[原创]初写作文，望哪位前辈给与指点与评价，多谢

ericchase

初写作文，望哪位前辈给与指点与评价，多谢

Do you agree or disagree that it is more important to work at a job that you enjoy than it is to earn a lot of money?
Have you ever got a sense of happiness of working at a job that you love most?Have you ever taste the excitments of geting someting of your own after hard working?Have you ever felt regreting geting some money by losing somgthing valuable?If you do,I believe you wil know why it is more important to work at a enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money.
First of all,doing someting people like most will give him/her the power to attain a wonderful goal.It will make you feel happy to be in his /her own heaven.It is the same that working at a job that you enjoy is like flying in your own area.The sources of the happiness will come from a complete paper which contains your own wisdom,a sweat smile from your colleague who you trust most in your company,and a loud and clear voice of congratulation from your boss.
Moreover,craving excitments is someting I enjoy most and can be acomplished when I am working at a job that suits me.Being a councilor,for example,not only can you contact with so many diffetent people,but also can learn someting new that maybe you never hear about.Then a lot of data and information which are going to be acumulated by your smart brain and dexterous hands will come to you,so someting new will appear after your analying.It’s so exciting to hold your own achievement which maybe bring benifits to your clients.
There is someting which will never return once lost,like the friendship,trusting,honest between the colleagues in your favorite company.Sometimes a job with a better pay will bring someone weath.The money,however,can buy everyting except someting mentioned above which are the greater riches.So the money I get from another company will never afford the my loss when I am not allowed to work at a job that I love most. George H Lorimar said“It is good to have money to buy things that money can buy, but it is better not to lose things money cannot buy.”So don’t give up the valuable thing to get the money.
Just like an old saying goes，“Choose a life of action, not one of ostentation.”In one’life ,money sometimes is the ostentation of the life,action in your favourite area is a must.

lisy

希望LZ先进word把拼写检查一下，还有最高级要用the，还有代词指带的一致性。