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Essay prompt: Creatively describe yourself to your MBA classmates. You may use any method to convey your message: words, illustrations, etc. (2 pages)

Like any other test day, I was extremely nervous on August 3, 2003, and had slept poorly the night before. [Uses intriguing lead-in to pique reader's interest] The horror stories I had heard about Master Chang's black belt tests had been gnawing at me since I began my training, thirty-three months earlier. Knowing that this test was going to be even more grueling than that for my red belt, I was amazed at my courage in even showing up.

As I entered the gym, I remembered the beginning, the day I had asked the owner of the fitness equipment store next door what he thought of Master Chang. He said simply, "He offers real martial arts instruction. Most places don't." More than two years of continuous training and countless competitions against other schools' students had convinced me that the storeowner was right. I was part of a training program that had no equal. As my training progressed, I became fascinated by the philosophical underpinnings of our style of martial art, traditional Tae Kwon Do. I learned everything I could about the principles of sustaining determination and focus, maintaining an unassuming demeanor, and constantly remaining attentive to my surroundings so as to better respond to any situation. [Shows his dedication to this hobby has a deeper, "philosophical" side] The milestones of my journey to my black belt were still vivid: my first sparring match, my first successful spinning heel kick, the first time one of the high-ranking students told me my technique looked good. With each new achievement my resolve to complete the journey grew stronger

So, despite our anxieties, here we were, the seven students who had risen through the ranks together, steeling ourselves for the most arduous exhibition we had ever experienced: the black belt test. But as I listened to Master Chang count us through our 1,500-crunch warm-up a feeling of calm fell over me. I was experiencing a pivotal moment in my life, but I had been through such moments before. I recalled the day in June 1997 when I decided to leave Indian Institute of Technology Roorkee to gain a Western business education at University of Michigan. [Use of flashback here shows Ashish's response to Stern's invitation to be creative] I had enjoyed my year at IIT, from the academic awards in my first semester and the invitation to join a prominent student club to making several lifelong friends. University of Michigan's fit with my goals was inescapable, however: an entrepreneurial atmosphere in the American business environment coupled with a substantive natural resources & environment program that would enable me to build my own environmental consulting company after graduating. When Michigan offered me an expedited spot in the semester beginning in January, I knew what I had to do.

At 600 crunches, I ignored the pain in my abdominal muscles and remembered the summer vacations in Ann Arbor I had spent working at Musgrave Enviro Systems. [Effectively uses the stages of the 1,500-crunch warm-up exercise to work in self-revealing examples from different parts of his life] I decided to work for Musgrave, a local environmental consultancy, because it would give me a working knowledge of environmental consulting. At Musgrave I learned how to do work in an analytical laboratory and gained an understanding of wastewater treatment and solid waste management as well as familiarity with local environmental regulations. Moreover, I was able to interact with environmental consultants, engineers, concerned citizens, corporate executives, and government officials-the dramatis personae of the industry. Dealing personally with all of these individuals showed me what they were like, what their jobs demanded, and how they responded to inevitable changes and problems. This six-month apprenticeship became not only a foundation but also a prerequisite for my career with my startup, New Earth Services, a colloquium on the art and science of environmental consulting.

At 1,200 crunches the pain and fatigue were harder to ignore, but I focused on the day two years before when I had stood glowing triumphantly in a reclaimed greenfield site outside Flint, Michigan. As I waited for Bundy Motors' attorneys to arrive for the final handover ceremony I reflected on the deal about to crystallize, my most significant to date. The Environmental Protection Agency's ruling against Bundy had vindicated New Earth Services' study of the hazards posed by the old Bundy facility and opened the door for a public buy-out of the site for remediation as a public park. My in-depth analysis concluded that there was sufficient equity in the deal to turn a profit and cash out investors. The deal made headlines in the local press and doubled New Earth Services' business. Standing there scanning the early-spring grass, I felt a surge of pride at my accomplishment.

At 1,500 crunches, it was time to leave my life's pivotal moments behind and face my latest one: Master Chang. In a grueling four-hour marathon we were required to perform every strike, block, form, and board break we had learned before finally sparring with multiple attackers. Both our physical and mental stamina were tested as we threw unremitting combinations of kicks and punches with little time to stop and regain equilibrium. When fatigue brought me to the verge of full collapse during a flurry of push-ups, I fixed my mind on the number "10"-the percentage of students who ultimately earned their black belts from Master Chang-and rode through the exhaustion.

Three weeks later Master Chang presented me with a black belt before the entire advanced class. My martial arts career has taught me the same lesson as my entrepreneurial environmental consulting career: with dedication and determination anything is attainable. Humble perseverance is superior to impulsive audacity. Cumulative action speaks louder than words. [Effectively draws distinctive and well-earned lessons from his moment of truth and triumph]