1.19 一战 开帖督促自己复习

qianrene

顶一下

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LZ加油!

lemoncandya

真是什么都不想说了，今天写了篇作文，写了三遍才写完。

第一次，直接在这写，结果网页点错，没保存，我这个心情啊~~...瞬间就木有了~~

第2次， word上写，培养了下情绪，写的那个开心啊，结果，不知道word也抽风，莫名其妙，自动关闭了~~

我的上帝，就只剩下，写的第1段， 顿时我想起来，前两天看过咱cd上有个人遇到的恶心事情，他的形容是，像吃到苍蝇，我就是这个感觉~~太贴切了~~

终于啊，鼓起勇气写第三遍，我都杯弓蛇影了~,写一点保存一点，搞不清楚写了多久，反正是也了一堆~一气呵成~现在贴出来，希望大家能帮我看看~~~谢谢~~

Government should pay more attention on natural environment less on economic development.

 

Government has countless decisions need to make everyday. No matter what policies or measures the government implements, they all have something in common, that is, let citizens have a better life than before. Among all the affaires that the government cares about. nothing can be compared with the importance of improving people’s life conditions. And of various factors that contribute people’s life conditions, natural environment and economic are two conspicious aspects.

 

Economic development benefits residents a lot by making a great progress on medical techology. Statistics have proved that the average lifespan of today’s people is much longer than that of individuals’ in the beginning of last century. State-of-art medical technology and well-developed medical net make it possible for us to cope with many diseases. Smallpox, for instance, was definitely considered as a kind of fatal virus in the old days. When my parents at age of teenagers, they said, if one caught that disease, what they could do was waiting the time fleet and take the kid away. But now, we don’t need to experience the anxiety of this sort any longer, since smallpox can easily be crued by injucting specific vaccine. Therefore, on no count can we live longer without the development of technology.

 

Economic development also offters us more chance to enjoy the pleasure of our lives. Currently, accomany with dramatic changes in economy, a great mout of modern tools are prevailing in our daily life, which used to let the work more efficiently and effectively. Amony these, I would list Internet, which I considered as the most significant invention in the last hundern years. Hardly can the people without the Internet that we can pay bills, purchuse clothes, even have professors’ lecture just stay home throught internet, without suffering 2-hour trip from home to school, sometimes would very probably be late because of the bad road conditions. We also can spare our leisure hours by enjoying the latest blockbusters and favourite musics downloaded via internet. Undoubtedly, our lives become more colourful result from the economic development.

 

Although development of economy is important, the natural environment as a curcial element to our lives can not be ingored. It is not uncommon that more and more topic about our natural environment conditions changes are being discusses, such as globle warm, air pollution, nature resources runed depletion. All of them will pose a tremenous threaten to us. Our city, for example, is a middle size city with prosperous industry, which attact a great number of people flock into my city in order to get a higher pay job to change their life conditions. In order to meet the high demand for accommodation, much trees have been cut to build apartments for the newcoming persons. The buses packed with people like hunman sadine tins travel through the city day in and day out, leaving the air polluted mercilessly. The cotaminated water causes a lot diseases disperses. It is obiviously that the quality of life is undermined without the government’s help.

 

So, from what I have discussed above, the natural environment and economic development are both essential to our happy and high quality life. Government should focus proportionately on these two respectives so that the whole society will get better and better.

So, from what I have discussed above, the natural environment and economic development are both essential to our happy and high quality life. Government should focus proportionately on these two respectives so that the whole society will get better and better.

lemoncandya

cohesion   family cohesion

inheritance

kin: relatives

paternal   maternal

proximity  n. nearness proximate  approximate

affection   show affection for/towards sb./sth.

bond   strong emotional bond between twins

clique   

 confide eg. Teenagers are more willing to confide in a friend than in a parent.         confidence n. confidant n. confidential adj.

solidarity  

despondent   despondent about

devotion   show great devotion to

engender 

proliferation  the proliferation of fast-food restaurants

reciprocity 

antipathy  n. antipathy toward

arrogantly     berate v. to say insulting and disrespectful things

contemputous n. be contemputous of   contemptible adj contempt n.

despise.v. hate very much

obnoxious  bothersome

stigmatize sb./sth. as ...    stigma

vitriolic    delinquency n. juvenile delinquency

fringe n. on the fringes of society

hedonistic      hypocritically

status quo   conservatives who defend the status quo

depict v. to show in pictures

intrinsic      spectrum

connotation   denote

ingenious    inscription

amateurish  adj     charismatic   

gala  hilarious adj very funny

incompetent

capricious adj.    cumbersome

vanity  tickle sb's vanity

amorela

LZ MM,我帮你看了你刚写的这篇作文,有点问题,我的意见仅供你参考.上传了WORD,你看起来更清楚.

