作文啊作文

superstj

大家都说作文师最好准备的部分，但我每次都是栽在这个部分。看了很多书，觉得自己文章还算规矩，怎么就老是上不去分呢？现在我贴一篇刚写完的independent essay， 希望路过的牛人们能指点迷津。不胜感激！！！

 

Do you agree or disagree with the following notion that people behave differently when they wear different cloth.

 

Obviously, cloth is playing an essential role in social activities. People wear different cloth on different occasions. Of course they would behave differently according to it. Therefore, I agree with the notion that people would behave differently when they wear different cloth.

 

First, some cloths are designed for specific purpose. For example, suit is made for formal occasions, such as important meetings. Can you imagine a gentleman who wears a suit doing sports in gymnasium? The common sense tells me that no matter how much he loves sports, he would never go for exercises there when he is in suit. Thus, some cloths limit people’s behavior.

 

Secondly, cloths effect what people should do. It’s not hard to perceive these scenes: rappers in big shirts, police in uniforms and drama actors in exaggerated costumes. What would happen if they exchange their cloths? For an instance, police wears loose, large hip hop shirts, searching for evident in a community. He might probably act not as confidently and maturely as wears in uniform. Many questions are likely to besiege him when he knocks the neighbor’s door, “will they question my authenticity? Am I look like an abnormal policeman?” without a doubt, people would act differently with the influence of the cloth they wear.

 

Finally, wrong cloths worsen people’s behavior. Although the old saying tells people that don’t judge a book by its cover, the marketing science indicates that the appearance of a product would not only effect customers’ choice, but also confuse them with its “cloth” and real utility. Similarly, this happens among people, especially at job interviews. How would an employee feel when he suddenly realizes that he wears a too casual cloth when he got to the office, seeing everyone in suit with tie? Usually, that job applicant would act more awkwardly and less confidently than when he’s in suit because he is afraid of losing a good first impression. As a result, wrong cloths worsen people’s behavior.

 

Since cloths are designed for different purposes, and would effect what people should act, and sometimes even worsen people’s performances, many people would act differently according to them.

superstj

自己顶下吧。。。免得沉下去了

ll_422

 一点小意见，开头结尾不够出彩，这可是阅卷人最容易看到的地方哦。

中间三段的安排： 把最重要，能写出最多观点的那个写在第一段，写好后也可以COPY,PASTE做调整的。

superstj

谢谢宝贵意见。但有人说indenpendent essay是比较八股文的，那么开头和结尾是应该别出心裁，还是按部就班得平铺直述呢？