delta 上作文题，考前求改

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好久没写了，今天找了个delta的写了一下，题目简单，自己却咋呼了半天几乎写不出来，自我感觉有些空洞，还有就是每段标题与内容有些不服，感觉像跑题了，还有就是结尾有些太仓促。

请大家帮忙看一下吧，谢谢了!

刚才发错版面了..........

Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Subjects such as art, music and drama should be a part of every child's basic education?

A philosopher once said that, "The major differences between human and intelligent-machine is that the existence of art." Those art forms including music and drama can not only offer the choices for people to relax but also help people to develop their personal characters and thus are important for them to express their emotions. So in my view, subjects as art, music and drama are required for basic education at school.

 

 

 

 

First of all, these subjects can give students a sense of relaxation and it will help to advance the learning efficient. When the students immerse in their major subjects for a long time, it is possible that they will feel tired and even boring about the learning and thus changing their subjects to the art may give them some relaxation. It offers a break from tedious and boring work, from stress made by competition and from the penalty of their teachers and parents. Forgetting those troubles in the study and not caring about the tricks concealing in the plots, what you should do is to lean on your back and enjoy the drama. When I am in the university, it is actually the thing I like most.

 

 

 

 

In addition, the art, music and drama are general knowledge to live in the society. Every party and every banquet involves music while watching a drama and attending an art exhibition are also frequent events when you meet your friends. So in order to not reveal a sense of ignorance, the students should be required to attend some art lessons to maintain the preliminary knowledge of the art. What is more, those art, music and drama are sometimes the major interest of some students who may even choose these subjects as their career in their later lives. So it is also important for school especially those primary schools to have these subjects.

 

 

 

 

What's most important is that these subjects are helpful for the development of people's personality and characters. Music can mollify you from sad and saturnine feelings and bring peace to your heart. Art such as paintings and sculptures will reveal you the beautiful aspects of the objects and people. And dramas tell you about the existence of the love and friendship and teach you to cherish them. Only living in such an environment can the students get their characters purified and well-disposed.

 

 

 

 

In a word, I think it is quite important for schools to include the art, music and drama in their basic education.  

 

 

 

 

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