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发表于 2013-5-6 10:57:41 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |正序浏览 |阅读模式
之前发了很多作文,还没有人帮忙批改,自己也不知道怎么在这个小分队里占座,只好征集大家加入我们的分队互批行列,希望志同道合者可以相互帮助,共同进步哦!

下面是我今天写的一篇文章,之前还有一些在我其他的贴子里,大家可以关注下~如果能慷慨赐教,本人将感激不尽啊!!求狠批,让暴风雨来得更猛烈些吧
Barron model test 2
Independent writing: pets should be treatedlike family members

  We cansee an increasing tendency for people to raise their own pets lately. It is nota new phenomenon of having pets but a new question for the growing popularity:why do they treat their pets? Do they love them or ignore them? As a lover ofpets, I strongly suggest all of the pet owners should devote their energy andheart to their pets. There are a couple of reasons why I hold this idea.
Most importantly, animal, like human beings, are part of living creaturein nature. They share the same natural resources with us, making theenvironment a lively and colorful place to live in. Thus, they deserve the moreattention and caring. Regarding pets as part of our family shows that we areconcerned about the nature, about our lives and also about our respects for oursurrounding communities. If, someday, we do harm to our pets, we will sufferfrom the consequence in return. For example, usually there is no need to worryabout whether a dog or a cat will bite you, since they are mild and obedient.However, if your inappropriate behaviors, say horrible shouting or rudehitting, irritates them, they will fight back sooner or later. You don’t hopeto end up lying on the bed of a hospital, taking an injection against rabies,will you?
What is more, pets are normally weaker and more vulnerable than wehumans are. In this case, more help and love are required for their health aswell as our better relationship with them. Raising rabbits can be tough fortheir owners, due to their sensitivity to cold temperatures and water. Theywill easily die from a heavy cold if not carefully treated. Also, fish, asanother example, need a comfortable environment to live. Though they can adopt todifferent environments, they are likely to die from hunger. So it is a necessityfor us to feed them regularly.
Generally speaking, pets are our best accompany no matter how we treatthem. But if we could create a harmonious relationship with them, why not make itinto practice? In addition, We are stronger than pets, and consequently weshould pay more attention to them in a way we care about our mom and dad. Thisis not a personal preference, but rather a kind of responsibility for any of usas pet keepers.


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发表于 2013-5-8 15:40:01 | 只看该作者
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