帮帮忙改下作文好么?谢谢了

odin_422

123. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should read only those books that are about real events, real people, and established facts. Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

 

I do not agree that people should only read the books that are about the real life, real people or real established facts. From my person angle along, reading some fictions may be good at our life and give us a wide range of thought.

 

People reading fictional books may feel better. For instance when we read some humor books, most of us will laugh. From the medical angle, laugh may be good at our bodies, making us relax ourselves from many many presses such as working and studying. When we read some beautiful essays, especially written about the beautiful landscape, the illusions of beautiful scenes may come into our minds. Looking at the landscapes, we may feel better.

 

In addition, when reading Alice in Wonderland, I felt that I was in a wonderful world. The grassland was green, and the sky was calm. Near the river, I could make a birthday party. Everything was going well. In this world, there was no more pollution, no war and no hungry, for paradise was like this in my heart.

 

Further more, reading fictional books may give us a wide range of thought, like brainstorm. For example, there was a famous fiction, named 20000 Leagues Under the Sea, which was written before the submarine appeared. But in this book, the Parrot, which was a real submarine, appeared. Also in another fictional novel, the Future World, we could use roberts help us in doing housework, and the roberts even managed to unite a Robert Labor Union. In the real world, the Sony company and IBM manage to manufacture many two legs walking roberts. Althought they do not do any job just walking in two legs, I wish not for long we could see the real robert managers.

 

Therefore, not only are the fictional essays, but scientific fictions are important to the whole society. They allow us to demenstrate our new, exciting dreams, and also give us a best to relax. The world without fictions is like flowers without sunshine.

hidetree

感觉行文很公式化，语句比较缺少变化……总的来说没有亮点，字数也不占优势……我觉得拿高分比较难

我也没有多少经验，个人感想而已……LZ顺便看看

odin_422

谢谢你呀

shuangpang

I
do not agree that people should only read the books that are about the
real life, real people or real established facts. In my view (From the perspective of my personal experiences), compared with real event books, fictions will give us a wider
range of thoughts and broader guidance to our life.
            

Firstly, people
reading fictional books will feel better. For instance, when we read humor books, we laugh. From the biological perspective, laugh will induce positive emotions which is good for health and it can also relax ourselves by reducing the stress and pressure from hard working and studying. When we read some beautiful essays,
especially those written about the beautiful landscape, the image of
beautiful scenes may jump into our minds just as when we are looking at the actual landscapes and we
may enjoy the same way as do when we are standing in front of an actural water fall. When reading Alice in Wonderland,
I felt as if I was in a wonderful world. The grassland was green, and
the sky was calm. Near the river, I could make a birthday party.
Everything was going well. In this world, there was no more pollution,
no war and no hungry, for paradise was like this in my heart.

 
Further
more, reading fictional books may give us a wide range of thought, like
brainstorm. For example, there was a famous fiction, named 20000 Leagues Under the Sea,
which was written before the submarine appeared. But in this book, the
Parrot, which was a real submarine, appeared. Also in another fictional
novel, the Future World, we could use roberts help us
in doing housework, and the roberts even managed to unite a Robert
Labor Union. In the real world, the Sony company and IBM manage to
manufacture many two legs walking roberts. Althought they do not do any
job just walking in two legs, I wish not for long we could see the real
robert managers.

 

Therefore,
not only are the fictional essays, but scientific fictions are
important to the whole society. They allow us to demenstrate our new,
exciting dreams, and also give us a best to relax. The world without
fictions is like flowers without sunshine.