please grade my essay. I were realy apperciate you if you could help me.

Googlets

    

Admittedly challenging makes one brave.
However, do some challenging courses benefit us? No! The challenge course will
cause some serious problems. As I a student I prefer to choose an easier course
that sentiment will be proves and be convincing as the reasons and examples as addressed
blow.

    

 

    

Taking challenging course may make one comprehended
a problem easily even more make one can not understand the course that can be observed
through my personal experience. When I was a primary school student, I started
to take the SAT course. As I went to the class room, every one was the high
school student and cast strange eyes on me. After that, the teacher started to
teach us mathematics which is math level II on SAT subject test. Some concept
was very hard for me to understand as that time especially some specialize
words that make me confused and waste almost all the days on the challenging
course. So through my personal experience, I want to conclude that challenge is
hard for the common student to command.

    

 

    

Another notion that taking challenging
course may rest in low score such as D. score is very important in school
especially in college if one get low score, one may not get the credit that can
be explained through my friends anecdote. My friend majors in engineering and
he wants to select philosophy as his extra course. The difference between the
two subjects is fairly great so there exists a great challenge. One semester
has been past; I asked how much credit has got. He said sadly that “I got a D
in philosophy and C on my major for the philosophy is too hard and I devoted
all my time to learn philosophy but I failed furthermore lacking time cause me
get low score in my major.” My friend’s painful experience implies that
challenging will have serious problem on score.

    

 

    

Furthermore, challenge course may cause
some mental problems too. According to the China Daily reported that “one
student in a noted university in China jumped from the mansion and
died. The police said that he has some mental problem and he could not the high
pressure in the noted university for his score and ranking drop dramatically
that was a sharp contrast when compared with his ranking and score in high
school.” It is the challenge course that causes he got low score and he can not
believe so he can not bear it and cause mental problem for the negative attitude
to the score and he chose to commit suicide. It is a terrible example that can
indicate that how terrible consequence that the challenge course can result in.

    

 

    

Considering all the reasons and examples as
shown above, I demonstrate that challenge can course learning problem, score
problem and mental problem.

Googlets

it is 3am now but i have to wait until some one give me a exactl grade

Googlets

g59490155

hey man ,,, i am here to grade ur essay,, i mean,,, the overall skeleton is good , but sometimes ungrammtical.

so i ll give u a score of 4.

Googlets

thanks for your kindnes, i have got an orention toward how to improve my essay

Googlets

any one can indicate which setnece has blemish?

Googlets

is the longer the essay the more score you can get? i writed 470 words in the real test.

jxjiao

Admittedly challenging(challenging what, not clear) makes one brave. However, do some challenging courses
            (doing some...)benefit(s) us? No! The challenge course will(may) cause some serious problems. As I(omitted) a student I prefer to choose an easier course that sentiment will be proves and be convincing as the reasons and examples as addressed blow.(difficult to undestand)

4

g59490155

not really,, i mean ,, a very obvious mistake that u made is "i writed..." this is unacceptable ,,a silly mistake,,dont make it any more!

扛不住

以下是引用Googlets在2007-1-8 4:16:00的发言：
any one can indicate which setnece has blemish?

blemish总是有的.....

比如第一段，红色表示blemish：蓝色表示mistake。

Admittedly challenging（这个不算是blemish啊，只是说直接用challenge就可以啦，因为它可作名词） makes one brave.

However, do some challenging courses benefit us?（do为助动词，some challenging courses为主语，benefit作动词，us宾语，意为：挑战性课程对我们有益吗？所以这句话没有语法错误，意思也过得去。这个还不算是blemish，呵呵！但如果要说得意思比较清楚，建议：does studying some challenging courses really benefit us? 这里studying some challenging courses 作主语。意为：学习挑战性课程真的对我们有益吗？）

 No! The challenge course （前面用的challenging courses，后面又是challenge course，楼主到底用哪个？blemish呀。）will cause some serious problems.

As I a student（As a student就可以啦，因为后面已经有I啦。） I prefer to choose an easier course
            that
            sentiment（用sentiment在这里表述的意思很模糊，楼主可能是指“情操（贬义词）”或是“看法、观点”之类的。但我想，楼主是说的后者。这里用that是不对的。） will be proves（非常明显的mistake。用proven才是。） and be convincing(好家伙，将来进行时都用上啦！)
            as （用as不对，得用by。）the reasons and examples as addressed blow.（总的来看，这一个句子一团糟，建议楼主重写。建议这么写： I prefer to choose an easier course, and my viewpoint will be proven and will convince those who don't believe it by presenting reasons and examples as addressed below. 或者这么写：I prefer to choose an easier course, my viewpoint of which will be proven and will convince those who don't believe it by presenting reasons and examples as addressed below. 这里的which指代to choose an easier course。）