求批改 issue

gchq228

新G题号：95
题目：All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
写作要求Writea response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.


Education of children has been a heated topic among parents who regard their son or daughter as the future of their family,since school can not only pass knowledge acumulated through hundreds of years  but also help them develop ability of mood control ,which has been widely recognized as one of the key reasons of success in children'future life.Thus,it sounds partially understandable  to demand parents to volunteer time to children'schools.

Admittedly,parents squeezing some time out of their busy working activities to theirchildren'school may to some extent gain a better understanding about children's learning conditions and performance in class by watching their children how to response to questions raised by teachers in class,with children'performance in class having been long perceived as a vital indicator of future
development.Moreover,attending children'school means more actively close  interaction with their teachers ,getting more
feedbacks from school.Parents could understand the whole conditions of their children who may act differently from what
they do at home .From this point ,volunteering time to school is definitely to parents'good in some way.

However,there is another side we can not ignore when talking about those issues.Firstly,we can not guarenttee all the parents are able to spare some time to children'school,Those whose parents do not accomplish their demands will inevitably feel neglected ,gradually grow more close-minded,eventually develop pschological  problems.Secondly,school is a plateform allowing students to learn knowelege , pursue friendship and happiness freely.Parents intefering with children'school life will make students uncomfortable .Students are altered constantly by beliefs that mother is watching on me,consequently influencing deeply their concentration on studying.The intangible restraint  imposed by parent'appearance will certainly reduce their happiness durning playing with classmates after class,which in turn affects student' capacity to cope with human relationship.Thirdly,some time will be spent when attending children'school,which could be used to generate fortune for society,at the same time ,to pave their way to promotion in company.

The aim of education is to help students prepare to make contributions to society and form good values,norms that are used to direct them.Though,parents attending could have some positive effect on children'growth,it may be outweighted by the side effects .Thus,in my view,it is not necessary for parents to voluteer time to children'school,of which good effects are shadowed by negative sides 。

gchq228

顶一下

竹林中人

顶一下

-- by 会员 gchq228 (2011/12/23 10:40:58)

在另外一个里面拍了

普渡哥

Education of children has been a heated topic。。。。

第一次听到heated topic这个短语。。。

只听过hot topic...

gchq228

哦。这是我从New Times,看到的

wangqiansally

很好啊写的，这道题挺让我头疼的，学习了~~