issue 13, 第一篇，求猛拍！

philosophie

第一次写，挑了一个比较容易的题目先练练，望大牛给指点一下！谢谢！！
Universities should require students totake a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study.

 Universities are the places where students could fully explore their potential and interests and acquire knowledge from a variety of disciplines and courses. How to let students make full use of the short period of only four years is a critical question confronting every school administrators. Some people say that universities should require students to take courses of various disciplines outside their own majors while others insist that students should be focused and stick to their own field of study.  To resolve this dispute, we need to make clear the aim of college education. From my personal angle alone, the ultimate goal of college education is to develop well-rounded individuals who possess essential abilities to confront all kinds of situations and changes in life. A more general college education, which requires students to take courses from different disciplines, helps to achieve this goal.

 Through taking variety of courses, students acquire broader knowledge, gain more comprehensive understanding of the world and are equipped with a variety of critical abilities, which all contributes to the well-roundedness of individuals. For students who study liberal arts subjects, science education helps to improve their logic and analytical skills; for science and engineering students, courses in literature, history and philosophy refines their spiritual world and helps to form morally sound values. General education gives students different ways of thinking and enables students to perceive things from different perspectives and more importantly, giving students the chance to find out where their interests and potentials lie, which helps them to make the right future decisions. If students are constrained in a limited field of study too early, their minds will be seriously narrowed and fail to see the whole picture of society and world and are deprived of the colorful possibilities in life.

Some people may argue that students should only focus on their own majors and delve deep into it to become an expert. What makes them think so is that now the job market is becoming increasingly competitive and they think it is more advantageous to be someone who has a specialty than someone who knows alittle of everything. However, this reason is unfounded. In this fast-changing world, learning ability and adaptability are valued much more than a fixed specialty. Students educated in a general education context are more ready for changes and are faster learners. Besides, with the development of the world,the problems encountered are getting more and more complicated and required cross-disciplinary approaches to be solved. Under this circumstance, it is the single-dimensional “experts” rather than the well-rounded talents that will be pushed out of the competition. Well-rounded individuals with learning abilities actually are the winners in the job market.


Receiving general education through taking a variety of courses is beneficial to students in every way. On one hand, it makes them well roundedand become a whole person with morally sound values. On the other, it endows them with critical abilities that are useful both in the job markets and in the whole life. Therefore, universities should require students to take courses ofdifferent disciplines and fulfill the ultimate goal of cultivating well-rounded individuals.

philosophie

发上来发现好多单词中间没有空格。。。看起来有点儿乱。。。大家见谅，下次我注意。。

竹林中人

说两句吧，这篇文章感觉始终在分析在理论上说明，这点给人的印象不很好，需要有有说服力的数据或者例子为你服务比较好。再就是语言吧，可能过于追求用词和表达的复杂了，感觉有些地方明显比较啰嗦，虽然你用了高级词汇，但本来一个非常简单的意思，非要用复杂的方式去表达，就不好了。比如说：From my personal angle alone------->in my view( or opinion)或者其他比较简单的表达。
最后指出的就是第一段过长，第一段在于表达出对题目的理解和立场，不宜过多的展开，让读者能迅速知道文章要说什么，并能有兴趣继续读下去
第一篇，指出的不足很多，希望继续努力，坚持！

philosophie

谢谢批评指正~~会继续加油！！