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玫牡昙

题目是广告是不是浪费时间和金钱

Spending time and money on advertisement is a strategy for a company to obtain more reward. Without advertisement, companies could hardly popularize their new products. Since more and more citizens are appeal to kinds of interesting and brilliant advertisement, publicizing products has become an essential segment for the whole marketing. As far as I am concerned, it is not an exaggerate way of time and money on advertisement.

 

 

For one thing, advertisement is a guide for consumers to pick up products. It is difficult for buyers to choose appropriate one from a large amount of commodities. When we go shopping in a supermarket, lots of commodities come into our eyes, and then we would get in a dilemma. Different clients have different demand. For example, when buying a car, some people prefer the comfort of the cars; some people pay more attention on the safety. If fortunately, the advertisements subdivide the products and emphasize the outstanding characteristics of the commodities, consumers would easily take the goods they actually need.

 

 

To such a paramount reason, it is a method to publicize new products through the advertisement. Often being ignored or being distrusted by most of the buyers, new products are always unsalable for a long while. But if the companies use some attractive advertisements to publicize them, the result could be entirely different. Imaging a few popular stars shows on a new product's advertisement with lovely styles and poses, many youngsters will be fascinated. Then they would like to try the new goods. On the contrary, if a company does little propagation, their new products could hardly attract the consumers' eyes.

 

 

Another must be added, it is would rather state a way of investment than assert a waste of time and money on advertisement. One of the advertisement's purpose is that making people to know the advantages of the commodities. It could easily to help people make choice on buying them. It is a measure that companies could expand the shares in the market and make more money. A data from a successful company demonstrates that the proportion between the sales of their popular product and the cost of advertisements made on the product is 10.2:1. Although it seems that advertisement is an excessive way of money and time, we have to claim it is a successful means to win the other competitors.

 

 

As far as I am concerned, using money and time on advertisement is a measure of investment. As long as the companies publicize and exhibit the merit of their new commodities, soon the companies will get reward from the advertisements. 

[此贴子已经被作者于2009/8/5 20:30:01编辑过]

德克的猪

我已经一年多没有在论坛上回复过了。今天回来偶尔看到就帮你改一下。
开头不用这么直接，可以采用general to specific的方法。很多题目都可以写得像下面一段：We are now living in a world saturated with ads. Ads are on TV, newspaper, websites-almost everywhere. Via posting ads firms make their products more well-known, hence obvious jumps in sales and revenue. Yet as the cost of advertising on today's mainstream media become increasingly expensive, will those firms still be able to gain their expenditure on ads back? Or will massive ads finally turn out to be a huge waste of a firms' resources? From my perspective...

主体段落，举例过后一定要接实际的例子。TOFEL的rater不会去检查例子的真实性，所以你可以编造例子，但是要靠谱。例子不用大，只要实际真切就好。要是你举的例子是与rater生活相关的就更好了。比如你这个买车，我们就可以举：In 2008, the oil price rocketed to 140 dollars per barrel. Car owners across the my country began to complain about the high fuel prices. As a result, people tend to purchase fuel-efficient automobiles instead of those gas guzzlers. Ford reacted immediately to the increasing oil prices. It posted several ads on the most popular websites and TV channels in our country to inform the potential consumers of their newly developed high fuel-efficient vehicles. Their ads are so ubiquitous that in 2008 any mention of fuel-efficient vehicle will lead people to think of Ford's Fox. As expected, such huge spending on ads help Ford to achieve an 16% increase in sale in our country-quite contrary to its poor performance in the US.

玫牡昙

哎呀，太谢谢猪猪老师了！！回去一定好好改！！！

玫牡昙

吼吼，太幸运了~~恩恩，太喜欢你了，猪猪老师

ambrosia2010

好文笔！

玫牡昙

噢噢，猪猪老师的文笔那可是响当当的啦！！

[此贴子已经被作者于2009/8/6 17:33:26编辑过]