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伊布拉莫维琨

请NN们给点宝贵的意见 ，我这样的作文是多少分的水平？？
Whether the usage of cellphone should be forbidded in public transportation,this issue has been in limelight for long time.Some people advocate that it is not polite to use the cellphone in public where many other people may concentrate on their business such as reading materials or listening to the ipod.On the other hand,there is also growing awareness that it doesn’t matter when the cellphone is used on the puclic transportation.when I encounter the same issue,I will state that it is reasonal to take the viewponit about the prohibitation of the cellphone usage in some occasions,but it is too absurd to chaim that cellphone should be forbidden in all public thansportations.A multitude of factors could conspire towards my reasoning.

Firstly,among the most convicing reasons cited by people,one should be mentioned that it is difficult to forbid the usage of cell phone.The reason why it is hard to forbid the cellphone usage is that too many people use the cellphone,which is already an basic equipment for people.In one motropolis,maybe hundreds of thousands of people are using the cellphone in bus,metro,or train at the same time.What the government can do to prohibite the situation from happening?.i think if government is to operare an policye to control the usage of cellphone on the public transportation,the cost of operating can be prohibitively high.

Secondly,besides the evidence analysed above,abundant further examples may be added.The forbidden can cause a great loss to many aspects of life,such as economy field where the information is equal to money.For example,let us discuss the point under this circumstance:when a businessman is having a long travel which may last for 10 hours to attend a conferrence,the forbidden of the cellphone on the train may be fatal to the corparation where he works for.because he can’t get the immediate message about the meeting and can’t control the process of the negotiation with the business partner. Another is example is that we need to use cellphone to make sure whether our relatives are safe.Because my father is usually on business travel,if I can’t get connected to my father,I will feel worried.

Undeniably,in some situation,cellphone must be forbidden,otherwise it can cause the loss of life and fortune.For instance,once we are travelling by air,the mocrowave emitted by the cellphone may disturb the normal operation of the plane devise,which will may lead to crisis in the travel.This kind of situation may not isolated,it is typical of dozens.

Above all,when the advantages and disadvantages of the cellphone usage on public transportation are compared meticulously,all the analysis warrants a sound conclusion that the cellphone should not be forbiddened,as long as we pay attention to the situation that the cellphone must be turned off definitely.