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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Teachers should make learning enjoyable and fun for their studies. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Currently, the methods of teaching students have been more and more concerned by the educational officials worldwide. As of these ways, a commonly acceptable idea is that teachers should make learning enjoyable and fun for their studies. For doing this can not only raise the interests of students, but even promote the positive actions of teacher themselves.

A gifted scientist has said, "Interest is the best teacher". Whatever one tries to start with, he would stand to the end if he has great interested in it. The best way to raise interest comes from the class of teaching. Adolescents are full of great incurious with everything unknown, and tend to be more acceptable with things that their teachers make them enjoyable and fun. There are various examples: a funny game may help to memory some useful knowledge, an enjoyable discussion may lead to a deeper research, an observation to the nebula out of the space may make students find whether there are other advanced creatures lived on another planet. In this way, children may start with something which may bring about important influence to their future.

Broadly speaking, people can be divided into two classes. First, those who think the work is work and the pleasure is pleasure. Second, those who think their work and pleasure are one. Although the former are majority, the Fortune's favored child is the second class. Their life is a natural harmony. The teachers who make their teaching enjoyable consider the work is also the pleasure, so they can enjoy each working-day as an excitement. By this, they will love their career and insinuate more passion and energetic mind into class which will become more popular.

As mentioned above, it can be proved that teachers should make learning enjoyable and fun for their studies. Only in this way, both the students and teacher themselves would be benefited.

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-8-21 12:30:04编辑过]

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