至今为止托福复习进程过半，请大家帮我看看作文水平如何

huir

感觉没有什么进步TT，还希望各位不吝赐教

Topic 14

  Nowdays ,it becomes complex to jurdge a person by his acdemac ability.maybe someone like Bill Gates leave school when young but got great success in his career.so someone suggrests the university classes to be optional so that the students may have much bigger developing space.I’m afraid I don’t agree with it.I will give my reason from the 3 aspects below.

  Firstly for the youth,not everyone has the integgence like Bill.Somebody really wants to spend time on his own business as earlier as possible.But they’ll find the lack of foundation knowledge after all’s ready.20’s is the best time of human life which you’d better spend in school.if you miss it,you’ll never have such goldern time for studying.after your forming your family.you must think more about it.i think that is the best time to create your business.

  Secondly if the classes turns to be optional.the quality of the graduated students can’t be assured.some lazy guy who cheat to get the degree may also find a good job with the deploma.but they could never do their job well.it’s not only a lost of the university’s name but also a loss of the society because we put much resouse in university education.if there’s not enough elites.the society will suffer a slow developing.that is very serious.

   The last reason is that it’s never too late to start your business after graduated.for most students,they will graduate and get a bachelor degree before 25 years old.both time, energy and heath allow you to do what you want.Even you starts later than your friends which make you failed in society experance.It’s sure you would win by your knowledge in the future.You still have the opportunity to get more society experance but your friends may regretful lost the opportunity to get the school knowledge forever.in case the students made the error choice that give bad affect to their life.university classes need to stay obligent

    Compared all the advantages and disadvantages,it’s not hard to discover that the university classes should never be optional.That’s good to the university,the society and the most important,to the students themselves

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huir

为什么没有人留言呢？还是希望大家能踊跃批评^^

还有，2.22日长崎，这里有没有那个时候考的？

huir

Topic 15

Topic 15

  There is a famous preverb”a Neighbor near is better than a relative far ”.One good neighbor is no less important than a relative because you can see each other everyday.So when something happens,the good neighbor can help you in the shortest time.Said so much,after all,what are the qualities of a good neighbor?In my openion,they should have qualities in the 3 aspects below.

  The first is,they should be honest.I think no one can deny honest is the most value charecterastic quality of a man.As a good neighbor,he or she must be honest.So that we can ask them to help watch our rooms when we are going for a trip.We can also ask them to look after our childs or pets.If they are not honest, all these will be impossible.For me,I don’t think handing my pet to a laier is a good idea.

  Sure they also should be kind.Eather friends and neighbor must be build on trusting and helping each other.One day when we meet danger like sudden desease or a robber we’d better have a neighbor that we can ask for help.If your neighbor is not kind at all and refuse to help or go away,It’s sure he’s not a good neighbor.

   And the last necessary quality is friendly.Only honest and kind is not enough.they must be easily to be gone with.It’s annoying to talk with a honest,kind guy whose without word.Certainly too kind-hearted or too authurism is a problem.But I think at least,they can express their thanks and apologise.Their should be such response in everyday’s life.

    These are the qualifies of a good neighbor in my mind.But dealing with each other,the most important is not how much you received,it’s how much you gave.So the most important is what you did for your neighbor.Even they are not perfect neighbors,they must have such abilities to be good neighbours.The key is what you do.

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sparkyco

建议自己先用word检查一下，拼写和语法错误层出不穷。。。

huir

谢谢，虽然说是层出不穷，还是麻烦一下能否指点一二？

yerrr

层出不穷，这么无情的评价呵呵， 我觉得挺好