Season 3——manhattan 53 （已点评）

sanlingjie

Hello, 各位，最近的manhattan习题是不是太简单? 大家兴致都不高额~~~好吧，继续出题，打好基础才是关键~~~


53. The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.

A  The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.

B  Whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group, the mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group.

C  The maternal copy of Nesp55 encourages mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or the defense of the group.

D  Whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group, the maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group when doing such activities.

E  The mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group.

The original is correct and clear, and the parallel structure of “looking. . .finding. . .defending” is concise.

(A) CORRECT.

(B) This choice has an awkward and wordy construction. “Acting in the defense of the group” is wordier than “defending the group” without making the meaning clearer. It also makes the choice less parallel: “looking. . .finding. . .acting in the defense.” Furthermore, the passive construction “may be encouraged by,” is unnecessarily wordy.  Finally, the ending phrase "on behalf of the group" is unnecessary.

(C) This choice changes the meaning. “Encourages” implies a certainty that “may encourage” does not.  Also, "looking. . .finding. . .the defense" is less parallel than “looking. . .finding. . .defending.”

(D) This choice is wordy and lacks clarity. Beginning with the long dependent clause "whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group,..." detracts from the clarity. Also, the ending phrase “when doing such activities” is wordy and unnecessary.

(E) This choice uses the wordier passive construction “may be encouraged” instead of the active construction "may encourage." This choice uses the less concise “acting in the defense of the group” instead of “defending the group.” This change also makes the choice less parallel: “looking. . .finding. . .acting in the defense.”

这题的主要语法点在于：动词（defend）和词组（in the defense of）的选择，一般情况下，动词优于词组；被动语态和主动语态的选择，一般情况下，主动语态优于被动语态；平行结构，注意一个句子应该做到功能平行，结构平行，但是当这两者不能同时做到的时候，功能平行大于结构平行；还有就是注意不要改变句子的意思，原句有的情态动词不要轻易去掉，没有的不要胡乱加上。

CD上的同学们语法越来越好了，每个同学都分析的非常好，congratulations！

laiweizhou

系不系A
B 后主句是被动不能很好表达施动的动作; acting in the defense of the group 不如defensing of the group ; that risk 放在前面但概况指代的是后面。感觉有点不好。不过应该不是主要问题。
C 没有may,改变句意的语态。 defense不平行
D looking for 的逻辑主语错误；doing such activities 的逻辑主语错误；
E主句是被动不能很好表达主句是被动不能很好表达施动者; acting in the defense of the group 不如defensing of the group

疑问：that risk  可以指代more risks 吗？  that在这里是不是泛指啊。

CHRISTINE2010

A：correct
B：act in the defense of the group 没有defense直接用动词简洁；whether句放在前面的时候，that指代不清
C：defense不平行，应该用defending
D：不简洁？？？（在AD之间犹豫很久，不是特别清楚）
E：act in the defense of the group 没有defense直接用动词简洁

xeyyxzty

A right
BE the maternal copy-- the mice主语改变~语态改变
C looking~finding~the defense, not parallel
D the maternal copy looking for food...--不对


第一次做~可能分析的不太好

南瓜0729

A right answer

B被动不如主动， acting in the defense of the group 不如 defensing...
C the defense与前面不平行
D looking for 主语改变
E    acting in the defense of the group 不如 defensing...

vanchaser

我选A。
B选项acting in defense感觉wordy，且主动优于被动。
C同B，且缺少may，语气改变。
D选项的 looking for所修饰主语错误，involves后面所跟的不平行，缺少may，语气改变。
E选项acting in defense感觉wordy，且前半句主动优于被动。

昨天的没赶上，可惜了啊。。。

Jane412

A。correct
B. acting in the defense木有defending简洁。后半句的被动木有主动简洁。
C。原句的情态动词may不能轻易去掉。后半句的looking，finding，defending是平行结构，形式应该保持一致
D。looking for缺少逻辑主语
E。被动木有主动简洁。后半句acting in the defense木有defending简洁

啊啊啊啊。。。第一次做悬赏令。。。不足之处还望指正。。。。orz

jofre

53. The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
A  The maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group.
B  Whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group, the mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group.
C  The maternal copy of Nesp55 encourages mice to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or the defense of the group.
D  Whether looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group, the maternal copy of Nesp55 may encourage the mice to take more risks on behalf of the group when doing such activities.
E  The mice may be encouraged by the maternal copy of Nesp55 to take more risks on behalf of the group, whether that risk involves looking for food, finding a nest, or acting in the defense of the group.

选A

选项B：that risk向前无指代；acting in the defense不及defending简洁；被动语态没必要
选项C：省略may后改变了语气的肯定程度；the defense of the group破坏了平衡结构
选项D：whether是连词，后面应该跟句子而不是短语
选项E：acting in the defense不及defending简洁；被动语态没必要

winghyy

A
根据平行involves doing (looking for food, finding a nest, or defending the group) 排除BCE

acting in the defense of the group 不如 defending the group简洁 排除BCE

D中主语the maternal copy，不可能looking for food...，排除

zealdin

A

BCE不平行
D中的when罗嗦了