第一次写作文，还希望牛人批改

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Now days ,a controversial issue explode in my community, which there is a large shopping center is being built. As a result, the noise , the high rate of crime and other unexpected things may be followed. However, everything has its duality ,this issue is also no exception. It’s a little bit of haste to say that it is too bad to built the center, or vice versa. Basically, my community’s situation. I think the center is indispensable.
No one can deny the fact that the center may have its demerit, but before we jump into de bandwagon to write them off , let us consider some of the point which may be made by their defense. In the first place, there is no shopping center near our community and every day we must use half a hour (or even more time)to buy some groceries for our daily life. If the center is built that may safe us a lot of time to do many private things or even share with our family.
In addition, a center could also potentially attract business from the surrounding neighborhood bring more investment into our community. Obviously, along with the shopping center was open ,other commercial enterprise may be found like the restaurant ,parking place, resting room and other entertainment. All of this above will further enhance the economy of our community. Whereas the revenue of the located people also increased, which encourage their confidence of investment, which is another way to enlarge the economy , and go into a positive circle.
Finally, the center will enrich people’s daily life. As what we have talk above, the center and other commercial business give local people a public place to gather and have conversation. By contrast, some place to talk in is desired before the center was built. Consequently, the benefit of a center to community life are harder to measure than its economy profits.
In brief, for the convenient, support the local economy and create a healthy communicating, the shopping center take to us ,I firmly approve the plan.

感觉写得不好，就是很多思路都有，就是不知道怎么说话，很多人都有这样毛病，希望牛人指点。感激不尽