Topic: Some universities require students to take classes in many subjects. Other universities require students to specialize in one subject. Which is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
我的原文：
Building a good curriculum for each student is one of the hardest jobs for administrators, educators and professors in university and college. A good curriculum will result in students’ positive attitude towards studying and vice versa. From my perspective, universities should build up a well rounded curriculum and require students to take various classes.
First of all, there is a fact that many students will later give up majors which they have chosen during their first year at college. We might see a student who is good at math and wish to be a mathematician in the future will abandon this dream in the third year college and turn to history major. Students in the first years of college usually have little understanding about their majors and as a result, their expectation about the future career might eventually turn out to be wrong. Therefore, by providing a comprehensive set of courses including social sciences, natural sciences and so on, universities will help students to discover their aptitude and interest. If a student who has done well in math class in high school is required to take only math class at college, he/she will not have a chance to explore other interesting fields, in which he/she may even have greater talent than in math.
Secondly, the main purpose of undergraduate education is to prepare students for their professional career in industry and to orient students towards their research career as professors. Requiring all students to specialize in one specific subject might benefit those who want to do research later but might destroy others’ chance to foster other skills and knowledge. For example, a student who is forced to study only economics will have no time for foreign languages classes, which are important for he/she to land a job abroad. Therefore, universities should only be a good guide for students and let them choose from a wide range of courses, not a commander to force them to learn only some specific courses.
In conclusion, universities should provide students with varied courses and by this way broaden their perspective about life. This policy will also equip students with certain knowledge to help them make the right choice for their career: working in industry world or working in academia world.
他的评论
The essay was generally effective. However, While the essay does include some examples, these are hypothetical in nature and, as such, are not really concrete. It might help, for example, to it too could have gone a bit further in terms of providing specific examples, which the question actually requests.draw from your own personal experiences in college to support your argument that a diverse curriculum is more effective.
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Developing a good curriculum for each student is one of the hardest jobs for administrators, educators, and professors at universities and colleges. A good curriculum will result in students’ positive attitudes towards studying and vice versa. [This does not make sense. Are you saying that a student’s positive attitude will also result in a good curriculum? How so? How does the curriculum itself necessarily result in a student’s positive attitude?] From my perspective, universities should build up a well rounded curriculum and require students to take various classes.
First of all, students often decide to switch from the major they have chosen during their first year at college. A math major that aspires to be a mathematician may, by the third year of college, decide that history is more interesting. Students in their first years of college usually have little understanding about their majors. As a result, they may find that their expectations about their future careers may have been misguided or change.
Therefore, by providing a comprehensive set of courses, covering the social sciences, natural sciences and so on, universities can help students to discover their aptitude and interests. If a student who has done well in math in high school is required to focus on math in college, he/she will not have a chance to explore other interesting fields in which he/she may have even greater talent and interest.
Secondly, the main purpose of an undergraduate education is to prepare students for their professional careers in industry or to orient students for research careers as professors. Requiring all students to specialize in one specific subject might benefit those who want to do research later but might destroy others’ chances to foster other skills and knowledge. For example, a student who is forced to study only economics will have no time for foreign language classes, which would be important if this student is interested in working abroad. Therefore, universities should only serve as a good guide for students and allow them choose from a wide range of courses.
By providing students with a variety of courses, universities can help students broaden their perspectives about life. This would also equip students with a wider range of knowledge to help them make the right choice for their career: working in industry or academia. [These options seem quite limited; there are many more choices a person has than to work in industry or academia, such as medicine, politics, law, art, etc.]
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发表于 2008-9-1 17:10:00
