【写作小分队第一期の大本营】 一起来Rock Toefl Writing！！！已结束

zombiee

6.16独立占http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-725433-4-1.html

bestshanshan

写完了独立，可否请哪位MM帮忙更改，当然互改更好啊，谢谢
6月16日110319NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

    On contemporary society, with the advent of technologically advanced society and the information explosive era, all kinds of compelling Movies and television serve as a season to our boring life which enjoys an increasingly high popularity among young people. Movies and television become an even important role in our daily life。However, when it comes to the topic of M&T effects on the way young people, I hold the view that it has more negative effects than positive ones, the standpoint can be illustrated in the following aspects.
     Basic to personal understanding of the neglects, young people can be deeply affected by M&T is that brings us too much unhealthy contents and violence plots. Young people have super learning ability towards these information filled with their daily life, day by day, the children form the habit of watching tv and cinema instead of learning from book and finishing homework on time. After dinner, they are sofa potato to watch all kinds of programme,such as “fei ni moshu”、“fei cheng wu rao”
    In addition, some children accelerate to grow up , reasoning that they spend too much time on amusement programs which deliver sorts of reality to beat into their pure head and misleads normal and healthy thinking towards the surroundings. Further lending credence to my position is that video games I can think of no better illustration than the example of dota. Admittedly, M&T,to some extent, enables us to know more about the news from all over the world. For instance, by watching news,we can focus on the political and economic issues ,which make our life vibrant, without these our life would probably pale.
   Therefore, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any single one of them, I reinforce my stand point that M&T brings more neglect effects towards young generation rather more positive leading as for the young generation.

kchszy061ban

6 16 独立综合占座 http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-725875-3-1.html

DanielleZ

6.16 独立~http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-727156-1-1.html#last

Crystaljoy

鸟儿妈妈, 呼叫鸟儿妈妈！

我突然有了一个想法啊, 每天我们都写作文,对于disagree or agree 大家都是有一定论点points来支撑的. 或者可不可以每天也都搜集聚合一下大家不管是正还是反的观点啦? 这样对于素材还有论点积累都会有帮助的呢..你觉得咧?大家肿么认为呢?? 呵呵，只是一个建议啦..anyway, 写作加油哇！我考2次G，写作总提不上去, 哎，就是练少了。。所以，大家一起加油啦啦啦！！

-- by 会员 yangyangyu (2012/6/15 1:51:49)

WOW~ Good idea!
操作起来可能不太容易。觉得一个题目一个帖子，大家先把改到的好的论点好句子帖子该题目的帖子里，因为毕竟几经题目是循环进行的。
我们这周在小分队商量一下，等我马上放假回家重新写一下小分队规则再执行吧~ 争取下周就执行！谢谢乖的建议！

Crystaljoy

写完了独立，可否请哪位MM帮忙更改，当然互改更好啊，谢谢
6月16日110319NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

    On contemporary society, with the advent of technologically advanced society and the information explosive era, all kinds of compelling Movies and television serve as a season to our boring life which enjoys an increasingly high popularity among young people. Movies and television become an even important role in our daily life。However, when it comes to the topic of M&T effects on the way young people, I hold the view that it has more negative effects than positive ones, the standpoint can be illustrated in the following aspects.
     Basic to personal understanding of the neglects, young people can be deeply affected by M&T is that brings us too much unhealthy contents and violence plots. Young people have super learning ability towards these information filled with their daily life, day by day, the children form the habit of watching tv and cinema instead of learning from book and finishing homework on time. After dinner, they are sofa potato to watch all kinds of programme,such as “fei ni moshu”、“fei cheng wu rao”
    In addition, some children accelerate to grow up , reasoning that they spend too much time on amusement programs which deliver sorts of reality to beat into their pure head and misleads normal and healthy thinking towards the surroundings. Further lending credence to my position is that video games I can think of no better illustration than the example of dota. Admittedly, M&T,to some extent, enables us to know more about the news from all over the world. For instance, by watching news,we can focus on the political and economic issues ,which make our life vibrant, without these our life would probably pale.
   Therefore, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any single one of them, I reinforce my stand point that M&T brings more neglect effects towards young generation rather more positive leading as for the young generation.

-- by 会员 bestshanshan (2012/6/16 21:23:54)

shanshan亲亲，看看规则哦~作品贴在自己的作文贴哈

babaxiong

6月17日 独立 http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-728134-1-1.html

qianjun06

6.18    独立 http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-728446-1-1.html

包子不包子

http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-713633-10-1.html#last
6.17独立~

lunating

6.16 综合
http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-727514-1-1.html