[此贴子已经被作者于2008-1-17 10:26:00编辑过]

amorela

MM,你的结构很清楚.不过我觉得语言上你需要花更多的工夫去提高,有很多用法不是很地道,比如get more and more这是非常中文化的用法,尽量避免

还有,比如,2-hour,我们平时可以这么写,OK的,但是如果是在正式文体中,这么写不是很好.尽量确保你写出来的东西都是非常正式的书面语,而不是口语词汇和用法.

第三,很多单词写错了,平时练习的时候,我们就要尽量让自己拼写不出问题,这样万一考试时间紧来不及复查,也不会有太多单词错误.很多细节要注意,比如单复数的问题.连词和介词的问题,修饰语的问题.

第四,MM你最好回顾一下语法书里对句子结构的解释,我发现你好些句子里都是run-on了.就是一个句子出现了两个动词,或者两个施动者,但是却没有连词连接,也没有明确的从句引导词,这种句子,你可以改成分词结构.就会清楚很多.

第五,MM可以尽量试着去用多点词,比如表示转折的不是只有but,还有yet, however, in another hand等等.保证你的词是多变的.象make, let,get这种小词,如果有更好的学术点的词代替,就不要用它们,太口语化了.

我之前看过你前面贴的口语的文字,也有上面的问题,MM自己再回去看一看吧.

当然我的意见也不是完全都对的,MM还是要自己有选择的去看啦.

MM加油哦.

你的日记真的写的很棒呢!

[此贴子已经被作者于2008-1-17 5:38:29编辑过]

lemoncandya

非常感谢amorela, 今天晚上就要奔赴考场了，明天还有最后一天~

现在的心情其实很紧张，关于我的作文，非常感谢帮我指出的这些问题，其实我关于考试，我担心的问题真的很多~

比如怕到考场上思路不畅通，毕竟我准备的东西还是很少，而且作文练习的也不够，

我现在心里很没底的，不知道自己是个什么水平，现在能做的只有尽力把自己的水平发挥出来把~

剩下的，需要晚上的，只能是考试结束之后，继续提高，我不会放弃对于英语的学习，因为我发现，我已经渐渐爱上英语了~

它不仅仅是一门学科，甚至承载了我的未来和希望~

说的我自己都想哭~

  ~加油吧~无论这次考了几分，我都会把它贴出来，毫无保留的直面自己~

加油~

amorela

以下是引用lemoncandya在2008-1-17 14:12:00的发言：

非常感谢amorela, 今天晚上就要奔赴考场了，明天还有最后一天~

现在的心情其实很紧张，关于我的作文，非常感谢帮我指出的这些问题，其实我关于考试，我担心的问题真的很多~

比如怕到考场上思路不畅通，毕竟我准备的东西还是很少，而且作文练习的也不够，

我现在心里很没底的，不知道自己是个什么水平，现在能做的只有尽力把自己的水平发挥出来把~

剩下的，需要晚上的，只能是考试结束之后，继续提高，我不会放弃对于英语的学习，因为我发现，我已经渐渐爱上英语了~

它不仅仅是一门学科，甚至承载了我的未来和希望~

说的我自己都想哭~

  ~加油吧~无论这次考了几分，我都会把它贴出来，毫无保留的直面自己~

加油~

MM加油.

明天你写WRITING的时候,不要紧张,先认真把题目看仔细,然后快速整理出思路,我建议你先把开头,结尾和每段的main sentence写好,然后往里填写内容.用你拿的准的表达,尽量去变化一些句式和单词.

good luck!

VividDuo

支持下

lemoncandya~~

不用想太多了 你一定能考好的^^

八爪鱼

刚看了FJJ给修的作文，觉得LZMM作文还是很有潜力的，词汇量还是很大的，就是有很多地方不太规范，我也是低手，不过既然看了就给说点建议吧，希望LZ能及时改进，考个好分数。

1.拼写错误是相当的多，我觉得应该用2个小时好好练习一下，作文因为拼写丢分不太值得。

2.开头似乎观点不明确吧。题目应该属于AGREE还是DISAGREE的，我觉得开头最好给出自己的观点。由此能让阅卷老师一下看出文章的结构。

god bless you