综合写作初笔，求狠批~~~

奇奇齐齐七

In the reading passage, the author states that congestion pricing is an effective solution to traffic jam. However, in the lecture,the speaker entirely denies the statement and uses three specific points to support his idea.


First, contrary to the believe in the passage that congestion pricing can save lots of time, the speaker says that to avoid the congestion fees, people would rather choose to detour, which will be more time-consuming. For example, the delivery service will spend more time on detour in order to save money.


Second, according to the passage, congestion pricing can help improve the area environment. In contrast, the speaker holds the opinion that this can do help in the areas that charge congestion fees, but not in those non-congestion pricing areas. Science most drivers trend to avoid the fees, there will be more noise and air pollution in those non-congestion pricing areas. Therefor, it is not good for the entire area environment.


Finally, the speaker contends that those people cannot afford the fees would switch to take  public transportations, such as the subways, so the government needs to spend lots of money on the maintenance of public transportations, which would exceeds the revenue from congestion fees. This refutes the author's point that the government can use the revenue to construct more roads and bridges.

奇奇齐齐七

单纯从lz的文章来看，写得很不错，speaker和lecturer的观点都相当清晰，而且用词多变，表达得体，虽然也有几处笔误（如second一段中science应为since，trend应为tend…），但是瑕不掩瑜，整体还是很好的。提一点建议吧，如果有时间的话可以加个简单的结尾做一个小总结。另外，开头如果先提一下阅读和听力部分讲了一个什么topic再说两个人分别的观点会更好哦！

-- by 会员 晨依Jacqueline (2012/11/14 17:42:07)

好久不来，已有好心人回复，实在太感谢了~~~建议提得相当好，我还真没考虑到在首段总结topic，谢谢你！！！

晨依Jacqueline

单纯从lz的文章来看，写得很不错，speaker和lecturer的观点都相当清晰，而且用词多变，表达得体，虽然也有几处笔误（如second一段中science应为since，trend应为tend…），但是瑕不掩瑜，整体还是很好的。提一点建议吧，如果有时间的话可以加个简单的结尾做一个小总结。另外，开头如果先提一下阅读和听力部分讲了一个什么topic再说两个人分别的观点会更好哦！

晨依Jacqueline

你好，写综合作文最好可以说明一下题目是哪里的，互改的同学也方便去听一下lecture或者看看reading的部分，给出更好的建议。建议加入写作小分队和大家一起互改作文共同进步哟！在写作小分队大本营占座即可。

奇奇齐齐七

没有好心人来给我指点下么？？