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wanggang0411

8月15号 独立写作 题目:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today more likely to give time and effort improving the world than young people were at the past.
正文:
When it comes to the question whether young people today are more likely to give time and effort improving the world than those in the past, some people believe that it is true, while other people stands on the opposite side. From various factors considered, I believe that several factors in nowadays do give more opportunities for today's young people to improve our world.
First, I believe that the quality of life nowadays should be considered the essential basement for the creation and improvement, and the reason is quite simple that when the basic requirements such as food and security have been full filled, people could have more energy to consider other things such as improving our world. In contrast, if some young people are still struggling on the bread earning, how can they have time to consider other things? I saw this phenomenon on my parent's young age, since the family need more people to work outside to earn bread, my parents go to work very young, and they have no chance to even think about improving the world, the most important thing is earning bread. Thus, considering our current situation, we could provide more resources not only the food but also our supports to our young generation to give more time and chance to think about how to improve this world.
Second, the fast development of technology has given our young generation more ways to know this world and to get knowledge to improve this world. From the television, young people could acknowledge that there are still lots of poverty in this world, not only in our country but also on somewhere in this world. When they got such information, I believe the motivation to improve the world, to save the poor people in this world, and to be a volunteer to help other people will spring. And on the other side, the technology gives people more ways to get the knowledge they need to make their idea come true.
Admittedly, there were many great people in the history improved our world a lots in their young age, but I still believe that along with the evolvement of human beings today's circumstance would give more support to our young generation to know this world and to improve this world.
From all factors mentioned above, I believe that our world will become better and better by the efforts of the generation and generation of ourselves.

ChristinaJuris

对不起啊楼主，改得晚了发得晚了。

wanggang0411

10月5日 综合 TPO30

The passage and the lecture discuss theauthenticity of a story that the Greeks could defend themselves with creativeweapon 'burning mirror' from attack by the Roman navy over 2,200 years ago. Thepassage claims that this story is un-trustable and believes that the Greeks ofSyracuse didn't have the capacity to build such device, while the lectureargues that claim made in reading passage is wrong, and confidents that it isreasonable for the ancient Greeks to build such weapon.

In the first place, the author asserts thatthe ancient Greeks didn't have the technical ability to build such mirror,because the size of mirror needed to set ships on fire would have to beextremely wide with precise parabolic curvature. In contrast, the speakerbelieves that they did have such ability to build such big mirror, because theancient Greeks had the technology and mathematical knowledge to assembleseveral individual cooper mirrors into a large one.

Besides, the lecture states that becausethe ancient ships were not only made by wood but also made by stick substancenamed 'Pitch' which could be on fired by burning mirror in seconds, and thefire could spread to the other side of the ship and even when it is moving,contradicting what is stated in the reading passage that because it takes longtime to set the woods on fire, burning mirror is a completely impractical andineffective way during the war.

Finally, the author points out that there wasno reason for the ancient Greek to build burning mirror, since compared withflaming arrows, the burning mirror has no advantage, while the speakerindicates that the Roman soldiers were familiar with traditional weapons andready to deal with the fire made by flaming arrows. In contrast, the fire madeby burning mirror is quite surprising and difficult to be detected by the Romansoldiers.

Thus, the contents in the reading passageare totally disrupted by the speaker, who has completely different ideas on thetopic made in the reading passage.

wanggang0411

pengxudong 发表于 2013-9-14 03:22
等我改完了才发现我看错我要批改的对象了，不过反正也改完了，就上传把
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Hi, pengxudong, I just write the whole passage after learning your review. I would so appreciate if you could review it again.
Thank you so much.

暴风雨小圆

pengxudong 发表于 2013-9-14 03:22
等我改完了才发现我看错我要批改的对象了，不过反正也改完了，就上传把
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wanggag的独立应该是我修改，下个独立我帮你修改吧0。0 as a return

pengxudong

wanggang0411 发表于 2013-9-13 11:50
9月12日 独立: 是否同意政府不应该给艺术家(musician, filmmaker, artist...) 任何 financial support.

等我改完了才发现我看错我要批改的对象了，不过反正也改完了，就上传把

pengxudong

wanggang0411 发表于 2013-9-12 15:35
9月11日 独立写作
父母應該多陪孩子玩遊戲或體育運動，還是陪孩子做和學校學習有關的事情

有什么问题欢迎讨论

wanggang0411

9月12日 综合

TPO 7
The passage casts doubt on the probability that wood companies in the United States will adopt ecologically friendly practices to receive the ecocertification. However, the lecture relieves such concern by refuting the evidence the passage provides one by one.

To begin with, the lecture believes that the customers in United States do have the ability to distinguish the authorities among different certifications, specifically for these ecocertificationes issued by independent organizations. Whereas the passage holds an opposite view, with the consideration that so many cheating or susceptible labels are existed in American market.

Furthermore, the passage concerns that the additional cost will make companies losing customers. However the lecture points that the prince margin of American customer is larger than that considered by passage. Thus, if the price of certificated products is not higher too much than other products, then the customers will be interested on other factors such as ecological friendly.

Finally, regarding the motivation of American companies to keep up with the developments in the rest of the world, the lecture argues conclusively that if the American would fall behind other foreign companies, then by the interesting on the ecological products, American customers will buy the foreign ecocertificated products, which local American companies could not provide.

wanggang0411

9月12日 独立: 是否同意政府不应该给艺术家(musician, filmmaker, artist...) 任何 financial support.


正文: 写的好好慢啊~~~~什么时候才能上400啊.....谁能提供个高端大气上档次的万能模板, 我背背呢~~~

Regarding the question whether government should suspend thefinancial support for artist such as musician and filmmaker, some peopledisagree with this proposal, while others stand on the opposite side. From my personalperspective, I believe that various factors should be taken into account beforewe make any judgment.

To begin with, the economic development and living standardof artists are various in different countries, in different areas and evengenerations, therefore, government should make the decision based oncomprehensive investigation. For example, the film industry is quite matured inmy country, and the whole ecology is healthy and flourishing. Everybody goes tocinema each weekend, so director could make any their idea come true withoutconsidering any financial factors, and, in turn, actors, male and female, couldfind job easily, and most of them live in big houses and drive luxurycars.  Therefore it doesn't make sensefor government in my country to further supports film industry.

On the other hand, compared with the flourish in filmindustry, musical industry suffered the harshest winter this decade. By thelack of article education, people rarely listens classic music, not evenmention to go the theater. While less interest on classic music does notnecessarily mean more customer in popular music. Popular music is alsosuffering this decade because people could download everything they want from internetfor free. Therefore, I strongly disagree with the proposal about suspendingfinancial support for artists, in contrast, much more efforts and resourceshould be provided to support those artists who are struggling on theircareers.

Admittedly, there are many other aspects, such as educationfees and elder insurance should deserve more attention by government. In mycountry, many students in rural part are still studying in the camp, and manyelders are still living below the social living standard.

Nevertheless, the fact that parts of people in my countryneed help should not prevent government from taking care others who are also strugglingto survive, and placing a certain amount of reliance on the notion that theutility of resources need to be balanced.

苦大仇深的Lexi

wanggang0411 发表于 2013-9-12 22:08
9月11日 综合 TPO6
The passage refers several evidence to compare the value between traditional encyc ...

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