{写作小分队} 传说中的写作小分队啊！谢谢大家！

周花生

4.5 TPO 1 综合
The passage mainly said that it sounds pretty great that some people are willing  to work a four-day week with 80 percent payment, considering this may increase company profits, reduce unemployment, improve employee's llife.However, the professor articulated the flaws in the reading passage from three aspects, making the major point of it untenable and unjustifible.

From the beginning, the professor stated that it may force company to spend much more money in order to hire more worker.The passage said company will have more increase profits by having more error-prone employees who only get paid 80 percent  of the normal rate.However,it fails to consider the extra cost like training and medical benifits.Besides, more worker require more office room and computers.

The second contradiction is that it may not reduce the unemployment.Just because hiring more people is costly, managers may rise their expectation and ask employees to work overtime,which means employees may have to finish 5-days work in four days.

Last, he pointed out that more free time does not nesessarily mean improvement of worker's life quality by allowing them spend more time with their family or on leisure activities.On the contrary, working four days a week will probably decrease their work ability and thus prevent them from advance their caree.Because employers who have to take management into consideration are more willing to hire those who are willing to work five days a week, those who work four days a week may even lose their job.

周花生

TPO第一篇  工作4天一周 和 工作 5天一周的！！！！！！

周花生

我 要 断网 了。。。等待好消息

Crystaljoy

你今天快去写作小分队大本营占个座吧
然后就可以给你分组对改了
今天的综合作业就是TPO1

周花生

是不是不加入就没人鸟我ooo。。。

周花生

4月5日 110528NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One can learn a lot about the person from the type of friends the person has


One of the most difficult tasks in the world is to know someone. You may meet many people, however, you probably do not know them. Do they have some secret personalities? What has they been through? And etc. There might be hundreds of ways to figure out the answers and from my perspective, we can learn a lot about someone from his/her friends.

Since two people or a brunch of people are friends, they somewhat share something in common otherwise people will feel reserved when they are staying together. Confronting with all kinds of pressures or complexities everyday, sometimes we tend to hide some part of ourselves from others. For examle, I have a roommate who looks like a quite and sweet girl at first sight, however after I met her friends who got a lot of tatoos and colorful hairs I find that she is not as compliant as she looks like. Finally, we became close friend after I invited her to go to a rock music festival. In fact, from a person’s friend we could extrapolate some misterious part of him and thus know him better.

Friends are those who have been through a lot with you no matter what it is and their story contained some of yours. Especially those terrible memories. We all know that those who fighted together at a battle are tight friends.Even some of them act really positive and strong like nothing ever happened to them, however, from their friends and what they talk about you can still feel the horrible pain in their mind. With a better understanding of someone’s past, you can definitely know more about him.

Admittedly, from a person’s friends what we can learn is very few and limited, however, it does not make it a bad or inappropriate way to know someone better. After all, we do not write everything on face.

In a word, someone’s friend can prove some imformation that we hardly know and knowing them could be benificial in a friendship for whatever it’s worth.

喵喵了个咪

4.5 TPO 1 综合


The passage mainly said that it sounds pretty great that some people are willing  to work a four-day week with 80 percent of payment, considering this may increase company profits, reduce unemployment, improve employee's life. However, the professor articulated the flaws in the reading passage from three aspects, making the major point of it untenable and unjustifible(unjustifiable).

From the beginning, the professor stated that it may force company to spend much more money in order to hire more worker.The passage said company will have more increase profits by having more error-prone employees who only get paid 80 percent  of the normal rate.However,it fails to consider the extra cost like training and medical benifits.Besides, more workers require more office rooms and computers.

The second contradiction is that it may not reduce the unemployment.Just because hiring more people is costly, managers may rise their expectation and ask employees to work overtime,which means employees may have to finish 5-days work in four days.

Last, he pointed out that more free time does not nesessarily mean improvement of worker's life quality by allowing them spend more time with their family or on leisure activities.On the contrary, working four days a week will probably decrease their work ability and thus prevent them from advance their career.Because employers who have to take management into consideration are more willing to hire those who are willing to work five days a week, those who work four days a week may even lose their job.



文章存在比较严重的结构问题。

一般来说开头第一段不用过多叙述细节，只要阐明passage与lecture观点即可。是相互矛盾还是lecture支持passage。

正文中一般建议用passage+lecture+detail的顺序写。这样文章的结构与逻辑会比较清晰。

你应该是第一次写吧~可以先看看例文神马的。

最后就是综合写作不同于独立写作，它有字数的上限限制。最好不要超过225个字。

下次在大本营占座写完后，把贴子链接贴上哈~我一直以为你没写完呢。

Crystaljoy

To 喵喵，

大牛们的经验贴普遍说，综合可以写到300字，字数是优势之一。你参考下。



To 花生，

看看大本营的运行规则哦。
首页还有综合的范文可下载。

周花生

OK 谢啦！