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jackq

012 Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When people travel to new places, many of them like to visit museums. There are many reasons why people like to do so. According to my understanding, I consider most of them have the following reasons.

The foremost reason is about efficiency. Instead of staying a place for a couple of months, regular visitors only have a few days to stay at a new place. Usually, a new place usually exerts many attractions to travelers, which are impossible for travelers to cover in a short period of vacation. A decision of where are the places to go and where to go first become a first thing to be settled when visitors come to a new place. Museums, in helping visitors to make their very first decisions, are the places that usually can provide very helpful guidance. Since museums preserve precious pieces of local attractions and history, they are ultimate guides for visitors, which will help them build the lists of attractions to go, personalized on their own interests. In such a way, a visit of a new place will become enjoyable to new visitors.

The second reason to visit museums at a new place is that museums give travelers as much as possible of local experience that they can get from a short visit. Local museums usually have complete collections, which are of great deal of local culture value. No matter what travelers like to know more about, history, culture or nature, there are always various types of museums available. Moreover, a visit to museums are always accompanied with plentiful explanation and instructions, either conducted by museum staffs or by computerized multimedia systems, even in their mother tongues. Through this guidance that museums provided, visitors can get much more information of a new place.

From what have been discussed above, considering the limited time that a traveler have in a short trip in a new place, and the rich information of local history and culture, museums are very necessary places for tourists to be visited at a new place.

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fjmaple

总体感觉不错！5分+

When people travel to new places, many of them like to visit museums. There are many reasons why people like to do so. According to my understanding, I consider most of them have the following reasons.

The foremost reason is about efficiency. Instead of staying a place for a couple of months, regular visitors only have a few days to stay at a new place. Usually, a new place usually exerts many attractions to travelers, which are impossible for travelers to cover in a short period of vacation. A decision of where are the places to go and where to go first become (the) first thing to be settled when visitors come to a new place. Museums, in helping visitors to make their very first decisions, are the places that usually can provide very helpful guidance. Since museums preserve precious pieces of local attractions and history, they are ultimate guides for visitors, which will help them build the lists of attractions to go, personalized on their own interests. In such a way, a visit of a new place will become enjoyable to new visitors.

The second reason to visit museums at a new place is that museums give travelers as much as possible of local experience that they can get from a short visit. Local museums usually have complete collections, which are of great deal of local culture value. No matter what travelers like to know more about, history, culture or nature, there are always various types of museums available. Moreover,( a visit to museums are ) (词态有问题)always accompanied with plentiful explanation and instructions, either conducted by museum staffs or by computerized multimedia systems, even in their mother tongues. Through this guidance that museums provided, visitors can get much (more 没有比较对象，还是不要more) information of a new place.

From what have been discussed above, considering the limited time that a traveler have in a short trip in a new place, and the rich information of local history and culture, museums are very necessary places for tourists to （visit 就可以了） be visited at a new place.

开头不太好，感觉，如果更换一中引题方式会更好。楼主喜欢用比较级，在没有比较对象的时候，还是少用。虽然有点清楚，可是还是不符合语法。还有一处more,其实还是不用好，个人感觉。

jackq

多谢！

shellyaaa

提供我的写作思路：

原因2个

1 人们选择去一个新的地方，出发点通常是那个地方有著名的musium。 举个例子

2 musium helps the traveller better know the new place (history culture and art）

jackq

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