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红脸蛋

Q: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

The problem of heavy traffic jams has become a big headache for many countries and China is of no exception. A hot debate has been prevalent over the opinion that our government should give priority to improving roads and highways or improving our public transportation. As far as I am concerned, I would side with the latter for the following specific reasons.

The main reason why I advocate public transportation is that it is indispensable for the majority of citizens. Since owning a private vehicle means high cost of insurance, gasoline and maintenance, only a limited proportion of the city-dwellers can afford it. However, compared with the premium of private cars, public transportation is relatively cheap. Thus, a developed public transportation system is an ideally economical way for the mass.

In addition, greater use of public transportation causes less air pollution and will keep the environment cleaner. Better public transportation systems, including buses, trains and subways, will encourage people to prefer them rather than drive their own cars. It is evident that less cars emit less exhaust gases containing several harmful components.

Finally, public transportation means a far more efficient use of fuel. For example, the fuel exhausted by a bus, which carries 60 people, only accounts for 30% of which exhausted by 60 individual cars driving the same route.

As a matter of fact, there is a drawback in public transportation: it will bring inconvenience to those who live or work far away from bus stops. Nevertheless, these can be compensated by its advantages. So in comparison with improvement of roads and highways, putting an emphasis on public transportation is absolutely a wise choice.

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-4-19 23:43:34编辑过]

pengstone

以下是引用红脸蛋在2005-4-19 0:09:00的发言：

Q: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

The problem of heavy traffic jams has become a big headache for many countries and China is of no exception. A hot debate has been prevalent over the opinion that our government should give priority to improving roads and highways or improving our public transportation. As far as I am concerned, I would side with the latter for the following specific reasons.

The main reason why I advocate public transportation is that it is indispensable for the majority of citizens. Since owning a private vehicle means high cost of insurance, gasoline and maintenance, only a limited proportion of the city-dwellers can afford it. However, compared with the premium of private cars, public transportation is relatively cheap. Thus, a developed public transportation system is an ideally economical way for the mass.

In addition, greater use of public transportation causes less air pollution and will keep the environment cleaner. Better public transportation systems, including buses, trains and subways, will encourage people to prefer them （感觉有点怪，不如直接写take them）rather than drive their own cars. It is evident that less cars emit less exhaust gases containing several harmful components.

Finally, public transportation means a far more efficient use of fuel. For example, the fuel exhausted by a bus, which carries 60 people, only accounts for 30% of which exhausted by 60 individual cars driving the same route.

As a matter of fact, there is a drawback in public transportation: it will bring inconvenience to those who live or work far away from bus stops. Nevertheless, these can be compensated by its advantages. So in comparison with improvement of roads and highways, putting an emphasis on public transportation is absolutely a wise choice. 最终的结论建议另起一段。

david_he

Q: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

已经是6分作文，吹毛求疵挑了点毛病，不知对不对。还请再改后的文章上进一步修改：

感觉people,city-dwellers,citizens,individuals，the mass替换的比较好;transportation/vehicle/cars替换比较好;of no exception好！

The problem of heavy traffic jams(直接用Traffic jam，否则罗嗦) has become a big headache(problem) for(in) many countries and（，） China is of no exception（好句子of no exception）（此句亦可改为In most parts of the world, traffic is already unfavorable and will probably become even more unfavorable in the future，and China is of no exception标准的看上去很美的废话，from NCE4） . A hot debate has been prevalent over the opinion that our government should give priority to improving roads and highways or improving our public transportation.（China government is confronted two options: one is to improve roads and highways, and the other is to improve our public transportation.更清晰,二选一题目用的模版）。 As far as I am concerned, I would side with the latter for the following specific reasons.

