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87 What discover in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

We all describe our world of the last 100 years as continuous developing, where headways in the process of invention, discovers in the scientific area and the introductions of the new technology take place every moment. These developments give us fresh experiences temporally and spatially, impart increasingly more knowledge to us and thus benefit us a lot. Well, during these discovers, in my view, it is the discover and the introduction of television in our daily life that is most beneficial for people in China.

First and foremost, television brings us additional experiences about the things happening in the world which may not be easily or even possibly experienced by ourselves. Combined with video cameras, television reveals the most exciting and alluring events to us. From TV we herald together with Michael Jordan when he threw in the winning shoot at the NBA final. We also took the first glance at the moon by television as Armstrong made human's first step there. These experiences gave chances to our Chinese people to make a good knowledge to the world after a long occluding from outsider in 1960s and broadened the sights of the public.

Also, as the media publication quickly developing, it makes television take an important role in people's daily entertainment. From the Oscar show in the Kodak Theater to the newly happened counter-terrorism action, from the landscape of the Hulun Beier plateau to scenery of the Everest we can see nearly everything we want in TV. With a television, we can listen to some mellifluous music in the concert, watch a favorite movie and even play games with our partner without going out home. In a sense, the television has made our lives more convenient and interesting and changed our living styles to some degree.

Finally, television has become a tool used for the interactive work between government and the public and gave the mass population increasingly more chances to attend to the politic. Leaders always made speeches in television and government uses television to publicize their new decisions which both help to build a more transparent political system. As information transfers quickly by the media, different views can all be seen in TV making people maintain information and form their own view from more angles. It is additionally helpful to China since we have suffered a lot from the deceits of some officials because of the mere information getting channel in last century.

In a word, television plays important role in our daily lives and helps us a lot not only in a more convenient life but also for building the well-completed political system. In my view, television is the discovery in the last 100 years which benefits people in our country most.   
                             
没限时写的，有个mm帮我改过，不过她改的我打不开......                                                                                                                            Words: 455 

steven

HOHO，帮忙顶~

lxzjojo

写得相当不错，从IBT写作的三大要求来看，topic development,language use, organisation楼主都完成得相当好了。个人以为，通篇行文流畅，句式和用词准确性高，除了个别minor的拼写错误外，高分作文的标准是达到了。

我想接下来楼主在作文方面的主要任务，就是把速度提上去，力求在有限的时间内保持这样的写作水准，而且保证有2、3分钟时间来作个全文检查，那么拿高分相信问题不大了。

加油~

　

YAHAA

谢谢