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[作文] issue 122,变态写作指导,望拍

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发表于 2011-9-22 17:09:13 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
这次想是不是能不能在30min内像老G那样写完3个大body段,结果发现写完第二个就已经过点了。。好吧,这个写作指导真的很难写。建议大家多练练。


122. The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Many parents tend to tell stories of heroes at night to the children, passing the idea of heroes from generation to generation, which to some extent demonstrates a time, an ideal, even the character of a society. Probably from this point, the author contends unequivocally that the best to apprehend the character of a society is to observe the character of the heroes. But there exist several flaws in this issue, making it partial after a close scrutiny.

As is universally known, heroes are more like symbols representing people’s ideals than real ones. For example, Joan of Arc could be venerated by a variety of people belonging to different classes. However, not everyone is likely to become her, due to different situations today from the fourteenth century. Thus in analogy, the society might avoid forming the same character of her, since it may be well be understood that the character would be unsuitable to the present conditions, were it put into use without consideration. Joan of Arc may be valiant, but that is according to the demanding of the times she lived, which has changed with the vicissitude of times-- contemporary needs require more intelligence than gut to be satiated. On the contrary, an idealistic person could sometimes provide characters of the society, when taking Hitler into account. He built up Nazi, announcing to sweep the whole world, which could represent the special need for Germany to enlarge its frontier at that time. Nevertheless, that should also be counted as a ephemeral requirement generating in the darkest duration, disappearing over time. Thereby it’s fallacious to equal different times of characters.

Besides, there’s no denying that the characters of heroes could be exaggerated by wicked persons for some evil plans. Heroes are also ordinary people, making it necessary for people to learn from their merits as well as circumvent their weaknesses, notwithstanding there are existence of god-like heroes to regulate people’s faith in government. Admittedly, Chairman Mao creates a legend that almost holds the fate of China in a long period. But it’s still acknowledged to be not enough to offset the mistakes he made reversing the development of China for a decade. Only by locating the weaknesses of heroes can societies head forward continuously, though some conspirators are always masking them by design. Had we researched only the decade of recession of China—which was true—we would have never realized how fast China has been developing these years. In this case, it’s easy to differentiate the character decades ago from that nowadays.

Although the foregoing reasons are tenable, we should also consider the opposite position: could the characters of heroes be turning out to represent the characters of societies on some occasions? No doubt this is often the case given that people like Gandhi, who leads India to freedom, could symbolize a pursuit of this society. As long as his contributions are worth being memorized annually, his mistakes made during his life could be certainly ignored. Thus heroes’ contributions would be everlasting, so would be his character—especially ones representing the character of the relevant society.

On the whole, the characters of heroes are not representative of the characters of societies more often than not, though on certain occasions it’s possible that we can comprehend the character of the society by examining the character of its heroes. As a matter of fact, what counts for this paradox lies not in the key of determining the contemporary situations and needs, compared with those in the past, which should be taken into consideration before deciding to observe the characters of heroes in depth.


602words, 40+min

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沙发
发表于 2011-9-22 22:25:09 | 只看该作者
As is universally known, heroes are more like symbols representing people’s ideals than real ones. For example, Joan of Arc could be venerated by a variety of people bemaking it partial after a close scrutiny.

这句无论是句式和说理都很完美。
板凳
发表于 2011-9-22 22:26:09 | 只看该作者
第二段开头这句
longing to different classes, however, not everyone is likely to become her,

有两个错别字。排版问题?
地板
发表于 2011-9-22 22:35:24 | 只看该作者
这篇issue是很难的,我拿到手不知道怎么写,而且我没有信心给出很有力的论据。
但是大剑的论据都很生动有力,例子都很精准。这篇作文足以作文这篇issue的优秀范文了。
要跟大剑学写作,学用专业的单词,学习他的语言能力。

我已经在美国两年多,看了这篇作文我很羞愧。
5#
 楼主| 发表于 2011-9-22 23:18:31 | 只看该作者
嘿嘿要不是找的那个错别字,我都不知道排版这么不给力~~
6#
发表于 2011-9-22 23:40:15 | 只看该作者
砖头都用来砸自己了。没有可以给你拍的了。。 - -

这是冲6分去的呢。?.
话说请教一下,
论据应该怎么积累啊。
把题库里的题都看一遍然后写提纲,
拟出需要的论据,
再去记吗。?
再弱弱地问一句。。。。。。。
你有专门练打字么。
7#
 楼主| 发表于 2011-9-23 01:01:09 | 只看该作者
提纲必须要整理,之后论据自然就出来了,打字木有练过啊,如果打的慢最好练一练
8#
发表于 2011-9-23 10:28:06 | 只看该作者
大剑是我的榜样!~
9#
发表于 2011-9-23 11:02:40 | 只看该作者
是啊,榜样级的人物。
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发表于 2011-9-24 04:32:47 | 只看该作者
我有一个问题,题中要求In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

这个“challenge your position” 是什么意思呢?是先表明自己的观点,再假设可能的反对观点,然后各个击破吗?
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