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Do you agree or disagree the following statement: people are busy doing too many thing, so they can do nothing well.

With the rapid development of our society, people have to handle a variety of work in their daily life. Some people believe that they cannot accomplish the tasks well if they need to accomplish the work during a short period while other people disagree with this perspective. As far as I am concerned, people can finally achieve their goals if they settle problems in an efficient way. I will prove my opinion as following reasons.

 

The most telling reason is that people can concentrate their energy on one thing at one time if they can set up a well planed schedule which can help people to finish the work very well.

Most busy and successful persons set up their own time-table in their routine which proves to be an effective choice.

 

Another important argument is that people can use the high technological equipments to finish their work more efficient than ever before. The computer and Internet is a perfect example. When people need to do some academic research, all they need to do is to set in front of a computer and type the key words, click the mouse and skip the useful information after a second. The attempt to finish a lot of work by using the high technological machines will be a fact.

 

Admittedly, too much work is a challenge for everyone, maybe it is more terrible for some freshman in their career and daily life. However, with the help of a well planed schedule and the high technological equipments, people can finish a myriad  of work with high quality which means that people can do things well even if they become increasingly busy.