新g issue 3 修改 求拍~

ykhjy

3) Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The statement claims that educational institutions are responsible for students' success, and they should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study where they are unlikely to succeed. Since talented persons who can make contribution to the society can be fostered through education, educational institutions have responsibility for students' success. On one hand, education can affect students' value of life, which have something to do with one's success; on the other hand, students can learn numerous skills from education, which directly affect students' success.
 
The statement seems to assume that success is explained by the contribution levels that one makes. Through dissuading students from pursuing fields of study where they are unlikely to succeed, more students can be leaded to a success way, and thus they can make more contribution to the society. For instance, a student, who is not good at math, educational institutions should dissuade him pursuit the fields which have high requirement for math such as financial fields.

However, students don't necessarily fail in those fields of study where they are unlikely to succeed. Take Hu Ba yi who is a famous mathematician as an example. Since many times he got zero in  math exams when he was a little boy, it seems that he was unlikely to succeed in math field of study, and if educational institutions dissuade him from pursuing of this field, he may not become  such a celebrated mathematician.    

In addition, of course, it is a success to make contribution to the society, however, to realize one's own value of life can be another success. And educational institutions should define their own assignment which is to explore how to aid and manage teaching, rather than interfering students' choice. There is a relationship between students' pursuit of study's fields in which they may fail in and their thought about their own value of life: some believe their value of life is pursuing knowledge and be desire to satisfy their curiosities; some consider to challenge various unknown fields, devoting themselves for science... Since students have the right to choose education, educational institutions should respect students' own interest and mind, offering equal educational resources.

In conclusion, rather than dissuading students not to pursuit fields of study where are unlikely to succeed, educational institutions are responsible to instruct students to discern their own goal, and try their best to offer sufficient educational resources to aid students to realize their value of life.

竹林中人

这个题目，我的理解是教育机构需要引导学生走向那些很可能成功的领域，关键点在于：1.怎么定义成功。是能够创造更多的物质财富？还是能够带来更多文化价值？或者还是其他？所以在首段中你需要对这个成功做出一个定义。2.likely to succeed 这种说法本身有很大的主观性和局限性，不同的人对某个领域或者专业是否能够带来成功或许有不同的看法，而且现在看来或许不会带来成功的行业或者领域不代表将来不会，这种例子有很多的，比如沃尔玛的成功，让人们认识到即使卖的东西是最低价，但同样可以取得巨大财富。
回到本篇文章，你的论证貌似集中在对社会贡献程度大小的讨论上，贡献大就是成功，贡献小就是不成功，但你没有讲明自己所提到的贡献具体有什么标准？这样显得就有随意性因而缺少说服力。

lukebrehm

WRONG! Education does not affect anyone's value of life. Value of life is not something earned rather it is something you are conceived with, every man or woman has the same value no matter what age or race.

Other than that I liked it much better.

ykhjy

THX~

普渡哥

加油，继续写下去！

ykhjy

But education can actually have some effect on one's thought, doesn't it?

lukebrehm

It can have effect on a lot of things but value of life is not one of them.... Value of life is a very particular phrase which in my opinion should only be used in very particular cases.

ykhjy

Particular cases?

lukebrehm

only when discussing that topic because bringing it into to a topic like this where it is irrelevant just starts a totally different kind of argument