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allen0018

When it comes to the issue that whether universities authorities persuade students to live in their dormitories or should we support them to live outside the school in rent house, different people hold different opinions. As for me, I am a definite advocator of letting students live in dormitories.

The security affairs are always the most vital problems to be concerned. Staying in university will mostly ensure the students could avoid some social crimes such as robbery, stealth, etc. while live in a rent house without the needed guards could easily bring some unpredictable problems. Days before, one of my friends told me that his home was stolen just because he forgot to close a window during a hot summer night. The cost of this type of “carelessness” was too expensive for him and within a couple of days he moved back to the dormitory.

Secondly, the atmosphere of study in campus also makes a great contribute to my choice. There are so many instruments can be used for learning, such as computer lab, library, and study room. For students who found some problems they can not understand, it is so easy to find out a roommate to settle the problems for them.

Last but not least, it will be unbelievable for us to ignore the fundamental function of a dormitory. Living in a dormitory, the chance of communicating with your roommates will sharply increase via talking about the assignments, the sports events, and so on. And this will be so important for making friends. “Friends are treasure” here goes a comment on the definition on friends from a well know writer. In contrast, take me for example; I once lived out of campus for a semester, and after a short time it turns out things had been hard for me to communicate with others, we suddenly can not find a topic which both of us prefer.

Even though, living out of campus also has its own merits such as can better understand the social affairs, and can force students to change their attitudes to some affairs which do not belong to the tower of ivory. But after we figuring out the advantages such as security guaranteed, the better atmosphere for study, the ideal place for making friends, we can safely draw the conclusion that living in the campus is surly a better choice compared with living out of campus.

hncsxj

魔版用得很熟。注意一些语法错误，比如：

1，while live in a rent house without the needed guards could easily bring some unpredictable problems.

2，But after we figuring out the advantages such as security guaranteed, the better atmosphere for study, the ideal place for making friends, we can safely draw the conclusion that living in the campus is surly a better choice compared with living out of campus.

最后，注意词汇的多样性。

good luck!

enjoylife517

以下是引用hncsxj在2005-10-13 10:12:00的发言：

魔版用得很熟。注意一些语法错误，比如：

1，while live in a rent house without the needed guards could easily bring some unpredictable problems.

2，But after we figuring out the advantages such as security guaranteed, the better atmosphere for study, the ideal place for making friends, we can safely draw the conclusion that living in the campus is surly a better choice compared with living out of campus.

最后，注意词汇的多样性。

good luck!

Great!

Thanks Bro!