am concerned, the reasongiven is make some sense since the ultimate goal of a government is to lift theliving standard of its people and it is its duty to allocate the limitedresources to ensure the achievement of its goal. However, it unnecessarily impliesthat funding for the arts would be an obstacle to the achievement of such agoal.

Admittedly, people's basic needs aresupposed to come before other things including funding the arts. It is not hardimagine what would happen if people cannot afford to eat or have no means tomake money. There are many examples in our history illustrating such an issue.For example, in the Great Depression, millions of people lose their jobs evenlose their hope for the future. Statistic evidence showed  that during this time, the rate of crime inthe United Stated risen greatly. The whole country was suffering from socialunrest. Undoubtedly, what the nation weresupposed to do was far from supporting the arts, but creating jobsopportunities and keeping its people from starvation.

Nevertheless, if support to arts alwaysgive in to the basic needs of people, the day of prosperityof arts will never come. There is a no denying fact that we are unableto eliminate hunger and unemployment totally in our world no matter how manyefforts have been made. If the authority suspend the government funding for thearts until there is no one who is hungry or outof job, the suspension is forever. If so, we would never able to see thevaluable pictures in the galleries, listen to the elegant music in the musichall, or even watch a movie in a cinema.

Besides, funding for the arts could be analternative method helping people to overcome the tough time. First, the poorpeople might be encouraged by the works of artists. The influence these greatarts have on the spirit of people could never be ignored. The destiny symphonyof Beethoven undoubtedlywould encourage those who are in trouble. The pictures of Vincent always convey positive attitude towards life.Secondly, the development of art market might bring some jobs position forpeople, relieving the burden of government. Maybe a gallery built in localplace or may a art college founded by local government, all of these like acorporation can provide a large amount of job positions for the residents.Thus, founding for the arts not only enriches the spiritual life of people, butalso helps the government to dealing with the unemployment problem.

In sum, although inany case, satisfying people’s basic needs should be given priority, by no meanscan funding for arts be neglect totally since the development of art causeexerts positive impact not only on the spirit world of people, but also onrelieving the burden of government to reduce the rate of unemployment.

普渡哥

Should governments stop funding for thearts in special time, namely significant numbers of their people are sufferingfrom starvation or unemployment ?

这里第一句话也有严重的语法问题。。。。

题目中的funding是名词，项目基金

而且最重要的是，文章的第一句让别人不是很make sense..


题目中：Nations should suspend government funding。。

这里government funding 是个组合词，作者很明显没有理解清除题目的一次。。

普渡哥

要写好作文，make sense， 真的要多背，多写啊！！

nobody1112

Should governments stop funding for thearts in special time, namely significant numbers of their people are sufferingfrom starvation or unemployment ?

这里第一句话也有严重的语法问题。。。。

题目中的funding是名词，项目基金

而且最重要的是，文章的第一句让别人不是很make sense..


题目中：Nations should suspend government funding。。

这里government funding 是个组合词，作者很明显没有理解清除题目的一次。。

-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/4/9 9:34:18)

您说的make sense 是啥意思? 没有语病,还是要有说服力??


这么改成不?


Should government stop giving financial support for the arts when significant numbers of people are suffering from starvation or unemployment?


同样的,求其他方面点评~

nobody1112

要写好作文，make sense， 真的要多背，多写啊！！

-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/4/9 9:34:44)

...在努力了,,每天都写啊了..


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