The main reason why I advocate public transportation is that it is indispensable for the (可加vast) majority of citizens(这个模版一般，而且本句绕口，可改为The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that public transportation is indispensable for the vast majority of citizens ). Since owning a private vehicle means (加a) high cost of insurance, gasoline and maintenance, only a(可加relatively) limited proportion of the city-dwellers can afford it. However, compared with the premium(premium是否合适?，可否改成cost) of (owning) private cars, (加入taking )public transportation is relatively cheap. Thus, （应加入to take/taking ）a developed public transportation system is an ideally（好！） economical way for the mass.( taking .. system …is a way/或者system is tools to commute主语和宾语应该对称)

In addition, greater（可换乘wider） use of public transportation causes less air pollution and will keep the environment cleaner（greater use of public transportation promises less air pollution and cleaner environment ） . Better(可以改成well-developed或advanced ,better , good, well这些词不好。) public transportation systems, including buses, trains and subways（个人感觉bus, train不用复数）, will encourage people to prefer them rather than drive their own cars(?). It is evident that less cars emit less exhaust gases containing several harmful components( the less cars, the less exhausted gases).

Finally, public transportation means（上文已经用了，可改成contributes to ） a far more efficient use of fuel. For example, the fuel exhausted by a bus, which carries 60 people(换乘passengers), only accounts for 30% of which（what is ） exhausted by 60 individual cars driving (in) the same route.

As a matter of fact, there is a drawback in public transportation: it will bring inconvenience to those who live or work far away from bus stops. Nevertheless, these（it） can be compensated by its advantages(the advantages of public transportation carry more weight than  its disadvantage). So in comparison with (第一段已经用了compared with,可以换成Instead of )improvement of roads and highways, putting an emphasis on public transportation is absolutely a wise choice.(So, it is absolutely a wise choice to put more emphasis on developing public transportation than improving roads and highways. In fact, not only do I prefer to develop public transportation, but also prefer to develop it as fast as possible呵呵，填句废话)

改的八股一点：

Q: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

In most parts of the world, traffic is already unfavorable today and may probably become even more unfavorable in the future. Many governments are confronted two options: one is to improve roads and highways; the other is to improve public transportation, such as buses, trains, or subways. Different people hold different opinions due to different backgrounds. As far as I am concerned, I will side with the later instead of the former. In the following discussion, I will reason and provide concrete evidence to support my viewpoint.

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that public transportation is indispensable for the vast majority of citizens. Since owning a private vehicle means a relatively high cost of gasoline, insurance, and maintenance, only a small proportion of city-dwellers can afford it. Nevertheless, it is much more inexpensive to take public transportation than to drive a private car. Hence, considering the mass’s interest, governments should spend more money on improving public transportation.

In addition, more public transportation promises less air pollution and cleaner environment. The more advanced the transportation, the less city-dwellers drive their own cars and, hence, the less exhausted gas. If you can see that, you will understand my point more deeply.

Last but not least, public transportation contributes to a far more efficient use of fuel. A good example may be found in the case that the fuel exhausted by a bus carrying 60 passengers accounts for no more than 30 percent of what is consumed by 60 individual cars in the same route. If this example is accurate and persuasive, it is reasonable to conclude that developing public transportation may help solve the global energy crisis.

Admittedly, it may be inconvenient for those who work or live far away from bus station to take public transportation. However, the advantages of developing public transportation carry more weight than disadvantage. So, the most striking conclusion is obvious that governments should develop public transportation.

In a world, due to the above-mentioned reasons, which sometimes intertwine to an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we can safely reach the conclusion that governments should invest more money on improving public transportation. In fact, not only do I prefer to develop public transportation, but also prefer to develop it as soon as possible.

brace

以下是引用david_he在2005-4-28 10:58:00的发言：

Q: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

已经是6分作文，吹毛求疵挑了点毛病，不知对不对。还请再改后的文章上进一步修改：

感觉people,city-dwellers,citizens,individuals，the mass替换的比较好;transportation/vehicle/cars替换比较好;of no exception好！

The problem of heavy traffic jams(直接用Traffic jam，否则罗嗦) has become a big headache(problem) for(in) many countries and（，） China is of no exception（好句子of no exception）（此句亦可改为In most parts of the world, traffic is already unfavorable and will probably become even more unfavorable in the future，and China is of no exception标准的看上去很美的废话，from NCE4） . A hot debate has been prevalent over the opinion that our government should give priority to improving roads and highways or improving our public transportation.（China government is confronted two options: one is to improve roads and highways, and the other is to improve our public transportation.更清晰,二选一题目用的模版）。 As far as I am concerned, I would side with the latter for the following specific reasons.

