在MIT的申请中，好象犯了错

lesezeichen

我也觉得简短的回答中语法错误太多，给人不严谨的印象。另外，我想学校还是想知道你怎么arrange这些奔波的。这好比面试问你你的eleadership如何，然后你说我leadership不错，完了。但是常规逻辑是你会给个例子阐述一下对不对？
如果是我，可能会提到公司对我这个事情的支持，我对工作的时间管理以及年假情况。还会主动约时间电话再解释

suu

同学，读贴要认真。

据信已经收到了。。。

我觉得adcom的信想要你说清楚能保证全程参加这个emba的课程，经济上的，意愿上的，还有签证啊各方面的。你的回信只说了你不介意。不过adconm不是没回信么，也没有拒你，你要是觉得没回答好那就再写一封信吧，说清楚就好了。

-- by 会员 suu (2012/2/26 10:56:06)

-- by 会员 leosunic (2012/2/26 10:58:48)

厄。。。my bad
我看到1楼说邮件发出后学校再也没有回信，以为还没有悲剧
pat lz

limingdaili

谢谢大家的分析，我觉得你们说地都很有道理。我现在回想当时回这个邮件相当草率，读完后1分钟就回复了，然后就干别的事情去了，根本没有觉得MIT牛不牛的问题。我已经工作很多年了，回这封邮件时感觉就像和一个客户聊天一样，根本没太当回事，原以为人家会主动约我时间，再聊时我会具体展开说公司sponsor我的学费和时间、我常年出差可以胜任中美往返等等，不想已经没机会让我开口告诉他们这些了。收到拒绝信后，再来看这封回信实在是太不专业了。当然从我内心出发，没重视这个学校，和Wharton的所有交流不管邮件还是电话，我都是打草稿反复琢磨地。但是收到MIT这封邮件，我还窃喜看来要给我interview了，以为有十足的把握可以等待他们回复我面试的时间。悲催呀！

forevercoco

LZ再努力一下吧，好好的写一封信再解释一下
然后就let it be吧！

FasionIce

先不说语气。光是语法就好几个错误。

下面是我收到和我回复的邮件。

I have already thought about this thing and I don't mind to travel 30 times over the 20 month program. This is an excellent program, it worths. I am willing to take the challenges.

Best Regards,


-----Original Message-----
From: @mit.edu]
Sent:
To: Subject: MIT Executive MBA Program


Thank you for expressing interest in MIT's Executive MBA Program. I would be happy to set up a time to learn more about your interest and to share information about the program. It appears that you live outside the US, so one thing for you to consider is the fact that the program will require you to come to the MIT campus 30 times over the 20 month program. If this is not a problem then I would be happy to talk with you. Let me know what you think.

If the travel commitment of our Executive MBA is too much, you may want to consider our Sloan Fellows program, which is a one year full time executive MBA (http://mitsloan.mit.edu/fellows/) or MIT's Executive Education which offer executive management education in 2-5 day classes. http://mitsloan.mit.edu/execed

-- by 会员 limingdaili (2012/2/26 10:20:37)

unicorn0130

第一， 语法错误严重，显然是致命伤
第二，语气不够诚恳，你连人家学校的名字都没提，只是以This来代替，给人感觉很不屑一顾；I don't mind这种句式是以高高在上的姿态出现的，现在是你求人家录取你，不是人家求着你上学....
第三，上来都没有写thank you for considering me as a candidate for the program.同学，where is your manner?


换我是adcom鼻子都被你气歪了,不ding你才怪。

下面是我收到和我回复的邮件。

I have already thought about this thing and I don't mind to travel 30 times over the 20 month program. This is an excellent program, it worths. I am willing to take the challenges.

Best Regards,


-----Original Message-----
From: @mit.edu]
Sent:
To: Subject: MIT Executive MBA Program


Thank you for expressing interest in MIT's Executive MBA Program. I would be happy to set up a time to learn more about your interest and to share information about the program. It appears that you live outside the US, so one thing for you to consider is the fact that the program will require you to come to the MIT campus 30 times over the 20 month program. If this is not a problem then I would be happy to talk with you. Let me know what you think.

If the travel commitment of our Executive MBA is too much, you may want to consider our Sloan Fellows program, which is a one year full time executive MBA (http://mitsloan.mit.edu/fellows/) or MIT's Executive Education which offer executive management education in 2-5 day classes. http://mitsloan.mit.edu/execed

-- by 会员 limingdaili (2012/2/26 10:20:37)

sailion

语气确实是欠佳，不过语法的错误也很严重。。。。但是可能以上并不是楼主立刻被拒的原因，这种EMBA的邮件大叔收到过一大把了，有时压根不回复，有时回复的语气比楼主还差劲些，但是一般Adcom还是会继续跟进的。。。。所以可能楼主的背景不是特别适合EMBA吧，我觉得。。。。

sailion

楼主要不把据信也贴下吧，看看Adcom是如何180度大转弯的。。。。顺便说句，GMAT看来还是有点用的，楼主一封几句话的邮件，被大家纠出这许多语法错误来，哈哈哈。。。。

sailion

我没有打击楼主的意思啊，不是说了么，我也觉得语法和语气不是被拒的真正原因。。。。所以才建议楼主把拒信贴上来，大家帮忙分析一下啊。。。。

切尔西

谢谢楼主拿出来给我们分享你的经历，但是相比语法，我感觉致命的错误可能就是你的态度不认真和草率吧，既然你说了你没有在意MIT，那么你的essay估计也没有用很多心思去写的吧，所以这个整体导致了最后的结果

PS, 这个邮件你回复的确实太general了，或者说太官方了