城市需要保留老的,历史性的建筑 TWE65

hys17

城市需要保留老的,历史性的建筑:

In the past few decades,40 percent of the old cities are disappeared and became the modern city.Saving old city has been passed on the table for several years but still with less attension.Some people consider it as an option for the development of a city just because it is not necessary for the modern city development.On the other hand,many researchers find most of the old cities have much more active economy in recent years,especially in tour.I think saving the old cities is not only necessary in economy but also in civilization.

Old cities have the most historical buildings,which is a sign of a city.Without these buildings,these cities would lose their most bright and specific color in the world,which would bring them into a place where over millions of cities standing up with no characteristic. Currently,if people go to Jinlian,which is the oldest city in north Zhejiang,which is a province of china,looking for some old buildings that have been built for more than five hundred years ago,the result would be a number that you could count just with your fingers.

Old cities are the source of history education.No one can deny this fact that old buildings which has been built for several hundred years,is the best live specimen for a children to know the historical moment of a period exactly.Back in high school,when I was studying a period of Ming Dynasty in china history,our teacher took us to a city which had some building during that period.As we saw the buildings stood up in front of us,we are so exciting of seeing them so we could imagine how glory the Ming Dynasty was.

Additional,old cities are extremely attractive to the tourists because they have the most characteristic buildings in the world. Jinlian,which I have been described before,by the changes of the it,tourists are getting less because the buildings that they want to see are disappeared or changed into a modern building.With the result of the collapse of touring economy,this city became a normal one in the big province in china,and only depended on the industry,which is not fitting it cause its geology.

However,modern city has its own advantages,such as modern industry,high quality of modern common life,high technology which brings us a high efficiency of work.

Despite all of these advantages that modern city brings us,nothing could compare with the history and civilization which old city has,because one day we lost them,we will never find them again.

不足之处请尽管指出,还有一个多月就考了时间不多,才开始练习,我想尽快提高,麻烦讲的详细一些,谢谢!!

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-10-31 23:03:38编辑过]

xania

没有细看，只看了前面两句。感觉第一句话就很misleading，我乍一看吓一跳：过去十年居然40%的城市消失了？呵呵  完全可以用turn这样的词来表达

还有passed on the table 不知道是什么意思，我估计你是把中文给直译了

第二句：attention  不是attension   拼写错了

我非牛人，随便提点建议~

hys17

谢谢,我刚开始练,很多表达方法都不标准,除了这些细节性的错误,能否指出结构上的问题之类的?