The main reason why I advocate public transportation is that it is indispensable for the (可加vast) majority of citizens(这个模版一般，而且本句绕口，可改为The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that public transportation is indispensable for the vast majority of citizens ). Since owning a private vehicle means (加a) high cost of insurance, gasoline and maintenance, only a(可加relatively) limited proportion of the city-dwellers can afford it. However, compared with the premium(premium是否合适?，可否改成cost) of (owning) private cars, (加入taking )public transportation is relatively cheap. Thus, （应加入to take/taking ）a developed public transportation system is an ideally（好！） economical way for the mass.( taking .. system …is a way/或者system is tools to commute主语和宾语应该对称)

In addition, greater（可换乘wider） use of public transportation causes less air pollution and will keep the environment cleaner（greater use of public transportation promises less air pollution and cleaner environment ） . Better(可以改成well-developed或advanced ,better , good, well这些词不好。) public transportation systems, including buses, trains and subways（个人感觉bus, train不用复数）, will encourage people to prefer them rather than drive their own cars(?). It is evident that less cars emit less exhaust gases containing several harmful components( the less cars, the less exhausted gases).

Finally, public transportation means（上文已经用了，可改成contributes to ） a far more efficient use of fuel. For example, the fuel exhausted by a bus, which carries 60 people(换乘passengers), only accounts for 30% of which（what is ） exhausted by 60 individual cars driving (in) the same route.

As a matter of fact, there is a drawback in public transportation: it will bring inconvenience to those who live or work far away from bus stops. Nevertheless, these（it） can be compensated by its advantages(the advantages of public transportation carry more weight than  its disadvantage). So in comparison with (第一段已经用了compared with,可以换成Instead of )improvement of roads and highways, putting an emphasis on public transportation is absolutely a wise choice.(So, it is absolutely a wise choice to put more emphasis on developing public transportation than improving roads and highways. In fact, not only do I prefer to develop public transportation, but also prefer to develop it as fast as possible呵呵，填句废话)

改的八股一点：

Q: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

In most parts of the world, traffic is already unfavorable today and may probably become even more unfavorable in the future. Many governments are confronted two options: one is to improve roads and highways; the other is to improve public transportation, such as buses, trains, or subways. Different people hold different opinions due to different backgrounds. As far as I am concerned, I will side with the later instead of the former. In the following discussion, I will reason and provide concrete evidence to support my viewpoint.

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that public transportation is indispensable for the vast majority of citizens. Since owning a private vehicle means a relatively high cost of gasoline, insurance, and maintenance, only a small proportion of city-dwellers can afford it. Nevertheless, it is much more inexpensive to take public transportation than to drive a private car. Hence, considering the mass’s interest, governments should spend more money on improving public transportation.

In addition, more public transportation promises less air pollution and cleaner environment. The more advanced the transportation, the less city-dwellers drive their own cars and, hence, the less exhausted gas. If you can see that, you will understand my point more deeply.

Last but not least, public transportation contributes to a far more efficient use of fuel. A good example may be found in the case that the fuel exhausted by a bus carrying 60 passengers accounts for no more than 30 percent of what is consumed by 60 individual cars in the same route. If this example is accurate and persuasive, it is reasonable to conclude that developing public transportation may help solve the global energy crisis.

Admittedly, it may be inconvenient for those who work or live far away from bus station to take public transportation. However, the advantages of developing public transportation carry more weight than disadvantage. So, the most striking conclusion is obvious that governments should develop public transportation.

In a world, due to the above-mentioned reasons, which sometimes intertwine to an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we can safely reach the conclusion that governments should invest more money on improving public transportation. In fact, not only do I prefer to develop public transportation, but also prefer to develop it as soon as possible.

dancerme814

作文都不知该如何下笔

如此好文，偶已收藏下了

pengstone

以下是引用david_he在2005-4-28 10:58:00的发言：

Q: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

已经是6分作文，吹毛求疵挑了点毛病，不知对不对。还请再改后的文章上进一步修改：

感觉people,city-dwellers,citizens,individuals，the mass替换的比较好;transportation/vehicle/cars替换比较好;of no exception好！

The problem of heavy traffic jams(直接用Traffic jam，否则罗嗦) has become a big headache(problem) for(in) many countries and（，） China is of no exception（好句子of no exception）（此句亦可改为In most parts of the world, traffic is already unfavorable and will probably become even more unfavorable in the future，and China is of no exception标准的看上去很美的废话，from NCE4） . A hot debate has been prevalent over the opinion that our government should give priority to improving roads and highways or improving our public transportation.（China government is confronted two options: one is to improve roads and highways, and the other is to improve our public transportation.更清晰,二选一题目用的模版）。 As far as I am concerned, I would side with the latter for the following specific reasons.

