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CynthiaYing

6 A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.


There has been a quarrel for several decades that should a nation require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.Different educators hold different viewpoints, and they all have perfect examples or reasons to buoy their own preference.However, this is still a thing worth elaborately scrutiny before we finally reach our conclusion.
One thing we have to take into account is that a nation is expected to guarantee the equality of education, especially in the period of basic education.To achieve this purpose, a simple and feasible method is to require all the students to take the same national curriculum.Although we cannot thoroughly rule out facts that richer people receive better cultivation from cradle to grave, a passive nation who never tries it best to offer at least the equal basic courses to all the students is inevitably to be blamed.Yet, as democratic country, the nation ought to obey its citizens’ choices, rather than require them to obey certain regulations, which betray our paramount principle, so it would be better to conduct democratic vote before its requirement.
However, as the old and renowned pedagogue said, the best education is training different people in different ways, according to one’s own characteristics.For instance, some people are naturally prefer art to science, so it might court his aversion if his teacher always requires him to calculate and do some experiments, and finally lose interest of study.In practice, today’s education in the western countries reflects this appropriately that mainly primary schools and middle schools take small class teaching to meet identical needs of students.Of course, some curriculums are principal and indispensable, like elementary math, general knowledge of first aid, and so forth, which even the most heterogeneous instruction cannot avoid.
So, in the view of curriculums, the uniformed courses both satisfy the need of fundamental ones, and benefit a lot in the evaluation of qualities of students and teachers.That is, the same course and same examinations make it convenient to coarse estimate a student’s capability of study or how industrious he or she is.Similarly, it could also be used to assess the teaching quality of teachers, and even a school or a region.Besides, this would spare educational resources, relieve some burden of teachers.Regretfully, I have to point out these advantages are just apparent, for even the same course taught by different people actually varies, and how can we make evaluation of students and teachers only according to scores.Besides, what a nation’s responsibility is to emphasize the equal rights of receiving education, rather than to regulate specific issues about curriculum.
All in all, it is out of a nation’s responsibilities to require all the students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.We are not denying that uniformed basic courses are not essential, but calling for a more feasible project to ensure the equal rights of people to receive equal quality education.

普渡哥

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冷月钟笛

"they all have perfect examples or reasons to buoy their own preference."
examples 和 reasons 感觉不是这种并列关系~ 或许evidence, foundations 比较贴切~
另外perfect 有点感情色彩过强
preference~ 也许standings之类的词更贴切~ 我觉得这是比较理论的东西，viewpoints~ 当然preference也不是不可以，可能我们对此的理解不同~

冷月钟笛

第二段感觉还是最好交代一下what national curriculum can bring about~ 比较好~ 直接although... yet...~ 还是不很清晰地说感觉~

冷月钟笛

the best education is training different people in different ways, according to one’s own characteristics.~ 也许直接说Confucius也可~

冷月钟笛

同样道理~ 第三段开头-“因材施教”前后~ 最好说出你的观点：国家课程有局限，因此应当适当放宽标准更为妥当。
引用不是观点~

冷月钟笛

uniformed~ 穿制服的~ uniform 统一的~

冷月钟笛

"satisfy the need of fundamental ones"~ what does the word "ones" refer to?~ I did not really get it~

冷月钟笛

倒数第二段和前后的衔接有点突兀~ 暂时没什么好想法~

普渡哥

谢谢冷月！！