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各位大侠能否帮我批改一下作文或者给出一些建议,我知道这篇文章对于托福考试的要求还远远没达到,希望各位高手能够不吝赐教。只有一个月时间准备托福了,谢谢!

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各位大侠能否帮我批改一下作文或者给出一些建议,我知道这篇文章对于托福考试的要求还远远没达到,希望各位高手能够不吝赐教。只有一个月时间准备托福了,谢谢!

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Games have been a part of people's life, especially for children. And scientists have improved that games are beneficial to them because games, to some respect, could enlighten children's intelligence. But Are games as important for adults as for children? A large quantity of adults hold the negative point that adults has no necessity to play games since playing games will expend a large amount of valuable time. Contrary to the idea of these people is my heartfelt agreement to the standpoint that games are as important for adults as for children.

     The first point worth of mentioning is that playing games is a way of relieving pressure and finding pleasure. The stress that adults have to bear has been increasing rapidly for the fierce competition in this society. Work, study, family have become the sources of anxiety of most of people. Games can be one excellent choice to relax themselves, particularly some computer games when considering the high cost or inconvenience of other entertainment activities.  People are able to conceive that they are the roles in the games to get away from the real world and automatically efface the work, study or other unpleasant things.

     Another persuasive point I want to make is when adults are playing games, they could learn something useful such as competence of teamwork, innovative thoughts. Among all the computer games, quite a number of games demand teamwork. If players don't cooperate with each other, they may lose the game. The trained ability of teamwork would benefit the work or study because there exists the similar situations in the real life as computer games have. There are also some creative aspects or thoughts that could inspire players. For instance, computer games are able to be a new media as advertisement can be embedded into games, so computer games developers have an additional profit. This way, adults could learn a lot from the games.

      On the other hand, it takes some time to play games undoubtedly and some who are not self-disciplined may be addicted to the computer games and dilapidate work, especially some college students. They may spend too much time in playing games. So people who want to benefit from games should use leisure time and have control force to refuse the happening of addiction to the games.

      Taking all these factors into account, we may safely come to the conclusion that playing games are as important for adults as for children. Even though the disadvantages that it takes some time and some people may be out of control to play games exist, the advantages far overweigh them. Because playing computer games can be a way of relaxation and people can learn a great deal of things such as capability of teamwork and absorb some inspirations.


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