The main reason why I advocate public transportation is that it is indispensable for the (可加vast) majority of citizens(这个模版一般，而且本句绕口，可改为The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that public transportation is indispensable for the vast majority of citizens ). Since owning a private vehicle means (加a) high cost of insurance, gasoline and maintenance, only a(可加relatively) limited proportion of the city-dwellers can afford it. However, compared with the premium(premium是否合适?，可否改成cost) of (owning) private cars, (加入taking )public transportation is relatively cheap. Thus, （应加入to take/taking ）a developed public transportation system is an ideally（好！） economical way for the mass.( taking .. system …is a way/或者system is tools to commute主语和宾语应该对称)

In addition, greater（可换乘wider） use of public transportation causes less air pollution and will keep the environment cleaner（greater use of public transportation promises less air pollution and cleaner environment ） . Better(可以改成well-developed或advanced ,better , good, well这些词不好。) public transportation systems, including buses, trains and subways（个人感觉bus, train不用复数）, will encourage people to prefer them rather than drive their own cars(?). It is evident that less cars emit less exhaust gases containing several harmful components( the less cars, the less exhausted gases).

Finally, public transportation means（上文已经用了，可改成contributes to ） a far more efficient use of fuel. For example, the fuel exhausted by a bus, which carries 60 people(换乘passengers), only accounts for 30% of which（what is ） exhausted by 60 individual cars driving (in) the same route.

As a matter of fact, there is a drawback in public transportation: it will bring inconvenience to those who live or work far away from bus stops. Nevertheless, these（it） can be compensated by its advantages(the advantages of public transportation carry more weight than  its disadvantage). So in comparison with (第一段已经用了compared with,可以换成Instead of )improvement of roads and highways, putting an emphasis on public transportation is absolutely a wise choice.(So, it is absolutely a wise choice to put more emphasis on developing public transportation than improving roads and highways. In fact, not only do I prefer to develop public transportation, but also prefer to develop it as fast as possible呵呵，填句废话)

改的八股一点：

Q: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

In most parts of the world, traffic is already unfavorable today and may probably become even more unfavorable in the future. Many governments are confronted two options: one is to improve roads and highways; the other is to improve public transportation, such as buses, trains, or subways. Different people hold different opinions due to different backgrounds. As far as I am concerned, I will side with the later instead of the former. In the following discussion, I will reason and provide concrete evidence to support my viewpoint.

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that public transportation is indispensable for the vast majority of citizens. Since owning a private vehicle means a relatively high cost of gasoline, insurance, and maintenance, only a small proportion of city-dwellers can afford it. Nevertheless, it is much more inexpensive to take public transportation than to drive a private car. Hence, considering the mass’s interest, governments should spend more money on improving public transportation.

In addition, more public transportation promises less air pollution and cleaner environment. The more advanced the transportation, the less city-dwellers drive their own cars and, hence, the less exhausted gas. If you can see that, you will understand my point more deeply.

Last but not least, public transportation contributes to a far more efficient use of fuel. A good example may be found in the case that the fuel exhausted by a bus carrying 60 passengers accounts for no more than 30 percent of what is consumed by 60 individual cars in the same route. If this example is accurate and persuasive, it is reasonable to conclude that developing public transportation may help solve the global energy crisis.

Admittedly, it may be inconvenient for those who work or live far away from bus station to take public transportation. However, the advantages of developing public transportation carry more weight than disadvantage. So, the most striking conclusion is obvious that governments should develop public transportation.

In a world, due to the above-mentioned reasons, which sometimes intertwine to an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we can safely reach the conclusion that governments should invest more money on improving public transportation. In fact, not only do I prefer to develop public transportation, but also prefer to develop it as soon as possible.

强！