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andyskin11

27It has recently been announced that a new movies theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

In the modern society, many people would like to see a movie, especially in a new theater. However, if facing the question that building a new movie theater in our neighborhood, there are many people who think that it is not a good idea. I would probably follow the contemporary trend and oppose to build a big theater in my community. In the following essay, I would like to provide some reasons to support my viewpoint.

First of all, traffic congestion is the most important problem that a fascinating theater will attract many people from other towns. Our streets are very narrow, with parking on both sides. More cars traveling through our neighborhood could cause a lot of congestion. There are few garages attached to our houses, so we need to find parking spaces on roads. If the new theater is built, we will be competing those spaces with the movie patrons. Don't you want to spend a lot of time finding a parking space for a movie?

Another main reason I disagree with building a new theater in our neighborhood is that noise caused by cars people who had seen the movie drive to go home at midnight. For instance, many movies end late at night, and then people who go out the theater talk about the movie loudly and fire their cars noisily. The sound will interrupt some persons who have slept in our neighborhood at night. If you can see that insomnia is a misery thing, you can understand it more deeply.

Admittedly, there are also some advantages of building a modern theater, such as increasing the business of the community, and bringing fashionable entertainment to my town. Nevertheless, there is not enough space to build a big theater in our neighborhood and there are more drawbacks of building a movie theater than the merits of that. So the conclusion is the most obvious.

Based on the discussion, I oppose to build a new movie theater in our neighborhood because of the limited space for parking and the good quality of neighborhood. In fact, I prefer to build a sport park as soon as possible.

flowersforzoe

以下是引用andyskin11在2005-8-25 17:07:00的发言：

27It has recently been announced that a new movies theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

In the modern society, many people would like to see a movie, especially in a new theater. However, if facing the question that building a new movie theater in our neighborhood, there are many people who think that it is not a good idea. (Perhaps you could avoid using THERE BE in this way)I would probably follow the contemporary trend (Well, what is the trend?)and oppose to build a big theater in my community. In the following essay, I would like to provide some reasons to support my viewpoint.(Even if there is no mistake in grammer, the beginning is a little awkward-sounding. For example, why MODERN SOCIETY is related to watching movies in a new theater? )

First of all, traffic congestion is the most important problem that a fascinating theater will attract many people from other towns. Our streets are very narrow, with parking on both sides. More cars traveling through our neighborhood could cause a lot of congestion. There are few garages attached to our houses, so we need to find parking spaces on roads. If the new theater is built, we will be competing those spaces with the movie patrons. Don't you want to spend a lot of time finding a parking space for a movie?

Another main reason I disagree with building a new theater in our neighborhood is that noise caused by cars people who had seen the movie drive to go home at midnight. For instance, many movies end late at night, and then people who go out the theater talk about the movie loudly and fire their cars noisily. The sound will interrupt some persons who have slept in our neighborhood at night. If you can see that insomnia is a misery thing, you can understand it more deeply.

Admittedly, there are also some advantages of building a modern theater, such as increasing the business of the community, and bringing fashionable entertainment to my town. Nevertheless, there is not enough space to build a big theater in our neighborhood and there are more drawbacks of building a movie theater than the merits of that. So the conclusion is the most obvious.

Based on the discussion, I oppose to build a new movie theater in our neighborhood because of the limited space for parking and the good quality of neighborhood. In fact, I prefer to build a sport park as soon as possible.

Dear andyskin11,

It is a clearly written essay. However, the reasons you provided are not pursuasive enough.Actually, if we put your essay in a simple word, you only take into account of the cars from other communities. Could you reckon on other elements, especially from the perspective of your own town?

Good luck.

Zoe

andyskin11

thank your suggestions,I will remeber these demerits before attending the test.thanks again..