argu34.。求拍。

starrr91

34/58/94
The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."


Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.



The recommendation that implement electronic monitoring of employees’ Internet use is well-intentioned, not that tenable however. The vice president of human resources makes some false assumptions before he put up this recommendation. The biggest basis of this recommendation is that the productivity of Climpson Industries is under improvement; what if it already meets the expectation of this corporation. There are other unstated assumptions that impair the soundness of the whole recommendation.



To beginning with, it lies in the presupposition that everyone use Internet to something besides their work. It is a kind of Internet-era; we use Internet for many kinds of business. So do employees. This assumption is invalid due to its assertive. If someone use Internet to check mails from their clients or look up some vital information for their work, and be punished in the end. Imagine this-people dedicate themselves to their employer, the consequence is doomed to penalty; how the so-called “better work ethic at Climpson” does could appear in this place.



Secondly, another assumption is questionable. The vice president of human resources assumes that once they install the monitoring software, hours that be wasted on the Internet would be reduced. One possibility is omitted that there might be someone who is keen for Internet recreations at a certain time; they will probably surf the Internet it even if they are to be punished. To some degree, this software is not going to work as it is expected. It would cause more rebellions, because people usually say that “repression leads to revolution”.



Additionally, a untenable assumption is made by the author that employees in this company have merely one way accessing to the Internet. However, it is fallacious hypothesis. Since we are in a high developed technical society, mobile phone, ipad and other electronic facilities can also facilitate people to access the Internet. Granted that the software is working, employees would have other way to make them accessible to the Internet. In this case, installing the electronic monitoring is not a so effective method that reduces the time-wasting.



The vice president of the human resources believe that if they install the software to restrain employees’ recreation hours can lead to the higher productivity as well as a better work ethic. Another possibility he didn’t concern is that, which might exist rationally, the restraint of Internet use would make the employees feel that they are in a kind of no-Internet prison, it’s harmful rather than helpful to motive their passion at work. So, the decreasing productivity is imaginable.



In a nutshell, the author makes this recommendation based on a trial of void assumption and conjecture. There are manifold could-be situations he’s not consider. To promote the productivity of employees, set some software to impede them from recreation is not an effective way. The crux of some breakings in their productivity and work ethic is to find out the root of hour-wasting or the low productivity, so that a more convincible and tenable recommendation could be available.


求狠拍。

竹林中人

it lies in——>on  
use Internet to something ——>do something
If someone use Internet to check mails from their clients or look up some vital information for their work, and be punished in the end——>if是引导了状语，那么后面的应当是主干，但你用了and不对，而且and 后面你也没有主语。
a untenable assumption is made by the author that employees in this company have merely one way accessing to the Internet——>我咋觉得有点别扭，将is挪到that前也许更好
除了上面这些表达上的毛病，整体上还不错。继续努力。