新g issue6 求拍~

ykhjy

6) A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.


The statement recommends a nation to require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. To some extent, it is advantageous for students' learning, making them owning ability to compete in the society. Learning some general knowledge from national curriculum, students can be free to choose their own way wether they will continue to learn in the college which offers them more choices through many ways such as optional courses or they will just go to work.

The statement suggests that studying the same national curriculum before students' entering college is beneficial for people to evaluate students' learning performances easily from different students, different schools, and different regions. Since if all students learn the same national curriculum, although not absolutely, it is easy to see students' performance in terms of examination scores. Thus it is clear for parents, teachers, and the schools to know their children or their students' learning performance. Meanwhile, based on the comparison of students' learning performance, we can evaluate teachers' teaching quality, schools' whole education quality, and reigns' education level. As a saying goes, "Competition makes progress." Through the comparison, it will make great progress on education quality of the whole society.

However, the recommendation that unified the curriculum before college may go against principle of humanism education. The humanism education imply to respect students' own interest and mind, based on students' different potential abilities, to foster qualified persons who are creative, positive and adaptable for time's change. Every person has curiosity, and they are desirous to explore what they are interested in but not yet known, therefore, in order to well develop students' characteristics, education should be humanism, and the curriculum should satisfy students' needs and interest. For instance, the national PE curriculum requires that football is the only curriculum which students must get 6 (out of 10) so that they are qualified to go the a college. However, Aaron, who are good at basketball but has no gift on playing football at all, has to scarify basketball time to practice football, thus maybe nip his chance to become a famous basketball player.  

In addition, some detrimental effects may be brought if accepting the recommendation. By implying the same national curriculum, it is easily to aim for a high score in an exam in learning progress, and it will result in teachers' ignoring fostering of students' quality. Based on students' performance comparison, in order to gain a better fame, teachers will easily only focus on students' exam results, and they will make students do much practice which may occupy students' most time, thus easily leading students to pedants.

In conclusion, the suggestion that to study the same national curriculum before college has a positive effect on comparison of students' performance, and to some extent, it will promote societal educational quality. However, if teachers are only concerned about the exam scores in order to have a better result in this comparison, it is adverse for students to be talented persons who are creative, positive and adaptive.

lukebrehm

very well done!

making them owning ability to compete in the society.      VS     giving them ability to compete in the society.

students can be free to choose their own way wether they will continue to learn in the college which offers them more choices through many ways such as optional courses or they will just go to work.

Maybe a little better...

students can be free to choose their own way whether it be on to college which offers them more choices through many ways such as optional courses or they could go straight to work.


However, Aaron, who are good at basketball but has no gift on playing football at all, has to scarify basketball time to practice football, thus maybe nip his chance to become a famous basketball player.  

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However, Aaron, who is good at basketball but has no gift in playing football at all, has to scarify basketball time to practice football, thus making his chance to become a famous basketball player lower.

普渡哥

making them owning ability to compete in the society

这句话有问题。。

普渡哥

In addition, some detrimental effects may be brought if accepting the recommendation. By implying the same national curriculum, it is easily to aim for a high score in an exam in learning progress, and it will result in teachers' ignoring fostering of students' quality. Based on students' performance comparison, in order to gain a better fame, teachers will easily only focus on students' exam results, and they will make students do much practice which may occupy students' most time, thus easily leading students to pedants.

我觉得这个跟学习同一种national curriculum没有必然联系。你不学同一种也会有竞争。

ykhjy

THX very much!~

ykhjy

我想说的是  强调同一种课程下比较的结果会很容易导致老师们强调成绩。。。是不是我表达还不够清楚？