issue 003,求拍～～

lukeyu

003. To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The most significant elements that construct the society of our humans shall be politics, economy and culture, which are centralized to represent in major cities as the results of the process of the human’s social development. Consequently, the major cities must be the aspects that cannot be ignored to be taken into the consideration of the research field if one desires to understand the most important characteristics of a society.



It is the common sense that the economy is the basement of one society and major cities always play significant rules in societies’ economics aspect for the social resource they occupy and the considerable communication in economy between each other. It cannot be denied that the relative minor cities are very important factors when the researches concern the area which is a limited section; however, when the ranges are amplified to the level of the nation and the world, the more attention should be paid to major cities in order to understand a society better.



Besides, some of major cities, such as capitals, are the centre of politics of one country, so it is clear that the study of this kind of cities deserve its position in order to insight and understand the most essential characteristics of a society. Even though some self-government sections of a society are characterized with its unique political style and manners, however, they could not be capable to represent the most crucial characteristics of the society, which may misunderstand the most crucial style of one society if we ignore the major cities’ role in the politics of one society rather only researching the politics in relative minor area.



Admittedly, we shall not ignore that many cities in one country are equipped with abundant cultural recourse, but we should widen our perspectives to see that, as the argument above, the basement of one society is the economy; it is counterpart that surely the flourish of the economy will lead to the blooming of the culture. The major cities that play significant roles in the economy shall be the sections full of flourishing culture and could better represent the character of one society.



In retrospect, the diversity of characters in one society surely exists, but if we want to understand the most important characteristics of a society, we should select major cities that centralize politics, economy and culture and can represent these characteristics.

冷月钟笛

Admittedly引导的这一段感觉没有起到实际的作用~
我觉得前两段你分别探讨了经济与政治在大城市得以体现的两大特点——可以再挖掘深一点——因此这里回来重新谈经济特点的意义，就有点奇怪了~ 我想你可能是打算在这里补充一下，防止偏颇，但可以不必重复前面探讨过的内容——前面你已经写出或者应该写出政治经济对于了解一个国家本质性特征的重要性。
我觉得你如果还想丰富第三段的话，可以写一些其他大城市具备的代表性特点，很多国家的大城市，作为国家人口集中的生活地区，显然是一个国家很多方面特点的集中体现与典型代表啊~ 比如文化遗迹、建筑、博物馆，这些不遑多让~ 另外要看一个国家人的精神面貌、基本素质，当然也要从人多的地方看了，这些都能在大城市里体现~
当然，如果站在反驳立场上，也有很多可以讲的~ 你的立场选择是正面的，反面的就不提了~
建议在时间允许的范围内扩充字数和论证内容，使文章更充实些，有助于拿高分吧！

lukeyu

嗯嗯，那一段想从文化的角度去论述，但是最终写出来的有些偏离设想～～谢谢指正～～

ppguo

同意冷月的点评。
提供一个例子，韩国有一半的人都住在汉城。

lukeyu

嗯嗯，好的～～