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第一次写，在限时之内，字数只有235……而且写得相当的差，不过还是拿出来，希望听听大家对我的意见……我2月24考，现在不知道应该怎样在有限的时间内，令自己的作文去到3-4分的水平，谢谢大家……

If you could make one change in a school that you attended, what change would you make? use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

 

Currently, more and more students in university inclined to change their major for different reasons. I make up my mind to change my major in my university, from software to financial engineering.

 

Most significantly, I prefer financial to software because for my own interest. I want to be an analyst in a Stock Exchange. I'd love to analyst the datum from market rather than write a program. The computer language seems absurd to me so I don’t want to waste my time in studying in software.

 

Moreover, the reward from stock market is faster than in the software industry. It might be a couple of years to design a program and during the time, you got nothing. In contrast, the profit from stock market may be more efficiency. One purchase a qualified stock in NASDAQ, and it rise a lot, one can exchange to money in the next moment.

 

Finally, the teachers in software major isn't qualified, it seems amateur. In my major, it's has only three professors and five associate professors. The shortage of experts make me despair to software so I can't acquire knowledge in proper method. On the other hand, the financial engineering major has about twenty professors that worth my learning in it.

 

In conclusion, financial engineering is my favorite subject and it might be the most valuable major in the future. This is the most thing I want to change.