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Kaluo

TWE001：People attend college for different reasons(for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

To ask why attend university/college, the answer various from person to person. Some say that attending university helps people adapt to social life, others say it’s a better way of learning. Form my point of view, attending university/college benefits us in the following ways.

To start with, I’d like to mention the beneficial university life which is colorful as well. One of the most essential part of university life is participating in activities of different societies. Students who take part in these societies will have to deal with other students and take efforts to achieve a big project themselves. While accomplishing the project, student’s ability of cooperating and a better understanding of a knowledge in a certain field is acquired. Other elements of university life such like joint-university sports contest or sales weeks broadened the call of “student” to a well-rounded person.

What’s more, attending university/college afford us a chance to know more people, which also benefits us in many respects. By studying and living with other students, we improve our ability of getting on with others and acquire new ways of thinking. This process, which is somewhat late to experience when one has started to achieve his career, is essential to one’s development.

In addition, people could get a more systemic training in one academic field if s/he chose to attend university/college. Not only the trail-made lecture made by advanced profession, the well-planed courses provided, but also the good atmosphere of study contributes to a better place of learning in university/college. Study in university/college will always be more suitable and agreeable.

To conclude, my points lies on that attending university/college benefits us by providing a beneficial university life, affording us a chance to know more people and allowing us to get a more systemic training. However, no one can affirm that anyone who attends university will succeed. A great bridge to success would not probably help if you take no effort.

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Kaluo

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rio

以下是引用Kaluo在2007-6-24 23:15:00的发言：
TWE001：People attend college for different reasons(for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

To ask why attend university/college, the answer various(varies) from person to person. Some say that attending university helps people adapt to social life, others say it’s a better way of learning. Form(From) my point of view, attending university/college benefits us in the following ways.

To start with, I’d like to mention the beneficial university life which is colorful as well(somewhat vague in meaning, u can say the colorfulness of the university life). One of the most essential part(parts) of university life is participating in activities of different societies. Students who take part in these societies will have to deal with other students and take efforts to achieve(shoulder/undertake) a big project themselves. While accomplishing the project, student’s ability of cooperating and a better understanding of a knowledge in a certain field is(are) acquired.(actually, the previous sentence can be better structured as: students can acquire cooperative ability and a better understanding of knowledge in certain fields.) Other elements of university life such like joint-university sports contest or sales weeks broadened the call of “student” to a well-rounded person.

What’s more, attending university/college afford(affords) us a chance to know more people, which also benefits(benefiting) us in many respects. By studying and living with other students, we improve our ability of getting on with others and acquire new ways of thinking. This process, which is somewhat late to experience when one has started to achieve his career, is essential to one’s development.

In addition, people could get a more systemic(systematic) training in one academic field if s/he chose to attend university/college. Not only the trail-made lecture made by advanced profession, the well-planed courses provided, but also the good atmosphere of study contributes(contribute) to a better place of learning in university/college. Study in university/college will always be more suitable and agreeable.

To conclude, my points lies on that(unnecessary) attending university/college benefits us by providing a beneficial university life, affording us a chance to know more people and allowing us to get a more systemic training. However, no one can affirm that anyone who attends university will succeed. A great bridge to success would not probably help if you take no effort.

小弟作文水平不行~~大虾们指条成功之路吧~~~~~

good conclusion

too many minor errors

diversify your vocabulary:

beneficial:gratifying, rewarding, satisfying; promising; advisable, desirable, wholesome

leepee

呵呵，so happy to meet rio  again